Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

Lol, that was a bit, tongue in cheek, Bill! But this Earnest character was right, he had to put God in somewhere if he wanted to stand the slightest chance of winning!! Lol. That was so funny! Shame he had to die. Lol. :) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2022

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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2022

Thanks, Sandra. A little cynicism for contests creeps in sometimes.

Comment from nartoonla

Excellent

Hi, I live at present in Italy and it pretty late and so your (IJKL) had a late ah, I see... Got it and learning every day. But best to stick to what I grasp and not venture out and later fall even though there are lovely people about. And back. Besides the IJKL I suddenly got your flash story too... oh mamma. He died... sad and interesting little piece.
I shall be going back to bed soon but noticed you are a teacher and a marine. Well, how about that. I have been teaching 5-year-olds mainly but in recent years older kids and oh mamma they are a handful. High school hm... But bravo for you! No wonder you grasp things on Fanstory faster. Also, notice while passing by you are a marine. Gosh, that amazing grew up with them and a great fan... God bless la

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2017

Thank you, Nartoonia, for giving this brief story a look. It was supposed to be sarcastic, because, in my view, many poems and short pieces win that are spiritual in nature.
I'm glad you figured out the format for the ABC poem.
Yes, I was in the Marines for over twenty years and taught high school for fifteen. I'm retired from both now.
Five-year-olds are 'kindergartners' here.
Vi auguro una buona giornata.

Comment from GWinterwin

Excellent

Good story to get a person to thinking. Now did God strike him dead or does someone want everyone else to believe that. Maybe a good way to get away with murder, maybe not but gives the reader room for thought.

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017

Thanks, GW

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Well, Bill,

It seems that you and I have attended the same observational classes... there are certain topics that can almost guarantee attention or success. try a baby or puppy photo too.

All the best
G

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017

I'll write a murder scene and use a picture of a puppy with its chin on a baby who has his hands folded in prayer while sitting in a field of dandelions.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Well he got his comeuppance here! God is always watching and sending the grim reaper when you forget to mention his name, he he he, best wishes for the contest, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017

Thanks, Dolly

Comment from Asem.inspirations

Excellent

Good morning, Bill: I love how you did manage to mention God in this Dribble Flash Fiction contest entry, giving it the spiritual influence you desired to give it. This is a very smart short story. I love just even the thought. I hope that you do very well in this contest. Great spiritual thoughts!

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017

Thanks, Tier, for the positive review. Bill

Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

Very good, and very true too. It seems that in order to win a contest your writing must be religious in nature. I recently lost a songwriting contest. The winning entry was a chant, "Bless you, Jesus."
The phrase was repeated over and over for eighteen stanzas.

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017

I, too, have lost, over and over, to works with a teary prayer in it.

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hahahah, wonderful, Well, this should do well, I would say. If every body is into religion, then you will surly win, and I will surely lose. Good luck with a great write. All the best. Ulla:))

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017

If I won this contest, or was even mentioned, I would pass out. Whatever criteria the secret committee uses to judge these usually defies explanation.

Comment from nomi338

Excellent

Comes when you least expect it. Enlightenment! What a wonderful tool. It can make the dullest seem bright, it can make the wrongest seem right, it can rescue the day from the night, give you courage in the face of fright. Okay, that's enough of that. Not bad Sir Scribe. This is a nice surprise and a break from the animal kingdom.

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017

His inspiration was costly. Note the title.

reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017

His inspiration was costly. Note the title.

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Bill, this is really excellent. So much to noodle over thinking about what the light really was while including many other social constructs.

This is really superb, so all the best to you in the contest.

Gloria

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017

Thanks, Gloria, for the encouraging review. Bill