Dancing shoes
A little prima Dona.16 total reviews
Comment from Thomas Bowling
I wonder why no one liked her. Perhaps if they had videotaped her dancing she would have seen that she was not as special as she thought she was.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2017
I wonder why no one liked her. Perhaps if they had videotaped her dancing she would have seen that she was not as special as she thought she was.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2017
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Thank you
Comment from GWinterwin
Good word flow and rhyming as you tell of your experience with the dance team. I guess it pays to always be humble and kind. Those who are great and yet humble are the really great ones.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2017
Good word flow and rhyming as you tell of your experience with the dance team. I guess it pays to always be humble and kind. Those who are great and yet humble are the really great ones.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2017
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Thank you
Comment from Irish Rain
Oh my....not funny, but it is, ha ha. I can see both sides to this. I would have been tripping you too, ha ha. A delightful story with a great moral, wonderful entry! Blessings...
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2017
Oh my....not funny, but it is, ha ha. I can see both sides to this. I would have been tripping you too, ha ha. A delightful story with a great moral, wonderful entry! Blessings...
Comment Written 13-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2017
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Thank you for reading and revoiei
Thanks for reading and reviewing.
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Thank you for reading and revoiei
Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Comment from JennaG
This is a great story in a poem! It easily held my attention from beginning to end. Children can be so very cruel. And, sadly, sometimes those bad things that happen to us when we're growing up stick with us for the rest of our lives. I enjoyed reading this. It was creative and original. Best of luck to you in the contest! :)
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2017
This is a great story in a poem! It easily held my attention from beginning to end. Children can be so very cruel. And, sadly, sometimes those bad things that happen to us when we're growing up stick with us for the rest of our lives. I enjoyed reading this. It was creative and original. Best of luck to you in the contest! :)
Comment Written 13-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2017
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Thank you so much.
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Thank you so much.
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, definitely 6 Star worthy, but I have no more the rest of the month, unfortunately. My only criticism was the fact it ended too soon. I wanted to read that the "bullies" received justice in the end. The write was fluid both in rhythm and rhyme and striking in presentation. Best of luck in the contest...
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2017
In my opinion, definitely 6 Star worthy, but I have no more the rest of the month, unfortunately. My only criticism was the fact it ended too soon. I wanted to read that the "bullies" received justice in the end. The write was fluid both in rhythm and rhyme and striking in presentation. Best of luck in the contest...
Comment Written 13-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2017
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Thank you so mucn
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You are very welcome...
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
Awe... poor little girl, that is so horrible how children could be so cruel, trying to ruin your moment in the sun. I loved your story, I remember those days as a child in sequence, tu-tu's, and tap shoes, lol, I loved it:)) thank for sharing your story.
~Kerry
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2017
Awe... poor little girl, that is so horrible how children could be so cruel, trying to ruin your moment in the sun. I loved your story, I remember those days as a child in sequence, tu-tu's, and tap shoes, lol, I loved it:)) thank for sharing your story.
~Kerry
Comment Written 13-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2017
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Thanks so much for reading. Glad you enjoyed it.
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Your very welcome.
Comment from Heather Knight
I do hope this was not true. It's lovely as a poem and very funny, but it would have been very sad in real life.
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2017
I do hope this was not true. It's lovely as a poem and very funny, but it would have been very sad in real life.
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2017
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No it is not true but it probably could have been. Thanks for reading and commenting.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Hahahaha...
Got a little tied up in the whole situation, huh, Jenintore?
Perhaps, given your classmates predisposition to dethrone you from your lofty perch you might have thought to look before you leapt?
Momma should have known better, if nothing else.
Cute kid, cute poem.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2017
Hahahaha...
Got a little tied up in the whole situation, huh, Jenintore?
Perhaps, given your classmates predisposition to dethrone you from your lofty perch you might have thought to look before you leapt?
Momma should have known better, if nothing else.
Cute kid, cute poem.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2017
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Thanks for the comments Dean.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
LOL what a cute piece of writing. Nicely done in rhyme just a little catchy in flow in some places. Loved the twist at the end and is it for real?
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2017
LOL what a cute piece of writing. Nicely done in rhyme just a little catchy in flow in some places. Loved the twist at the end and is it for real?
Comment Written 12-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2017
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No it is fiction. Thanks for reading and your valued comments.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written story in a poem you have penned. You used very good descriptive wording and very cute imagery with the picture you chose. I enjoyed reading it very much! Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2017
This is a very well written story in a poem you have penned. You used very good descriptive wording and very cute imagery with the picture you chose. I enjoyed reading it very much! Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 12-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2017
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Thank you