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Comment from closetpoetjester
What a beaut pentameter unrhymed jig about the plight of the poor threatened sea lion especially those adorable tiny baby ones. Your vivid descriptions in a tumultuous back and forth between man with harpoon (no fair!!) and beast (teeth only) shows JUST how uneven the damn fight is. Very unsavoury behaviour on man's part.
I think this is most deserved of a sixer. Palpable but strangely palatable. The poem, not the seal meat LOL
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reply by the author on 12-Nov-2017
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What a beaut pentameter unrhymed jig about the plight of the poor threatened sea lion especially those adorable tiny baby ones. Your vivid descriptions in a tumultuous back and forth between man with harpoon (no fair!!) and beast (teeth only) shows JUST how uneven the damn fight is. Very unsavoury behaviour on man's part.
I think this is most deserved of a sixer. Palpable but strangely palatable. The poem, not the seal meat LOL
P
Comment Written 12-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2017
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Thank you, Phillipa, for the terrific review on this. Bill
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Awesome write mate!!
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Bill. I give you a virtual six for this amazing poem which captures the sick violence of those who slaughter nature's magnificent wildlife. Graphically descriptive of the horror. Humans are the most vicious of all creatures. Marilyn
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017
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Hi Bill. I give you a virtual six for this amazing poem which captures the sick violence of those who slaughter nature's magnificent wildlife. Graphically descriptive of the horror. Humans are the most vicious of all creatures. Marilyn
Comment Written 10-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017
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Thanks, Marilyn. Thought I'd end the walrus series on a dramatic note.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Bill
In your poem to me you brought out the true horror of man the true drastic feeling of yours about the unnecessary slaying of the God's creature. Now it look in these lines
as a piercing spike strikes low in front,
the mighty walrus falls upon the slayer.
Is a bitter message to the slayers of innocent animals
Gert
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017
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Hello Bill
In your poem to me you brought out the true horror of man the true drastic feeling of yours about the unnecessary slaying of the God's creature. Now it look in these lines
as a piercing spike strikes low in front,
the mighty walrus falls upon the slayer.
Is a bitter message to the slayers of innocent animals
Gert
Comment Written 10-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017
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Thanks, Gert, for the positive review. Bill
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You are welcome Bill.
Gert
Comment from nomi338
Some will sadly refuse to consider that being human does not necessarily grant you the right to take the life of an animal who is only trying to do what you would naturally do, try to protect the life of your offspring. Who is the true savage?
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017
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Some will sadly refuse to consider that being human does not necessarily grant you the right to take the life of an animal who is only trying to do what you would naturally do, try to protect the life of your offspring. Who is the true savage?
Comment Written 10-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017
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People!!!
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Yep. That is how we sometimes roll.
Comment from frogbook
Oh gosh this was really a sad one full of emotion and power. Well written with a really strong subject and a lesson too. A definite favorite.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017
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Oh gosh this was really a sad one full of emotion and power. Well written with a really strong subject and a lesson too. A definite favorite.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017
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Thank you, FB, for the super review. Bill
Comment from pbomar1115
It is sad to read about the hunting and killing of a Walrus since you made the critter a fun. I know it is part of reality that they provide food and other use for the people who lives in their region of the world.
Phillip
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017
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It is sad to read about the hunting and killing of a Walrus since you made the critter a fun. I know it is part of reality that they provide food and other use for the people who lives in their region of the world.
Phillip
Comment Written 10-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017
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Thanks, Phillip
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You're welcome, Bill.
Phillip
Comment from Teri7
Bill, This is a very well written but a very sad poem to me. Why do they have to kill the baby seals or anything like that? Is it supposed to be for food? That seems very cruel to me! Very well written with great wording and the imagery went well with your words. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017
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Bill, This is a very well written but a very sad poem to me. Why do they have to kill the baby seals or anything like that? Is it supposed to be for food? That seems very cruel to me! Very well written with great wording and the imagery went well with your words. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 10-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017
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The baby seals are killed strictly for fur. The carcasses are left to rot. The others are hungered for blubber and tusks.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Bill, this is a powerful and dramatic poem. It left me with a deep impression. The stanza that had the most impact was: a pointed spear intrudes beneath his ear,
he rises to eleven feet and roars;
as a piercing spike strikes low in front
the mighty walrus falls upon the slayer
I liked it a lot although it is such a sad situation. All the best. Ulla :))
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017
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Hi Bill, this is a powerful and dramatic poem. It left me with a deep impression. The stanza that had the most impact was: a pointed spear intrudes beneath his ear,
he rises to eleven feet and roars;
as a piercing spike strikes low in front
the mighty walrus falls upon the slayer
I liked it a lot although it is such a sad situation. All the best. Ulla :))
Comment Written 10-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017
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Thanks, Ulla. I saw a documentary or two about these creatures and they can get huge.
Comment from lyenochka
What a dreadful situation! But the walrus took out one hunter. I'm not a vegetarian so it'd be hypocritical to side with the walrus. But on the other hand, if the whole massacre was only for the tusks, that's horrible.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017
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What a dreadful situation! But the walrus took out one hunter. I'm not a vegetarian so it'd be hypocritical to side with the walrus. But on the other hand, if the whole massacre was only for the tusks, that's horrible.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017
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Thanks, lyenochka, for the excellent review. Bill
Comment from Spitfire
A powerful picture of how animals are victims of man's cruelty to nature. The lines that took my breath away:
infant seal was crushed and quickly skinned.
he rises to eleven feet and roars;
mighty walrus falls upon the slayer.
I could visualize this. Skillful choice of words when describing the weapons.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017
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A powerful picture of how animals are victims of man's cruelty to nature. The lines that took my breath away:
infant seal was crushed and quickly skinned.
he rises to eleven feet and roars;
mighty walrus falls upon the slayer.
I could visualize this. Skillful choice of words when describing the weapons.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017
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Thanks, Shari, for the terrific review. Bill
