Reason to Celebrate
a 300-word contest entry8 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Such a great story. Two friends enjoying coffee but one has a heart for their favorite coffeehouse owner and will ensure that neighborhood meetings will continue. Great dialogue especially capturing Carlotta's speech even her "shriek!"
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2017
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Such a great story. Two friends enjoying coffee but one has a heart for their favorite coffeehouse owner and will ensure that neighborhood meetings will continue. Great dialogue especially capturing Carlotta's speech even her "shriek!"
Comment Written 04-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2017
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Thank you so much for sharing my short-short, lyenochka, and your very kind praise. Rod
Comment from teols2016
Sometimes, people need a guardian angel right here on Earth. Glad that coffee place ain't going anywhere. I'd save it too. Great job and good luck.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2017
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Sometimes, people need a guardian angel right here on Earth. Glad that coffee place ain't going anywhere. I'd save it too. Great job and good luck.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2017
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Thank you for sharing my short-short and your very kind response.
Comment from BeasPeas
This is a subtle write on a good deed performed anonymously. The best kind of good deed to do. Nicely written and well presented. I think these 300 word writes are the perfect length. Marilyn
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2017
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This is a subtle write on a good deed performed anonymously. The best kind of good deed to do. Nicely written and well presented. I think these 300 word writes are the perfect length. Marilyn
Comment Written 28-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2017
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Thank you, Marilyn, for your very kind praise of "Reason to Celebrate." I enjoy the challenge of flash fiction, but prefer the slightly longer versions.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
This is a nice story.
You've managed to pack a lot of detail into 300 words.
Well done and good luck with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2017
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This is a nice story.
You've managed to pack a lot of detail into 300 words.
Well done and good luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 28-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2017
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Thank you for sharing my short-short, Sharon, and your kind praise.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I think you might need to recount your wordage. I make it 297 and I think it has to be exactly 300. Some counters count -- as words, but they're not.
The story though is a good one.
GMG
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2017
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Hi there,
I think you might need to recount your wordage. I make it 297 and I think it has to be exactly 300. Some counters count -- as words, but they're not.
The story though is a good one.
GMG
Comment Written 28-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2017
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Thank you, GMG, for sharing my story and your concern. If you read my notes, you will see I used Apple Pages for my word count. All software is different. Fortunately, FanStory does not insist it has to be by their count which is always higher.
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Yeah, I checked by hand & Microsoft word and they cam up short. Word is the most accurate. Never ever go by FS! lol
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So far the Contest Review Committee (which is in effect) has not challenged me.
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lucky you.
Comment from StanNJ
Hello.
Very nicely done story in 300 words. Good set up, good sympathy created for the restaurant owner. Clever rationale for the ending.
No corrections I can see.
Hope you do well in the contest.
Stan
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2017
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Hello.
Very nicely done story in 300 words. Good set up, good sympathy created for the restaurant owner. Clever rationale for the ending.
No corrections I can see.
Hope you do well in the contest.
Stan
Comment Written 27-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2017
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Thank you for sharing "Reason to Celebrate," Stan. I truly appreciate your critical review and best wishes.
Comment from apky
An excellent story, and all of it no more than 300 words. Great.
I hope that my suggestion below don't ruin your word count.
But I'm hearing impaired, and she's a fiery Latina who still hasn't lost her accent.
~ But my hearing is impaired, and she's a fiery Latina who still...
For five years (delete-s)since she took over she's talked about renovating, but the only thing new is the expresso machine.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2017
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An excellent story, and all of it no more than 300 words. Great.
I hope that my suggestion below don't ruin your word count.
But I'm hearing impaired, and she's a fiery Latina who still hasn't lost her accent.
~ But my hearing is impaired, and she's a fiery Latina who still...
For five years (delete-s)since she took over she's talked about renovating, but the only thing new is the expresso machine.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2017
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Thank you, apky, for sharing my shortie and your kind praise. It's interesting that audiologists who test hearing, refer to those of us who have dramatic loss of hearing as "hearing impaired." I did fix "since."
Comment from Cybertron1986
Nicely thought out story that had everything connecting from beginning to the end. I love the message of human compassion and empathy. The scheme was creative and unique that connects me as the reader to the message implied. The story, people, and place are all relatable. Despite a misspelling (ssince) and a couple of missed words, this was a strong five bordering a six. Beautiful story overall and much enjoyed
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2017
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Nicely thought out story that had everything connecting from beginning to the end. I love the message of human compassion and empathy. The scheme was creative and unique that connects me as the reader to the message implied. The story, people, and place are all relatable. Despite a misspelling (ssince) and a couple of missed words, this was a strong five bordering a six. Beautiful story overall and much enjoyed
Comment Written 27-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2017
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Thank you so much for taking the time to closely read my short story. I truly appreciate your praise and your pointing out my errors. Glad you enjoyed it.
