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Together

A love poem

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Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
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This is a really beautiful love poem, one of the best I seen entered, I sure hope you won in this contest, it's really that good. ~Kerry

 Comment Written 02-Nov-2017

reply by the author on 03-Nov-2017
    Thank you, Kerry. I'm glad you liked it. To bad you weren't on the committee. I didn't win but I got something more valuable. I captured the essence of your smile.
reply by Kerry Foley Robinson on 03-Nov-2017
    Awe... that's so very sweet. It should of won, then again when it come to committee decisions, I find they don't judge fairly. I see a lot of wins that shouldn't be when there are better poems/stories/etc.. out there that should of won.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
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Hi Poetwatch, this is such a tender loving poem for the contest entry. Well written in free verse and the words are lovely and very meaningful. 'And light the way into forever.' This line is a very good use of metaphor. I wish you luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2017

reply by the author on 18-Oct-2017
    Thank you, Dorothy. I'm glad you liked it. I use metaphors in everything I write or try to.
Comment from estory
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This poem expresses those feelings we all have, it has some nice music in it, but I think it could use some personal images, some personal experiences, to bring it to life and give us something to latch onto, to raise our emotions, to give us that feeling we are sharing in a special moment. estory

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2017

reply by the author on 18-Oct-2017
    Thank you, estory. Your comments are very well received. I just copied them and will try to apply their usage from now on. Are you teaching any classes?
reply by estory on 21-Oct-2017
    no, I don't have time for that. My advice is read, read read poetry. What kind of poets have you read? and how long have you been writing? In order to get to know the possibilities and the forms, I would start at the beginning, and move up. Start with Donne, Spenser, Shakespeare, and then go into the Romantics, Keats, etc. and then Yeats, Heaney, Williams, Anderson, the modernists and the contemporarists. estory
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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Much togetherness here in your delightful love poem filled with loving and warm sentiments for an everlasting love that thrives and survives, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2017

reply by the author on 18-Oct-2017
    Thank you. I'm glad it found favor in your eyes.
Comment from amada
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The artwork is very contemporary...nothing mushy about it. The theme is dreamy and enchanting;, "We became one for all eternity. " A lovely poem about a forever love. Nice.


 Comment Written 18-Oct-2017

reply by the author on 18-Oct-2017
    Thank you, Amada. I just wrote what I felt. though I do get mushy once in a while. :)
Comment from Irish Rain
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'All I gave was endless love'....what a beautiful line! In endless love, you have given absolutely everything!! A wonderful love poem! Blessings...

 Comment Written 17-Oct-2017

reply by the author on 18-Oct-2017
    Thank you. When one strives to go forward and life holds you back only true love keeps you from falling.
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
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And when we lay down to sleep
We will smile for we are
Together.
That is our destiny,
To be one, forever. '
This is so sweet, a wonderful love poem love and well done Meia x

 Comment Written 17-Oct-2017

reply by the author on 18-Oct-2017
    I'm glad you liked it, Meia. I just write what I felt.
Comment from evesayshi
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In my opinion, this is a love poem, strictly from the heart of one possessed by love in all its earnest fervor - plaintive in its feeling of
unfulfilled promise, but content in the shared unity and intimacy of a forever love...

 Comment Written 17-Oct-2017

reply by the author on 18-Oct-2017
    Thank you. The unfulfilled promise I'm still and will keep and it not... well we still are together.
reply by evesayshi on 18-Oct-2017
    You are very welcome, and I believe the promise by both of you is already being fulfilled. I wish I could have kept mine...
Comment from Boogienights
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This is a very lovely poem about love that will last forever and beyond. Did you write this about someone in your life? If so they are very lucky.I think it will do well in the contest, and I wish you good luck.

 Comment Written 17-Oct-2017

reply by the author on 18-Oct-2017
    Thank you. As long as I can touch your heart, I know it will touch her's.
reply by Boogienights on 18-Oct-2017
Comment from Ogden
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Optimistic, guileless, idealistic, idyllic, perhaps a bit exaggerated in places, but clearly all from the heart.

Good luck in the contest, Poetwatch.

Don (aka Ogden)

 Comment Written 17-Oct-2017

reply by the author on 18-Oct-2017
    Well thank you, Don. I must say you have a way with words That is what I need to learn. My feelings are there in simple words, yet, I know that there are many words more suited to say what I want to say.
reply by Ogden on 18-Oct-2017
    You are most welcome, and thanks for the compliments!
    Don