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Into the night

Nocturnal love

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Comment from LateBloomer
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Hello DR DIP, Your poem is beautifully penned in soft and soulful images. I especially liked your ending verse:

The love we have, for each other
Into the night we'll both discover
The joys of being here as one
Just you and me before the sun

Your poem left me with the feeling of Ahh. Very lovely.
Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer

 Comment Written 02-Nov-2017

reply by the author on 02-Nov-2017
    Thankyou so much late bloomer. I am glad you liked it.

    dip
Comment from Dean Kuch
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And as the moon slowly rises
The moonlit night is full of surprises
We make love, under the stars
Lunar love, the night is ours.

Lovely poem, Mark.
A poignant poetic proclamation portraying pure passion and romance.
I saw just one line I would change for the sake of meter which I have noted above in red.
Wonderfully done...
~Dean

 Comment Written 02-Nov-2017

reply by the author on 02-Nov-2017
    Thanks so much Dean just curious? Does stars and ours rhyme in America? it's all in pronunciation I suppose.
    There are a few options here I suppose:

    And as the moon slowly rises
    The moonlit night is full of surprises
    We make love there for hours
    Lunar love, the night is ours for perfect rhyme

    or

    And as the moon slowly rises
    The moonlit night is full of surprises
    We make love under the stars
    Lunar love, it never mars

    or
    And as the moon slowly rises
    The moonlit night is full of surprises
    We make love under the stars
    Lunar love, nothing ever mars

    I'm so confused which one to go for. I am favouring perfect rhyme over slanted or near rhyme

    What do you think?

    dip

reply by Dean Kuch on 02-Nov-2017
    As the moon slowly rises
    moonlit night's full of surprises.
    We'll make love beneath the stars
    Lunar love--where nothing mars.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
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Nocturnal love, nicely done.
"We make love under the stars"...what better place to declare love than under the moon and the stars making it romantic . Nice AABB

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2017

reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
    Thanks again Barb much appreciated

    dip
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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Dr D,
This is a great love poem. Good job on the smooth flow & great rhymes. Your picture is gorgeous. When paired with your words, you create a memorable read. Thanks for sharing. Jan

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2017

reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
    Why thank you Jan, you have made my day

    dip
Comment from Teri7
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Dip, This is another very beautiful romantic poem you have penned from the heart. You used very good descriptive wording and very beautiful imagery with the art work. Blessings,Teri

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2017

reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
    Thankyou as always Teri

    dip
Comment from l.raven
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HI Waves, this is just beautiful...and how it should be...you are all I want...and you are all I see when we are making love...forever....sigh...today it is so different ...lovers, spouses, mates, ...they are in bed thinking of someone else...and I don't mean God...love you love poem you...Love Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2017

reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
    Thankyou so much as always Linda glad you liked it

    dip
reply by l.raven on 01-Nov-2017
    soooo welcome you...love xxoo
Comment from sandy montgomery
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I love the presentation. This is a lovely romantic poem. Sorry you haven't seen many reviews from me lately I got behind again. Be patient and I'll catch up. Thank you for sharing your work.

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2017

reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
    Thank YOU for being so kind and reviewing I always appreciate your input Sandy

    dip
Comment from patcelaw
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Dip, I do so much like this poem about the love of a man and his woman. I always like your poetry, because it is straight forward and simple, without obscure wording. Patricia

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2017

reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
    Thankyou Pat that is a huge compliment much appreciated

    dip
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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The moon is mystical and romantic and can bring joy to the couple in love, your words are loving and real, suns setting have the same ambiance, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2017

reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
    Thankyou as always Dolly I am glad you liked it. Yeah sunsets do have the same ambiance. There is something romantic about a sunset

    dip
Comment from Pantygynt
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Hi there, Dip. You are getting really quite technical these days. Rhyming couplets in quatrains and the "a" in every case a double rhyme (over two syllables) I am so pleased to see you picking up on the idea of unity in a poem I am going to give this one a six pack.

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2017

reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
    Wow a six I am humbled and honoured you feel it deserves this. You have made my day. I am glad you think I'm improving.
    I think you'll like tomorrow's posts

    Thanks again , always appreciated

    dip