Comment from smileycloud

Excellent

good contest entry
such a fine message in a short space available
the attraction from 2 ends of the earth and the attraction between 2 opposite people are very similar indeed
have a smiley day

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017

Thanks for the encouraging words and high rating. Both are much appreciated.

Joan

Comment from poetwatch

Excellent

Very good. I wasn't much of a chemist, but I know the chemistry that pulls two unlike souls together. Each has their own way but can compromise and make beautiful music together. Thank you for drawing a lovely painting.

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017

Thank you for taking time to read and review. I appreciate all the stars.

dp

Comment from GracieAnn

Excellent

DP,
This Katauta Poetry Contest entry fulfills the requirements of the contest parameters. I hesitated between 4 and 5 on the stars for this reason. Most people are not familiar with the terms you have used to give your write meaning. If a person does not read the latest on molecular science, he or she are lost on the term covalent bond. Heady sounding, but not easily relatable. Communicate with familiar words without being trite. Just my assessment. All the best in the contest! :0 GracieAnn






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 Comment Written 18-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017

Thanks for the review. I wanted to see if scientific terms would work. I got a few thanks from scientists for using terms from their life in a poem which seldom happens. You have to try to connect with anyone that might read. Also people can learn a new word by looking it up in a dictionary and think of a new way to use it. I do that often. I have seen people even define words in author's notes.

dp

Comment from WalkerMan

Excellent

This katauta poem does fit its form well, assuming "toward" is pronounced with two syllables (which not everyone chooses to do). In any case, I like the theme, which is an appropriate but uncommon way of expressing a loving relationship in few words. Well done.

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017

Thanks for the review. I have made
the correction.

dp

reply by WalkerMan on 19-Oct-2017

You are welcome. I see the correction and removed the comment about it. -- Mike

Comment from brenda faye curtis

Excellent

This poem is excellent, with well-chosen words selected to make a bold statement about the power of love. The only alteration I could suggest is to change the syllable count, which is currently 5-6-7. I've read your work before, and I'm sure you'll do very well in the contest. Good luck!

 Comment Written 16-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017

Thanks for reading and ratting this poem. Line two is seven syllables Toward can be read as either 1 or 2 syllables in the dictionary. I choose the two syllables Though some think it one. So it counts two=1 disparate=3 souls 1 toward 2 which adds up to 7.

dragonpoet

reply by brenda faye curtis on 17-Oct-2017

You are welcome, and I did not know that about the word toward. Thank you for letting me know.

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Hi there;
Thank you for sharing your entry in the Katauta contest. Your poem is structured correctly, and your lines work well together. I had to look up 'covalent, ' and when I did, it seems like the perfect word for this piece.

Great job and good luck in the contest,

~patty~

 Comment Written 16-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017

Thanks for working so hard to understand the poem. I appreciate the nice comments and the generous rating.

Joan

Comment from SLMorrical

Excellent

Interesting way to say that opposites attract each other. In science it is the molecules that are attracted to other molecules to create elements. In addition, you can see in real life how this occurs with people, and yes a bond is created that can not be broken. Love it.

 Comment Written 16-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017

Thanks for reading and reviewing. I appreciate all the stars.

dp

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This speaks about the natural human instinct to attract to love, two at two different poles are there but the call of attraction at heart continued and by souls they met magnetically; I liked.

 Comment Written 11-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Oct-2017

Thank you.

dp

Comment from B.B. Rose

Excellent

This was an interesting approach to a love poem, the "science" of attraction. I enjoyed it greatly. My only negative was actually the word love. It made the line read (and when read aloud, sound) awkward. It really would have been more true to your theme simply by not being there. "forming a covalent bond."
Also, no cap on Forming as it continues your thought from the line above.

 Comment Written 11-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Oct-2017

Thanks for the thorough review. I mad both changes.

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Comment from Leftkansas

Excellent

This is very well written and carries a lot of meaning to us (" Physics loving nerds"),
Thank you for that. We are not often included when it comes to the arts. Good luck in the contest. I also posted an entry for the same contest, titled Because of you.
Pales in comparison I'm afraid.

 Comment Written 11-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 11-Oct-2017

Thanks for the kind review. I was think magnetism with love but for some reason the word covalent came into my mind.
I had to check the definition to make sure it fit. I am glad it worked and included scientists in the mix or readers.

I will check yours out.

dp