Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

Hi Joan. There is good rhyming within your poem. Your writing is clear and contains a good message. I would like to see some punctuation and not capitalize each line, but that is your call as the poet and I defer to your choice.

There are a couple of typos here:
"Of bringing usout (us out) of the abyss"
and
"Her (Here) in the stone let us know"
Marilyn

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Nov-2017

Thank, Marilyn for your review and editing help.

Joan

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Hi there;
Thank you for sharing your interpretation of the latest 'Pix Challenge.' I still need to write mine and I keep coming up with the same idea and discarding it, but today, I just may write the poem that has been forming in my head all week.

I enjoyed yours because it talks about the soul keeping the daisies alive though they grow in shallow soil.

~patty~

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Nov-2017

Thanks for taking the time to read and review. I appreciate all the stars.

Joan

Comment from DR DIP

Excellent

With a bravery and h(o)pe

These daisies I remove th(a)t d(g)row
Her(e) in the stone let us know
That in this place of death
Your soul still supplies the living breath

other than a few spags I really thought it was a great poem?interpretation of the picture Thanks for sharing.

dip

 Comment Written 08-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Nov-2017

Thanks for the nice comments and editing aids. Both are much appreciated.

Joan