Perennials of War
Viewing comments for Chapter 50 "Chapter Funfzehn part drei"Is Anderson a gallant knight? Can he recover Shan
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Comment from mmonaghan777
Emily seems to be the catalyst to keep them all connected. It always speaks high emotion when a child is part of a potentially dangerous situation. Love the "Uncles". She recognized the sitting car also. Will look for more.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2017
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Emily seems to be the catalyst to keep them all connected. It always speaks high emotion when a child is part of a potentially dangerous situation. Love the "Uncles". She recognized the sitting car also. Will look for more.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Barbara.
"Swinging is my favorite. Think I'm too big for the slide?" (lol. Mine too, but monkey bars suit me better lol.)
"Jeff nodded his head to the left. "Company just drove up." (Ouch!)
"Just before dinner, Emily ran up to Shana. "Did you miss me?" (Phew. You made that transition perfectly and eased the tension. Well done.)
"I promise I won't let anything happen to anyone I care about." (That's exactly what I say to Delia.)
Wow, what a great chapter. So tense and scary. I'll scream if anything happens to Emily. Put me in the story and I'll spear the buggers, if I can get the thing to fly straight.
I never find any errors in your work. Congrats.
Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2017
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G'day Barbara.
"Swinging is my favorite. Think I'm too big for the slide?" (lol. Mine too, but monkey bars suit me better lol.)
"Jeff nodded his head to the left. "Company just drove up." (Ouch!)
"Just before dinner, Emily ran up to Shana. "Did you miss me?" (Phew. You made that transition perfectly and eased the tension. Well done.)
"I promise I won't let anything happen to anyone I care about." (That's exactly what I say to Delia.)
Wow, what a great chapter. So tense and scary. I'll scream if anything happens to Emily. Put me in the story and I'll spear the buggers, if I can get the thing to fly straight.
I never find any errors in your work. Congrats.
Cheers Fez
Comment Written 26-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2017
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
Very intriguing. I would like to read the rest, before and after.
It seems there is an interesting story taking place here. It can be going in so may directions, gets the imagination going.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2017
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Very intriguing. I would like to read the rest, before and after.
It seems there is an interesting story taking place here. It can be going in so may directions, gets the imagination going.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from teols2016
Another strong installment. Seems there's evil afoot...or at least some troublemakers. Will have to see who they are and what comes of this. Well done.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2017
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Another strong installment. Seems there's evil afoot...or at least some troublemakers. Will have to see who they are and what comes of this. Well done.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Jay Squires
So the Russian menace is still prevalent. A good chapter. Emily is a spark plug in more ways than one. She is cohesive to the major thrust of the plot, and now it looks like she will figure into the plot's climax.
Anderson made the fist. [Shouldn't it be "Anderson made A fist."? Using the definite article makes the sentence sound like the author is in collusion with the reader.]
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2017
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So the Russian menace is still prevalent. A good chapter. Emily is a spark plug in more ways than one. She is cohesive to the major thrust of the plot, and now it looks like she will figure into the plot's climax.
Anderson made the fist. [Shouldn't it be "Anderson made A fist."? Using the definite article makes the sentence sound like the author is in collusion with the reader.]
Comment Written 24-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2017
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You are 100% correct. I will fix that immediately. I hate when I make first grade mistakes. Thank you for the kind review.
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I was getting a touch preachy. I tend to do that when I'm getting back into reviewing more regularly.
Comment from pbomar1115
I enjoyed this portion of the story, showing life goes on for Emily's normal little girl's life, surrounded by love and first-class help. The degree the parents go through because money is no problem seems small according to Anderson.
Phillip
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2017
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I enjoyed this portion of the story, showing life goes on for Emily's normal little girl's life, surrounded by love and first-class help. The degree the parents go through because money is no problem seems small according to Anderson.
Phillip
Comment Written 24-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome.
Phillip
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
I'm surprised Anderson would put Emily in harm's way. He didn't KNOW the men weren't going to do anything to them. He just hoped. Not good enough when it comes to a child's welfare. Now, having seen Emily, the men may want to kidnap her to get Shana and Anderson to top bothering them about the painting.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2017
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I'm surprised Anderson would put Emily in harm's way. He didn't KNOW the men weren't going to do anything to them. He just hoped. Not good enough when it comes to a child's welfare. Now, having seen Emily, the men may want to kidnap her to get Shana and Anderson to top bothering them about the painting.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2017
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We'll have to see. I think the three of them were capable of taking care of Emily. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from rtobaygo
Good afternoon, Barbara
Excellent continuation!
I really like how you balance Emily's innocence against the danger Anderson realizes that can rear its ugly head at any moment. Enjoyed.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2017
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Good afternoon, Barbara
Excellent continuation!
I really like how you balance Emily's innocence against the danger Anderson realizes that can rear its ugly head at any moment. Enjoyed.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
Comment Written 23-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2017
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Thank you for the kind review and insight.
Comment from rheabug
Poor little Emily, she suspects something is going on but she doesn't understand what it may be. The story gets more interesting with each post. Good work. Story holdsyour interest. HUGS.....
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2017
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Poor little Emily, she suspects something is going on but she doesn't understand what it may be. The story gets more interesting with each post. Good work. Story holdsyour interest. HUGS.....
Comment Written 23-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, this was a well written chapter. I can feel the budding romance. The scene with Emily was lovely. It came across very sincere and rang true. Now what is to happen? All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2017
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Hi Barbara, this was a well written chapter. I can feel the budding romance. The scene with Emily was lovely. It came across very sincere and rang true. Now what is to happen? All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 23-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2017
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Thank you for the encouragement.
