Cesar Chavez Park
haiku25 total reviews
Comment from sunnilicious
Every person alive deserves to have a home. It's a basic necessity in life. About 10 years ago, I read that the USA was a place very good. There were no homeless in this country until the Vietnam War. The veterans came back and turned crazy. The were locked in places like crazy hospitals and went set free, they made home like war grounds on the city streets. How to get Love to prevail and clean everything up...
Good C-word alliteration. Sad satori with strong imagery. Good work.
God bless you. Happy Halloween.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
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Every person alive deserves to have a home. It's a basic necessity in life. About 10 years ago, I read that the USA was a place very good. There were no homeless in this country until the Vietnam War. The veterans came back and turned crazy. The were locked in places like crazy hospitals and went set free, they made home like war grounds on the city streets. How to get Love to prevail and clean everything up...
Good C-word alliteration. Sad satori with strong imagery. Good work.
God bless you. Happy Halloween.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words my friend.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Mark Schardine
New Jersey has many such places, and we see again and again how our economy simply does not provide for the citizens. It is a painful irony that a park named after Cesar Chavez, who did so much for working class people, would be the scene of poverty.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2017
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New Jersey has many such places, and we see again and again how our economy simply does not provide for the citizens. It is a painful irony that a park named after Cesar Chavez, who did so much for working class people, would be the scene of poverty.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2017
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Hello, Mark, that is what I thought, it's ironic but at least there is a place for the homeless to be. In many places they are not wanted and they are forced to move....but where? It's a real problem next to not having a safe place to sleep.
Thank you for reading and reviewing my little poem. It's always good to read your reviews.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Ulla
Hola Guapa, this is a great haiku, which conjure up all the feelings of how frigid and cold it must be to be a homeless. Very poignant. It's becoming a big problem everywhere. Un abrazo, Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2017
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Hola Guapa, this is a great haiku, which conjure up all the feelings of how frigid and cold it must be to be a homeless. Very poignant. It's becoming a big problem everywhere. Un abrazo, Ulla:)))
Comment Written 23-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2017
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Hola Ulla, gracias por leer mi haiku. Como estas? Ojala que todo te valla bien. Besitos
MariVal
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Estoy bien, pero muchas cosas estan pasando. Te voy a mandar un mensaje en el PM. Un abrazo xx
Comment from l.raven
HI Gypsy, today after church...I saw where a couple homeless people where getting the places to stay for the winter set up...it was so sad...I wish the government would help them...very well written sweet girl...and your picture says it all...love you...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2017
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HI Gypsy, today after church...I saw where a couple homeless people where getting the places to stay for the winter set up...it was so sad...I wish the government would help them...very well written sweet girl...and your picture says it all...love you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 23-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2017
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Hello, Linda, there is a government housing program called section 8 that helps homeless people but there is a long waiting list and not many get the benefit. We need more help. Thank you for the excellent review and heartfelt feedback. I love you
gypsy hugs
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we truly need more help for them...our governor Daily used to do a lot for them...but he retired from being the governor...sigh...you are always so welcome ...you are a sweet heart...and I love you too...xxoo big hugs back at ya
Comment from krys123
Greetings, Gypsy;
-this is a frigid awareness of those homeless people who suffer the evenings and nights alone on the bare ground and some without a blanket or warm clothing.
-Your haiku says it all , and the disturbing picture relates to and is relative to those homeless people that do the suffering. It is very appropriate for your poem.
-Good descriptive and expressive lines are created in the first two lines of your poem and set up the understanding for your satori.
-The satori gives an aha moment and expresses the spontaneity of excitement which is relative to the conceptual theme of your poem.
-The terminology of "cities frigid ground" could be looked at as a or the Kigo which is a seasonal reference.
-Thank you for sharing and take care and have a good one.
Alex
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2017
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Greetings, Gypsy;
-this is a frigid awareness of those homeless people who suffer the evenings and nights alone on the bare ground and some without a blanket or warm clothing.
