Comment from Asem.inspirations

Exceptional

Good morning, story: It is so good to hear from you again. This free verse poem to me for a dance through loveliness. I could see the beautiful scenery described and the imagery was wonderful. It was all like a heart touching song or a ballet of words. I really enjoy the way you express yourself. It is clear that you do appreciate those long nature walks through the woods and forests or on the beaches and lakes with the mountains in view, the very sceneries of God and his wondrous creations all over. It is beautiful to read it. Thank you for sharing this wonderful poem.

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2017

Thanks so much again for the six star review and all the support estory

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This speaks various and variations in dreams and poet try to find life and the dreams in dimensions to find out sanctity to discover the transcendental philosophy in the realm of living and fit it living thereby; I liked.

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2017

Thank you for the excellent review and all the supportive comments estory

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Hi there;
I enjoyed reading this. I could almost feel the effects of loop poetry with the repeating words - but then I saw they were actually my thoughts looping back and forth among the images you created.

Well done,

~patty~

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2017

Thanks for enjoying this journey through transcendental philosophy, and thanks for all the stars and support estory

Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)

Excellent

In the statues of marble
Where the light in the water
Catches the gold in the stones
In the stillness,
In the quiet contemplation of stones,
Forms, time, stillness, dreams...'
I love your word choices and how you return to the same words again and again, without sounding repetitive, beautiful work, kind regards Meia xx

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2017

Thanks so much for the five star review and all the supporting comments, glad you enjoyed it so much, that was one of my favorite parts as well. estory

Comment from rama devi

Exceptional

This is the most unique free verse meditation poem I've ever read, ym friend. Superb layering of sounds and repeated images. Superb subtle metaphors. Superb meaning and depth. Superb mesmerizing effect. I'd love to hear you read this aloud!


Favorite bits:

Under the stars
Reaching beyond death,
Into clouds of rain
In the roots of grass blades

AND

Our dreams standing still
Within us, like stones,
Entranced in the stillness,
The stillness of meaning,

AND


The ground in which we sit
Becomes grains of sand,

The grains of sand on which we sit
Carry us off into the stillness,

The very stillness of being


Awesome closing!


Simply outstanding.

Warmly, rd

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2017

thanks again for this exceptional review and all the support, I am so glad you enjoyed it so much. this is a little on the experimental side, I tried to create an effect of flashes of images and sounds bleeding through each other, to raise the plain of consciousness to another level, in which the spirit is perceived in all things. estory

reply by rama devi on 22-Nov-2017

It does have that effect! Loved it! :p)))

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hi there, I've never heard of the form before, but I liked what I read very much. It is a lovely free verse that painted a great imagery in my mind. All the best. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2017

Thanks so much for the excellent review and all the supportive comments estory

Comment from Sharon Haiste

Excellent

This is a good Surrealist Free verse poem.
The story of Transcendence is clear and nicely worded.
This paints a lovely picture.
Well done and thank you for sharing this one with us.
Sharon

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2017

Thanks for the excellent review and all the supportive comments estory