Sharon
Sergeant Nolan's Rage9 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written hundred word flash fiction. Any parent that deliberately do harm to their own children do not deserve to live any longer than this second they are caught.
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A very well-written hundred word flash fiction. Any parent that deliberately do harm to their own children do not deserve to live any longer than this second they are caught.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2017
Comment from dracofelsinensis
Very well written. There's a lot in these 100 words:
She calls him 'Sergeant Nolan' (not Bob, Jeff or whatever) i.e. his job title, and says he's the 'good cop' of their husband & wife team; I wonder what their marriage can have been like, with her 'habit', his oath of service, the child, etc.
Sharon is open about getting their daughter to buy it! Then her obscene gesture. He snaps and kills her with her own powder, judging he will be able to explain it away. Maybe not such a good cop after all. Thanks for this good read.
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Very well written. There's a lot in these 100 words:
She calls him 'Sergeant Nolan' (not Bob, Jeff or whatever) i.e. his job title, and says he's the 'good cop' of their husband & wife team; I wonder what their marriage can have been like, with her 'habit', his oath of service, the child, etc.
Sharon is open about getting their daughter to buy it! Then her obscene gesture. He snaps and kills her with her own powder, judging he will be able to explain it away. Maybe not such a good cop after all. Thanks for this good read.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2017
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, my friend,
This is a crime thriller in 100 words,, not bad. The story is harsh but unfortunately is possible...this horrible things do happen. Good job.
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Hello, my friend,
This is a crime thriller in 100 words,, not bad. The story is harsh but unfortunately is possible...this horrible things do happen. Good job.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2017
Comment from Thomas Bowling
I hate to say good for him, but good for him. It sounds like the family had a good cop and a bad cop. Of course, you can't condone what he did . . . yes, you can.
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I hate to say good for him, but good for him. It sounds like the family had a good cop and a bad cop. Of course, you can't condone what he did . . . yes, you can.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2017
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Well that seemed rather an extreme course of action and now his DNA will be all over the bag of heroine too. Silly boy. Doesn't really say much for the honour of law enforcement...
Good taut little piece though, Strong emotions and swift action.
GMG
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2017
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Hi there,
Well that seemed rather an extreme course of action and now his DNA will be all over the bag of heroine too. Silly boy. Doesn't really say much for the honour of law enforcement...
Good taut little piece though, Strong emotions and swift action.
GMG
Comment Written 30-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2017
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Thanks for reading. Yes, rage sometimes clouds the best trained and honorable.
Comment from Poetic Friend
Oh my God, I did not see that one coming. This story, in its brevity, offers the dramatic effect of a well-written story. In such few words, it tells the story of two individuals -- one addicted to drugs and relinquished her value system to support the habit. The other character, a loving father who would seek vengeance for the sake of his children.
Wow, this story blew me away. It's memorable.
It is an excellent entry for the contest. Good luck.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2017
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Oh my God, I did not see that one coming. This story, in its brevity, offers the dramatic effect of a well-written story. In such few words, it tells the story of two individuals -- one addicted to drugs and relinquished her value system to support the habit. The other character, a loving father who would seek vengeance for the sake of his children.
Wow, this story blew me away. It's memorable.
It is an excellent entry for the contest. Good luck.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2017
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Thank you so much for your comments.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
Good work on the 100 word story. But a rather violent one. You did warn me and I read it anyways.
Clear, concise, good job.
Good luck with the competition.
A different Sharon.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2017
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Good work on the 100 word story. But a rather violent one. You did warn me and I read it anyways.
Clear, concise, good job.
Good luck with the competition.
A different Sharon.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2017
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Thank you Sharon.
Comment from teols2016
There's a harsh way to deal with the drug epidemic. You manage to create good tension with the diologue. Well done and good luck.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2017
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There's a harsh way to deal with the drug epidemic. You manage to create good tension with the diologue. Well done and good luck.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2017
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Thank you for your comments. I'm glad the tension came through.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks Sergeant Nolan's rage, and how he has forced Sharon's daughter to have heroin and found her dead and he dialled 911as overdose death in Miami is registered; I liked.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2017
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This speaks Sergeant Nolan's rage, and how he has forced Sharon's daughter to have heroin and found her dead and he dialled 911as overdose death in Miami is registered; I liked.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2017
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Thanks for reading.
