Unleashed Chaos
Viewing comments for Chapter 32 "Revealed Secrets/Part Three"A Novel of the Breedline Series
8 total reviews
Comment from ngage
Shana, this is by far one of your best chapters. Loved the added action and suspense! You had me captivated from the beginning and all through until the end. Fantastic job! Keep up the great writing. Looking forward to the next one.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2017
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Shana, this is by far one of your best chapters. Loved the added action and suspense! You had me captivated from the beginning and all through until the end. Fantastic job! Keep up the great writing. Looking forward to the next one.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2017
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Thank you, ngage! :)
You're the greatest! I truly value your feedback. So grateful to have you follow my Breedline adventures. Words cannot express how much your dedication means to me.
Shana :)
Comment from apky
Good heaven's this was so intense, Shana. It was taught enough to feel in my bones. I kept on holding my breath, hoping that Jace doesn't go overboard, although (knowing the love he has for Tess) I knew nothing was going to stop him doing whatever he decided to do. Either that or go totally crazy.
I had to once again read the cast of characters because, in this post, you had them all come out and I'd forgotten who they were, exactly, and what relationship they had with each other.
How you manage to have and keep such a cast and manoeuvre them through the story is in itself nothing short of genius!
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017
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Good heaven's this was so intense, Shana. It was taught enough to feel in my bones. I kept on holding my breath, hoping that Jace doesn't go overboard, although (knowing the love he has for Tess) I knew nothing was going to stop him doing whatever he decided to do. Either that or go totally crazy.
I had to once again read the cast of characters because, in this post, you had them all come out and I'd forgotten who they were, exactly, and what relationship they had with each other.
How you manage to have and keep such a cast and manoeuvre them through the story is in itself nothing short of genius!
Comment Written 07-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017
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Thank you so much! :)
It's been a while since I've read this part. When I posted it, I was worried it would be confusing to the reader. So glad to hear everyone liked this one. I do have a lot of characters, and I'm so grateful the chapter flowed without losing the reader. Your feedback is very inspiring to me. I feel like I've got a celebrity author reading my story. You rock! :)
Your fan,
Shana :)
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Shana,
what an exciting chapter - with great action, and so well presented.
It's become difficult for Jem and Cassie to control Jace. When he vanishes,
they've no clue where he's gone. and what about Tessa?
great writing, my talented friend.
Blessings,
Margaret
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017
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Shana,
what an exciting chapter - with great action, and so well presented.
It's become difficult for Jem and Cassie to control Jace. When he vanishes,
they've no clue where he's gone. and what about Tessa?
great writing, my talented friend.
Blessings,
Margaret
Comment Written 07-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017
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Thank you, Margaret :)
Your inspiring feedback is wonderful to my ears, especially since it's coming from such a talented writer. I am very grateful.
Thanks again,
Shana :)
Comment from Sharon Haiste
A well written story.
The characters are well presented and the story is interesting.
Coming in part way through and reading only a portion, I can still understand what is happening.
A the picture is beautiful.
Well done.
Sharon
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017
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A well written story.
The characters are well presented and the story is interesting.
Coming in part way through and reading only a portion, I can still understand what is happening.
A the picture is beautiful.
Well done.
Sharon
Comment Written 07-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017
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Thank you, Sharon :)
Your kind words are truly motivating. It puts a smile on my face to hear you didn't get lost in the chapter. I do have a lot of characters and many things are happening, but knowing I kept you interested is pure joy.
Thanks again,
Shana :)
Comment from royowen
So, Jace AKA the beast, after becoming enraged after the loss, and vanishing of Tessa, it becomes really difficult for both Cassie and Jem to control him, but he vanishes, and find that they have no idea where he's vanished to. An exciting episode Dear Shana, some great action here, and wonderfully written, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017
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So, Jace AKA the beast, after becoming enraged after the loss, and vanishing of Tessa, it becomes really difficult for both Cassie and Jem to control him, but he vanishes, and find that they have no idea where he's vanished to. An exciting episode Dear Shana, some great action here, and wonderfully written, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 07-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017
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Thank you, Roy :)
I know things are looking grim for Jace and Tessa, but don't fear... I see a light at the end of the tunnel.
You're such a big part of my motivation in the creation of my Breedline adventures. I feel so blessed to have you as a friend. You've been by my side for a long time now. I do so enjoy hearing your feedback.
Always your fan,
Shana :)
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Always a pleasure for me, dear Shana,
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks Victor Dermont discovers his daughter Lila has bonded with Casey Barton, though he never approves their relationship, when his secret reveals, he accepts his daughter's relationship; I liked.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017
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This speaks Victor Dermont discovers his daughter Lila has bonded with Casey Barton, though he never approves their relationship, when his secret reveals, he accepts his daughter's relationship; I liked.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017
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Thank you! :)
Victor is singing a different tune now that Casey has discovered his secret. Stay tuned my friend. More adventures yet to come.
Shana :)
Comment from GracieAnn
SC,
This fantasy sci-fi write is intriguing. I really appreciated the character identifications and relationships at the end of the write. Very helpful. Nicely done with engaging dialogue. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017
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SC,
This fantasy sci-fi write is intriguing. I really appreciated the character identifications and relationships at the end of the write. Very helpful. Nicely done with engaging dialogue. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 06-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017
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Thank you, GracieAnn :)
So glad you enjoyed my post. Thanks for mentioning the character reference I added at the end. I hope to keep new readers intrigued and interested in coming back for new adventures of the Breedline.
Shana :)
Comment from Natali Holden
"Everyone fell silent as minutes passed, or maybe it was just a couple of heartbeats." There are awesome opening sentences, but there are also just awesome sentence in general. This is an awesome sentence. Just like the entire chapter! Complete awesomeness! Keep it up!
Natali ;)
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017
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"Everyone fell silent as minutes passed, or maybe it was just a couple of heartbeats." There are awesome opening sentences, but there are also just awesome sentence in general. This is an awesome sentence. Just like the entire chapter! Complete awesomeness! Keep it up!
Natali ;)
Comment Written 06-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017
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Thank you, Natali :)
So glad you enjoyed this one. Sometimes I add what I'm thinking into my writing, and I always worry it will turn the reader off. But... it seems I have a winner here. I appreciate you mentioning that to me. That speaks volumes! You're the awesome one my friend.
Thanks again,
Shana :)
