New Outlook
Changed view toward the aged.36 total reviews
Comment from Ulla
Hi Phillip, I liked this short poem a lot. It spoke volumes. The strong message was about your courage. I liked this a lot. All the best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2017
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Hi Phillip, I liked this short poem a lot. It spoke volumes. The strong message was about your courage. I liked this a lot. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 28-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2017
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Thanks for reading, Ulla.
Phillip
Comment from doggymad
Well done my friend. This short poem tells a story of determination and courage.
It is hard to emerge as a complete person from situations like this, but I do believe the author has succeeded in more ways than one.
hugs
Freda
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2017
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Well done my friend. This short poem tells a story of determination and courage.
It is hard to emerge as a complete person from situations like this, but I do believe the author has succeeded in more ways than one.
hugs
Freda
Comment Written 27-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2017
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The events just happen to be my, the author's life. I happy you liked it, Freda.
Phillip
Comment from GWinterwin
Sounds like a learning experience, and that is great. Yes I think as a seventy three year old that I still learn from those older than myself. The positive attitude of people help me to be more positive, always thanking God for all my blessings. Thanks for sharing, God bless always.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2017
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Sounds like a learning experience, and that is great. Yes I think as a seventy three year old that I still learn from those older than myself. The positive attitude of people help me to be more positive, always thanking God for all my blessings. Thanks for sharing, God bless always.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2017
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Thanks for reading, GWintersin.
Phillip
Comment from smileycloud
In the area you lived, you must have learned lots
looks very much like your growing up made you a strong independant person
as age approaches our senior years people tend to think we stop learning but that is not true, hey?
in aged care I discovered that the Bible verse that says there is nothing new under the sun ; it is true as all the beautiful and not so happy elderly have seen and done it all; all that is important and worthwhile that is
they tend not to share too much of their wise experiences because people give them the impression that they have nothing of benefit to say; not true though
it is difficult to fit in anywhere and everywhere for the most part of our lives; we just think we do;
the only time we really fit in is when we give up all expectations and accept what there is for what it is
I apologise in advance but I will share a little story of mine here with you
BECAUSE YOUR FINE WORK HAS INSPIRED ME TO DO SO
thank you my dear FS friend
blessings
have a smiley day
Things I learned from working in Aged Care Support
Speed Limits Live Forever by smileycloud@fanstory.com
Love is seeking someone else's highest good
Time eventually slows down
Food and shelter is most all we need
A simple Sunday roast is a feast fit for a king
When our feet are tired and weary and no longer respond to our requests.
we can still dance. In our heart and from our eyes and through our voice
Grey hair and glasses are a fashion statement that is taking the world by storm
Rest and recreation does not remain our highest priority forever
A treasure box does not hold material items locked inside
Our Sunday best can be the same as our Monday morning attire
Function is definitely superior to fashion
Saying "Please" and "Thank You" is not the same as being polite and grateful
A warm mug of milo late at night is pure liquid gold
A tiny scruffy ruffled bird can be a lifelong best friend
A one minute story told, can be the source of hours of entertainment
A cardboard box has many unimaginable uses
The human body wearies much faster and sooner than the mind
A wheelie walker is a limousine
A laundry person or a kitchen hand is as important and as worthy of as much respect as a doctor or a nurse
You do not have to utter a single word to be heard
The youth are not seen as aliens by the elderly, but as our parents and leaders of our future with a long and hard struggle in front of them, and I quote "The poor dears"
Contentions and differences can be defused and melted by the heat of compassion
A local school band is an orchestra worthy of a world stage
A laugh is more contagious than the common cold
The health department has not yet printed an infection control fact sheet for laughter
The world can be a big scary place no matter what age you reach
A soft goodnight wish at bedtime stills and soothes the soul of the giver as well as the receiver
A HUG IS STILL THE ACCEPTED CURRENCY OF THE WORLD
smileyclloud
many blessings to you dear friend
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2017
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In the area you lived, you must have learned lots
looks very much like your growing up made you a strong independant person
as age approaches our senior years people tend to think we stop learning but that is not true, hey?
in aged care I discovered that the Bible verse that says there is nothing new under the sun ; it is true as all the beautiful and not so happy elderly have seen and done it all; all that is important and worthwhile that is
they tend not to share too much of their wise experiences because people give them the impression that they have nothing of benefit to say; not true though
it is difficult to fit in anywhere and everywhere for the most part of our lives; we just think we do;
the only time we really fit in is when we give up all expectations and accept what there is for what it is
I apologise in advance but I will share a little story of mine here with you
BECAUSE YOUR FINE WORK HAS INSPIRED ME TO DO SO
thank you my dear FS friend
blessings
have a smiley day
Things I learned from working in Aged Care Support
Speed Limits Live Forever by smileycloud@fanstory.com
Love is seeking someone else's highest good
Time eventually slows down
Food and shelter is most all we need
A simple Sunday roast is a feast fit for a king
When our feet are tired and weary and no longer respond to our requests.
