What's Death? Tommy Wants to Know
A young boy is puzzled about death.35 total reviews
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello Brigitte, Ahhh ... a poem written through the eyes of a child expressing his/her love for a grandma who has died. Their bond is strong and will last forevermore. Of special note:
"Please God, I want to find Grandma now.
She died, so they say, please tell me why and how.
Is she in heaven up there with you?
Please, tell her I really need a talking to."
Lovely artwork choice. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2017
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Hello Brigitte, Ahhh ... a poem written through the eyes of a child expressing his/her love for a grandma who has died. Their bond is strong and will last forevermore. Of special note:
"Please God, I want to find Grandma now.
She died, so they say, please tell me why and how.
Is she in heaven up there with you?
Please, tell her I really need a talking to."
Lovely artwork choice. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
Comment Written 03-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2017
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Thank you so very much for this lovely review. This was written with knowlegde of the subject. We must all face this at some point in our lives and learn how to address a child's concern Children have a confusing perspective on the subject. Thank you for your good wishes, I feel honored and humbledto have this poem nominated.
Fan Friend,
Brigitte
Comment from Joy Graham
Your title and picture break my heart. You definitely pulled me in with effective advertising here. (I always get confused about effective and affective despite taking several grammar classes - sorry about that).
My family is all about the kids. My step-granddaughter lost her mother when she was two years old. I met her when she was five years old. She told me all about her mom in her five year old way. I thought she had a pretty amazing understanding. However, as she got older more of the story had to be filled in so she could understand it completely. I find she has many adults in her life that have vowed to look out for her, and surround her with an abundance of love. She has all my love and more. I think of her as my family and that will never change.
I connected with this poem on an emotional level. All children are unique and would require different explanations to help them understand the death of a loved one.
Congratulations on your nomination for Poem of the Month!
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2017
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Your title and picture break my heart. You definitely pulled me in with effective advertising here. (I always get confused about effective and affective despite taking several grammar classes - sorry about that).
My family is all about the kids. My step-granddaughter lost her mother when she was two years old. I met her when she was five years old. She told me all about her mom in her five year old way. I thought she had a pretty amazing understanding. However, as she got older more of the story had to be filled in so she could understand it completely. I find she has many adults in her life that have vowed to look out for her, and surround her with an abundance of love. She has all my love and more. I think of her as my family and that will never change.
I connected with this poem on an emotional level. All children are unique and would require different explanations to help them understand the death of a loved one.
Congratulations on your nomination for Poem of the Month!
Comment Written 03-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2017
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Thank you Joy and I am in touch with your emotions on this subject. It is one that must befall on adults and children at some point in life and is difficult Children have such a different perspective that often it is confusing but must be addressed with faith and love. Thank you this kind review. I honored to to have been given this nomination.
Fan Friend,
Brigitte
Comment from RGstar
Lovely. Although nice to read, could you imagine the trauma of a grandma well loved when the understanding finely hits? Hard to explain.
A lovely write.
My best wishes, A small piece of reality
Have a nice day..
RGstar
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017
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Lovely. Although nice to read, could you imagine the trauma of a grandma well loved when the understanding finely hits? Hard to explain.
A lovely write.
My best wishes, A small piece of reality
Have a nice day..
RGstar
Comment Written 10-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017
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Thank you RGstar for your reading and reviewing. Life is hard to understand for little ones.
Fan Friend,
Brigitte
Comment from dragonpoet
Sounds like this little boy went to the person who could help. The adults in his life should be more like the grandmother was in life and try to answer this sad and lonely boy's questions. It might help them too.
The rhyming seems appropriate for a poem from a young heart.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017
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Sounds like this little boy went to the person who could help. The adults in his life should be more like the grandmother was in life and try to answer this sad and lonely boy's questions. It might help them too.
The rhyming seems appropriate for a poem from a young heart.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 10-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017
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Thank you Dragonpoet for these kind words. I will keep my nails cut and hammer the keyboard....
Fan Friend,
Brigitte
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You're welcome. It is easier to type with well trimmed nails.
Joan
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Thank you and you too.
Brgitte
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My pleasure. I will.
Joan
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Thank you for your kind comments.
Fan Friend,
brgitte
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No problem.
dp
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Going to read your new work. Anticipating...
