Comment from Brigitte Elko

Excellent

This is an entertaining limerick and i loved the picture. I read out loud more than once, the last line didn't flow for me with the other lines. No offense meant, just my opinion.
Good luck in the contest.

Fan Friend,
Brigitte

 Comment Written 09-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Oct-2017

you're right. think I could've done better, but wrote it in a hurry at the last minute. thanks for your good wishes

reply by Brigitte Elko on 09-Oct-2017

My pleasure. truly fun to read.

Comment from moongirlwriter

Excellent

very cute but the second line has too many syllables, it has 9. I like it because it makes Halloween fun and not scary. The artwork is so very cute too.

 Comment Written 09-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Oct-2017

when - one syllable
alive - two syllables
played - one syllable
on - one syllable
xylophones - three syllables
total - eight syllables - right?

reply by moongirlwriter on 09-Oct-2017

Actually no, with xylophones, I think it's actually 4. If you say it out loud, you'll see: x' y' lo' phones'
I still loved it, such fun to read.

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This Halloween limerick, Skeleton Music, follows the beat of the limerick pretty close, and the humor of the situation is clear. Xylophone players are truly dedicated to the craft.

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 08-Oct-2017

thanks, Bill. when I entered, there was only one skeleton in the limerick, but I could only find a picture of two, so had to change it on the spot.

Comment from RodG

Excellent

I wonder if they played that oldie "Dry Bones." A fun limerick that made me chuckle. Interesting that these two were Latin. Had they once played in a mariachi band? Well-chosen rhymes.

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017

Dem bones, dem bones, dem dry bones? They prob'ly did.
Thanks for the neat review.