we can still dance. In our heart and from our eyes and through our voice
Grey hair and glasses are a fashion statement that is taking the world by storm
Rest and recreation does not remain our highest priority forever
A treasure box does not hold material items locked inside
Our Sunday best can be the same as our Monday morning attire
Function is definitely superior to fashion
Saying "Please" and "Thank You" is not the same as being polite and grateful
A warm mug of milo late at night is pure liquid gold
A tiny scruffy ruffled bird can be a lifelong best friend
A one minute story told, can be the source of hours of entertainment
A cardboard box has many unimaginable uses
The human body wearies much faster and sooner than the mind
A wheelie walker is a limousine
A laundry person or a kitchen hand is as important and as worthy of as much respect as a doctor or a nurse
You do not have to utter a single word to be heard
The youth are not seen as aliens by the elderly, but as our parents and leaders of our future with a long and hard struggle in front of them, and I quote "The poor dears"
Contentions and differences can be defused and melted by the heat of compassion
A local school band is an orchestra worthy of a world stage
A laugh is more contagious than the common cold
The health department has not yet printed an infection control fact sheet for laughter
The world can be a big scary place no matter what age you reach
A soft goodnight wish at bedtime stills and soothes the soul of the giver as well as the receiver
A HUG IS STILL THE ACCEPTED CURRENCY OF THE WORLD
smileyclloud
many blessings to you dear friend
Comment Written 27-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2017
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Thank you for the compliment, smileycloud.
Phillip
Comment from DonandVicki
I got the feeling from reading and reviewing your poem that it is scary when you move into a strange community. I suppose moving into a seniors community would be off-putting at first. A lot to warm up to.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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I got the feeling from reading and reviewing your poem that it is scary when you move into a strange community. I suppose moving into a seniors community would be off-putting at first. A lot to warm up to.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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No not scary but enlightened. I was not as informed as I believed. I viewed it as an opportunity to make the personal improvement on me that I wanted.
Phillip
Comment from Oatmeal
PBOMAR1115,
You know that these do not rhyme...right?
In the neighborhood where I live
And it took experience to earn my free will
These don't either because one has an S.
Moving to a community with older adults
My first impression was they wanted to consult
Everything else looks great. Just send me message after the poem has been fixed and I will renew your stars.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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PBOMAR1115,
You know that these do not rhyme...right?
In the neighborhood where I live
And it took experience to earn my free will
These don't either because one has an S.
Moving to a community with older adults
My first impression was they wanted to consult
Everything else looks great. Just send me message after the poem has been fixed and I will renew your stars.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 26-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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I'm good. Thanks for reading, Oatmeal.
Phillip
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a confusing effort in thought and presentation and uneven in delivery. This is corrected by reading the poem yourself to determine what it is you are espousing and choosing your words carefully - then, aloud several times to correct the uneven flow. Sorry, it was difficult to understand as written, but I found the message astute and thought provoking, worthy of revision. One example, with your permission, is,
last stanza, 1st and 2nd lines - what about;
"From a condensed viewpoint, in minimized thought,
Everyone here was already taught,
to influence those in hubris suspended.
I left that place, it was the gym, I contended."...
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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In my opinion, a confusing effort in thought and presentation and uneven in delivery. This is corrected by reading the poem yourself to determine what it is you are espousing and choosing your words carefully - then, aloud several times to correct the uneven flow. Sorry, it was difficult to understand as written, but I found the message astute and thought provoking, worthy of revision. One example, with your permission, is,
last stanza, 1st and 2nd lines - what about;
"From a condensed viewpoint, in minimized thought,
Everyone here was already taught,
to influence those in hubris suspended.
I left that place, it was the gym, I contended."...
Comment Written 26-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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I'm happy to hear your honest opinion. Thanks for reading, evesayshi.
Phillip
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You are very welcome indeed, Phillip - good writing...Eve
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Have a great evening, Eve
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And you as well, Phillip...Eve
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Hello again - happy writing...
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Thank you.
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You're welcome...
Comment from Lulube
So you went back to where you once came from. You still young enough to be able to do so. Many elderly communities are full of busy minds but disabled bodies that stifle the energy that wants to be let go. I am on the cuff of doing these changes. I live about 5 houses before a cul de sac for a seniors townhouse complex and watch them go by almost everyday. Hope you are living your life where you want to, life comes to an end fast for some, so no time to waste for change.\
lulube
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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So you went back to where you once came from. You still young enough to be able to do so. Many elderly communities are full of busy minds but disabled bodies that stifle the energy that wants to be let go. I am on the cuff of doing these changes. I live about 5 houses before a cul de sac for a seniors townhouse complex and watch them go by almost everyday. Hope you are living your life where you want to, life comes to an end fast for some, so no time to waste for change.\
lulube
Comment Written 26-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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I have little time to spare these days. I'm busy learning to write and thanks for reading, Lulube.
Phillip
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Then write and learn from what you write. It's an amazing outlet, that when you look back over pieces you've written, you can see all that you can change or add to.
lulube
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Ok.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello pbomar1115
I liked you poem with it's rhyme and rhythm, but to me what I really liked was you are saying
There is a Fountain of Youth: It is our minds, your talents, the creativity you bring to your life and the lives of the people you love.
(even if you are elderly then they are) When you learn to under sand the ways of young, you will truly have defeated age
Gert
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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Hello pbomar1115
I liked you poem with it's rhyme and rhythm, but to me what I really liked was you are saying
There is a Fountain of Youth: It is our minds, your talents, the creativity you bring to your life and the lives of the people you love.
(even if you are elderly then they are) When you learn to under sand the ways of young, you will truly have defeated age
Gert
Comment Written 26-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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Thank you kindly for your words, Gert.
Phillip
Comment from mermaids
There is a strong rhythm to your words, I can hear this poem being read out loud. It has a smooth flow of words and I like your theme of learning from seniors who have much to teach us.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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There is a strong rhythm to your words, I can hear this poem being read out loud. It has a smooth flow of words and I like your theme of learning from seniors who have much to teach us.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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Thanks for reading, mermairds. For an ex-lucky person, I won on this one.
Phillip