Brgitte
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Thank's for your interest.
dp
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Your poem takes us to the POV of a child after a loved one had died. We are terrible at trying to explain death to children. I had to do that to my sons, and don't envy any one who has to try and explain why they won't be seeing someone they love any more. Well done, this was very sad, but it was a poem that brought it to the attention of adults. Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017
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Your poem takes us to the POV of a child after a loved one had died. We are terrible at trying to explain death to children. I had to do that to my sons, and don't envy any one who has to try and explain why they won't be seeing someone they love any more. Well done, this was very sad, but it was a poem that brought it to the attention of adults. Sandra xxx
Comment Written 10-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017
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These are the exact thoughts I had in mind when I penned this poem. Adult euphemisms are lost on children so it has to be simple and a child talking to God raises hope for the future.
Fan Friend,
brigitte
Comment from smileycloud
very good strong story
a definite personification of a childs confused mind during a time of drastic emotions
you have captured the fear and upsetting activities really well
the poetry itself
your rhyme scheme flow cadence meter is all fine
I thought you had a 9/11/9/9 meter thing happening in each stanza but at closer look I see between 9 and 13, and it still works just fine
well done with this good work
blessings
have a smiley day
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017
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very good strong story
a definite personification of a childs confused mind during a time of drastic emotions
you have captured the fear and upsetting activities really well
the poetry itself
your rhyme scheme flow cadence meter is all fine
I thought you had a 9/11/9/9 meter thing happening in each stanza but at closer look I see between 9 and 13, and it still works just fine
well done with this good work
blessings
have a smiley day
Comment Written 10-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017
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You kind review is supportive and detailed. I sometimes get so lost in content, I neglect the fine skills necessary to publish. Glad this one worked. Thank you, smileycloud.
Fan Friend,
brigitte
Comment from GWinterwin
Very good poem with a very real message. The picture is perfect for this writing. Yes it is very hard to explain death to a small child, guess all we can do is our best. Thanks for sharing, God bless always.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017
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Very good poem with a very real message. The picture is perfect for this writing. Yes it is very hard to explain death to a small child, guess all we can do is our best. Thanks for sharing, God bless always.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017
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I, thank you. This supportive and will keep me writing! A child praying to God represents hope for us all.
God Bless,
Brigitte
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
This is a beautiful, yet, heartbreaking poem, so very sad. That poor little boy knew nothing, but just wanted grandma, this brought a tear to my eye, wonderfully written. ~Kerry
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017
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This is a beautiful, yet, heartbreaking poem, so very sad. That poor little boy knew nothing, but just wanted grandma, this brought a tear to my eye, wonderfully written. ~Kerry
Comment Written 09-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017
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Thank you, Kerry. It is sad but life is a gift and death inevitable. A child praying to God symbolizes hope for the future for us all.
Fan Friend,
Brigitte
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yes it does, my friend:))
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Thank you.
brgitte
Comment from LaRosa
Usually we read from the perspective of the adult trying make explanations.
Writing your poem from the perspective of the child facing the subject of death is refreshing. How DO we explain it to them?
The easy conversational tone, the quick flow of ideas, makes the poem interesting and thought provoking. The reader DOES feel the child's pain.
Nice work, Brigitte.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2017
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Usually we read from the perspective of the adult trying make explanations.
Writing your poem from the perspective of the child facing the subject of death is refreshing. How DO we explain it to them?
The easy conversational tone, the quick flow of ideas, makes the poem interesting and thought provoking. The reader DOES feel the child's pain.
Nice work, Brigitte.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2017
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Thank you LaRosa. You I expressed what I intended to accomplish with this poem. Reading it and commentating is appreciated by this 'Wannabe" writer.
Fan Friend,
Brigitte
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For a 'wannabe' you're on the right path, it's a GO! Hang in and don't give up, Lady!
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Blessings,
Brigitte
Comment from apky
Hullo Friend,
Received your new post(s). But I've been away last week and still will have little time to review all that I have in my messages box.
So this is my little apology to let you know I'm a bit indisposed at the moment and can't give the kind of comprehensive review I normally do for your chapters and posts. We have a very dear family friend who has been hospitalized and operated on, so I spend most days at the clinic and sorting out business paperwork.
I know it's a fake five stars, more or less. Please accept.
All the best,
Apky
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2017
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Hullo Friend,
Received your new post(s). But I've been away last week and still will have little time to review all that I have in my messages box.
So this is my little apology to let you know I'm a bit indisposed at the moment and can't give the kind of comprehensive review I normally do for your chapters and posts. We have a very dear family friend who has been hospitalized and operated on, so I spend most days at the clinic and sorting out business paperwork.
I know it's a fake five stars, more or less. Please accept.
All the best,
Apky
Comment Written 09-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2017
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Prayers and thoughts are with you at this difficult time. Thank you for taking time out to rate.
Sincerely,
Brgitte