-Your haiku says it all , and the disturbing picture relates to and is relative to those homeless people that do the suffering. It is very appropriate for your poem.
-Good descriptive and expressive lines are created in the first two lines of your poem and set up the understanding for your satori.
-The satori gives an aha moment and expresses the spontaneity of excitement which is relative to the conceptual theme of your poem.
-The terminology of "cities frigid ground" could be looked at as a or the Kigo which is a seasonal reference.
-Thank you for sharing and take care and have a good one.
Alex
Comment Written 22-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2017
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Hello, Alex,
Thank you for your detailed excellent review. Have a nice day.
Gypsy
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You are welcome.
Alex
Comment from marybell1
I enjoyed reading your haiku "Cesar Chavez Park". It is sad to see so many homeless people around the world. You followed the 5-7-5 format for this genre which I like and you chose a very fitting photo for your haiku.
All the best.
Marybell1.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2017
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I enjoyed reading your haiku "Cesar Chavez Park". It is sad to see so many homeless people around the world. You followed the 5-7-5 format for this genre which I like and you chose a very fitting photo for your haiku.
All the best.
Marybell1.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2017
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Thank you very much, Marybell :) you are very kind.
gypsy
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Thank you. You are most welcome.
Marybell1.
Comment from apky
At least you gave them some tribute in your poem.
These are some of the injustices that make me so
mad and ashamed of being a human being. We have
enough wealth for everybody in the whole world a
dozen over - yet the wealth remains in a few greedy
hands who have so much that prices ofr the most basic
things - food warmth and shelter - has to be raised to
cope with their wealth.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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At least you gave them some tribute in your poem.
These are some of the injustices that make me so
mad and ashamed of being a human being. We have
enough wealth for everybody in the whole world a
dozen over - yet the wealth remains in a few greedy
hands who have so much that prices ofr the most basic
things - food warmth and shelter - has to be raised to
cope with their wealth.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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Hello, my friend, I appreciate your thoughtful review and feedback. Thank you.
Gypsy
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written haiku. When we see how peoe.live on the streets we realize how privileged we are to.have a roof over our heads and food on the table, it is enough reason to be happy.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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A very well-written haiku. When we see how peoe.live on the streets we realize how privileged we are to.have a roof over our heads and food on the table, it is enough reason to be happy.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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Hello, my friend, I appreciate your thoughtful review and feedback. Thank you.
Gypsy
Comment from Sis Cat
Poem reminds me of how I had left a theater in Berkeley last night to see the once bustling sidewalks now inhabited by the homeless and their dogs bedding down for the night. I love the specific details of your poem capturing a specific place and the homeless who hangout on the "city's frigid ground." This is a profound commentary not only on our State's capitol but of cities and towns everywhere.
Thank you, Gypsy, for sharing and caring.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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Poem reminds me of how I had left a theater in Berkeley last night to see the once bustling sidewalks now inhabited by the homeless and their dogs bedding down for the night. I love the specific details of your poem capturing a specific place and the homeless who hangout on the "city's frigid ground." This is a profound commentary not only on our State's capitol but of cities and towns everywhere.
Thank you, Gypsy, for sharing and caring.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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Hello, my friend, I appreciate your thoughtful review and feedback. Thank you.
Gypsy
Comment from Hitcher
We are starting to get similar problems in our cities here in NZ, friend, the ammout of homeless numbers have apparently doubled in the past 5 years. We have a massive housing shortage which the new government has promised to address. We will see! Nice thought provoking poem friend : )
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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We are starting to get similar problems in our cities here in NZ, friend, the ammout of homeless numbers have apparently doubled in the past 5 years. We have a massive housing shortage which the new government has promised to address. We will see! Nice thought provoking poem friend : )
Comment Written 21-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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Hello, my friend, I appreciate your thoughtful review and feedback. Thank you.
Gypsy
