Comment from Bucketlist

Excellent

This is original in idea, very diverse. You have written a very impactful fiction flash. The situation can be real, but as the expression goes' she didn't live to tell the tale' so this fiction 's great. I really liked the way you used the last sentence for impact and it was not vague.
An interesting read, thank you
Hugs, Trisha

 Comment Written 05-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2017

Thanks for your review, Trisha. I'm glad you liked my little story.

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi MJ,

you did a great job with this in such a short amount of words. I wonder if this would be the case. Some people are so deluded in life I reckon it would carry over into death.

good job
G

 Comment Written 05-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2017

Thanks, Gareth.

Comment from trumby

Excellent

Well done. It's truly amazing how much a talented writer can do with 100 words.
However, I'm wondering? Is there a market for this type of writing?
Not meaning to have a shot at anyone, but I'm trying to move from ; writing for personal growth and self-gratification to--- full time writer:
Does this sell? I'm also working on a novel which I'm hoping might pay.
I do make some money from kindle, but not enough to live on.
I think that you might have the literary knowledge to answer my question.
THANK YOU!!!

 Comment Written 05-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2017

Apparently it does sell, but I work as a teacher and so far that takes most of my time. You should google flash fiction and will find magazines that pay writers for all kinds of stories (right now I can only remember one called Narrative). I'm sorry I haven't been able to help you much.
Thanks for your lovely review.

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

Great 100 word flash fiction story. I like the way you've written it from her POV and that she doesn't realise she's dead until we hear the policeman's call. Well told,
cheers.

 Comment Written 05-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2017

Thanks for reading. Have a lovely day.

Comment from Sharon Haiste

Excellent

This is well written but gruesome.
A well done 100 word story. It says a lot in those few 100 words.
Good luck with the contest.
Sharon

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2017

Thanks for reading. Yeah, I guess it's gruesome even if the deaths haven't been put into words.

Comment from Asem.inspirations

Excellent

Oh my goodness, Maria: This is so deep and well written. I was reading it earlier but I am at work so I was so tired, I decided to come back to it as I am more aware and awoke. This contest entry is full of surprise.

My eyes are now opened to what your story is saying and wow, what a twist for the ending of this story. She is the body, laying there in that dark, moist forest with out her shoes on. This is why the cop had that desolate face. This is why he does not answer her because they are there looking for her body and they (Police) have found it. WOW! It is a shame that I cannot give this story a six. You are an exceptional writer, Maria. This was very nicely done

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 04-Nov-2017

You understood perfectly, Tier. Thanks for reading.

Comment from PoemsOfDD

Excellent

Maria JG, this is a good entry for the 100 Word Flash Fiction contest. It is intriguing with an ending that has a twist leaving the reader thinking..."hmm, I wonder what happened here and how did she die?" Nicely done for such a short story. Great work and best of luck in the competition. ~DD

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 04-Nov-2017

Thanks so much for reading.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written heartfelt sad flash fiction. To get lost in a dark wood seldom ends up in a good ending. It can be by accident or by another's hand that someone meets their end.

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 04-Nov-2017

Thanks for your review, Sandra.

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi, Marie

= Ohhh! That's not good to find a live person, yet refer to them as a body.
= Not boding well for here. This was a super entry for the contest. Good Luck!

Cheers, J
Have a good day/evening!
A Smile Is A Frown Upside Town (*>*)

 Comment Written 03-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 04-Nov-2017

Thanks for reading, Jax.
P. S. She's not alive. She's a ghost, but doesn't know.

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

Oh wow! This was really neat what you have written. You always come up with very good ideas. I was not expecting this at all. Very good wording and great imagery. Blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 03-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 04-Nov-2017

Thanks so much, Teri. Take care.