Sorrow
Loop Poetry Contest Submission37 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a well done loop poem where each loop creates a feeling of deeper grief
of the loss of a spouse. I like the dove as a metaphor of a carrier pigeon for the message to God to lessen the grief so the stone heart will crack and feel less alone.
Maybe even find someone in that crowd to start over with.
Congrats on the win.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
This is a well done loop poem where each loop creates a feeling of deeper grief
of the loss of a spouse. I like the dove as a metaphor of a carrier pigeon for the message to God to lessen the grief so the stone heart will crack and feel less alone.
Maybe even find someone in that crowd to start over with.
Congrats on the win.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 21-Nov-2017
Comment from LIJ Red
No wonder you won. Loop poems are touchy about sounding like natural speech, and tougher than they look to make flow smoothly. Exceptional poem.
No wonder you won. Loop poems are touchy about sounding like natural speech, and tougher than they look to make flow smoothly. Exceptional poem.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2017
Comment from kathleenspalding
Wow. A difficult form flawlessly executed. Excellent use of words, artwork, colors and font for a beautiful visual display and read. Great job!
Wow. A difficult form flawlessly executed. Excellent use of words, artwork, colors and font for a beautiful visual display and read. Great job!
Comment Written 20-Nov-2017
Comment from Contests
A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry. |
Comment Written 20-Nov-2017
Comment from robyn corum
I.,
This is such a beautiful poem to describe loneliness. A state of mind that we should be able to easily shake...but simply can't. Wishing/hoping this is mostly fiction--
Favorite lines:
Crowds make me feel more alone,
Alone I'll face your death and then,
Then this heart will turn to stone.
Thanks a bunch!
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
I.,
This is such a beautiful poem to describe loneliness. A state of mind that we should be able to easily shake...but simply can't. Wishing/hoping this is mostly fiction--
Favorite lines:
Crowds make me feel more alone,
Alone I'll face your death and then,
Then this heart will turn to stone.
Thanks a bunch!
Comment Written 18-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Thanks so much for reading and reviewing. I am so glad you liked it. Take care and have a great day.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was a very sad, but beautiful poem, Ida. I've read many poems lately from poets who have just experienced their loved ones passing over, we all have to face it one day. Not that it makes it easier to know that. I've been there, and I know I will again unless I go first this time. This is such a good, well written Loop poem. I wish you good luck in the contest. :) Sandra.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
That was a very sad, but beautiful poem, Ida. I've read many poems lately from poets who have just experienced their loved ones passing over, we all have to face it one day. Not that it makes it easier to know that. I've been there, and I know I will again unless I go first this time. This is such a good, well written Loop poem. I wish you good luck in the contest. :) Sandra.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Hi,
Thanks so much for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your comments. Take care and have a great day.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Idamarty
= This is such an excellent poem on sorrow.
= Your words really do 'loop' around and roll down the page as I read.
= Gorgeous artwork as well. Together, they make a beautiful entry.
= Good luck in the contest.
Cheers, J
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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
Hi, Idamarty
= This is such an excellent poem on sorrow.
= Your words really do 'loop' around and roll down the page as I read.
= Gorgeous artwork as well. Together, they make a beautiful entry.
= Good luck in the contest.
Cheers, J
*** Happy Holidays! ***!
(*>*) A Smile Is A Frown Upside Town (*>*)
Comment Written 18-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Hi Jacqueline,
Thanks so much for reading and reviewing and for the six stars! I truly appreciate them and I am so glad you liked my poem. Take care and have a great day.
Comment from Irish Rain
This is just so lovely, with stunning artwork. Crowds can certainly make the lonely even lonelier. The ending is so very tender and touching. Great entry, blessings...
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
This is just so lovely, with stunning artwork. Crowds can certainly make the lonely even lonelier. The ending is so very tender and touching. Great entry, blessings...
Comment Written 17-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Hi,
Thanks so much for reading and reviewing. I am so glad you liked my poem. Take care and have a great day.
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You too!!
Comment from DALLAS01
What a perfect piece of matching artwork. I have never attempted the loop but you seem to be quite astute at writing them. My :favorite line is:
Disappear amongst the crowds,
Crowds make me feel more alone, I can relate to that.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
What a perfect piece of matching artwork. I have never attempted the loop but you seem to be quite astute at writing them. My :favorite line is:
Disappear amongst the crowds,
Crowds make me feel more alone, I can relate to that.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Hi,
Thanks so much for reading and reviewing. I am so glad you liked my poem. Take care and have a great day.
Comment from Cedar
This is such a beautiful poem. Your rhyming, rhythm and presentation are all perfect. I wish you the best of luck in the contest...Bill
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
This is such a beautiful poem. Your rhyming, rhythm and presentation are all perfect. I wish you the best of luck in the contest...Bill
Comment Written 17-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Hi,
Thanks so much for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your comments and I am so glad you liked it. Take care and have a great day.