Out of Wedlock
A Quatern71 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
I somehow missed this poem--maybe it was for a blind contest, and I hope it was well received. I admired your storytelling in the Quatern form and rhymes plus modified repeats, along with the dramatic photograph. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2018
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I somehow missed this poem--maybe it was for a blind contest, and I hope it was well received. I admired your storytelling in the Quatern form and rhymes plus modified repeats, along with the dramatic photograph. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 10-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2018
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Thanks, Joan, for reviewing my Quatern and for your kind comments. Much appreciated! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Joy Graham
I love the Quatern poetry form and have worked with it often. I like that you modified your repeating line. It adds interest to the poem when done skillfully. You are a highly skilled poem in my humble opinion, and I always admire your work. I'm taking in your rhyme scheme. I'm not sure if it is what they call the blanket form of rhyming? I've never tried it, but it looks impressive here.
Congratulations on being nominated for Poem of the Month!
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2017
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I love the Quatern poetry form and have worked with it often. I like that you modified your repeating line. It adds interest to the poem when done skillfully. You are a highly skilled poem in my humble opinion, and I always admire your work. I'm taking in your rhyme scheme. I'm not sure if it is what they call the blanket form of rhyming? I've never tried it, but it looks impressive here.
Congratulations on being nominated for Poem of the Month!
Comment Written 03-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2017
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Many thanks, Joy. Glad you enjoyed it. All the best, Tony.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Her arm's outstretched, her fingers, too -line is very poignant in this poem as she stretches out towards the 'bastard's' father in hope. Really like this quatern Tony, very nicely done.
cheers
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017
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Her arm's outstretched, her fingers, too -line is very poignant in this poem as she stretches out towards the 'bastard's' father in hope. Really like this quatern Tony, very nicely done.
cheers
Comment Written 07-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017
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Thanks very much for your kind words, Valda! Glad you enjoyed it! Tony
Comment from Leineco
something old
a tale of woe
love grown cold
alone again
something new
a poet pens
modernized view
of heartbreak's toll
something borrowed
two become one
a scion bestowed
threads disengage
something blue
patina sets in
gold tone askew
ennui corrodes bliss
A story as old as mankind, and yet, its telling
when skillfully wrought, never fails to capture
attention.
Nicely done Tony. . .stealthily rhymed and painted
with a practiced hand :-)
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017
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something old
a tale of woe
love grown cold
alone again
something new
a poet pens
modernized view
of heartbreak's toll
something borrowed
two become one
a scion bestowed
threads disengage
something blue
patina sets in
gold tone askew
ennui corrodes bliss
A story as old as mankind, and yet, its telling
when skillfully wrought, never fails to capture
attention.
Nicely done Tony. . .stealthily rhymed and painted
with a practiced hand :-)
Comment Written 04-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017
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Very many thanks for your poetic response and six stars! Both very much appreciated. Sorry I'm a bit late in responding - life's fairly frantic here in the spring! I hope you're keeping well. All the best, Tony
Comment from angel123
I really like your poem, especially the repeating sentence. It made your message more powerful. Your poem flows well with emotion and your artwork choice goes well with your words. Good alliteration of d and w words and I also like the ending of your poem.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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I really like your poem, especially the repeating sentence. It made your message more powerful. Your poem flows well with emotion and your artwork choice goes well with your words. Good alliteration of d and w words and I also like the ending of your poem.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Very many thanks for your review of "Out of Wedlock" a couple of weeks ago, Angel. I'm afraid I've not been on site much recently, but I appreciated your kind words and the six stars. Glad you enjoyed it! All the best, Tony
Comment from RoDanni
Women have always payed this ultimate price for untimely passions. The language in the poem is not modern but the theme is ageless. No matter how far the women's rights movement pushes upwards and forwards, this simple truth--that men can make promises but it's women that end up pregnant--is never going to change. Made me sad to read it.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Women have always payed this ultimate price for untimely passions. The language in the poem is not modern but the theme is ageless. No matter how far the women's rights movement pushes upwards and forwards, this simple truth--that men can make promises but it's women that end up pregnant--is never going to change. Made me sad to read it.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Very many thanks for your review of "Out of Wedlock" a couple of weeks ago, Roseanne. I'm afraid I've not been on site much recently, but I appreciated your interesting comments. All the best, Tony
Comment from Thomas Bowling
So sad. I heard today that not long ago 70% of people were married. Now less than 50% ever marry. It seems that people make every excuse they can to avoid marriage.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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So sad. I heard today that not long ago 70% of people were married. Now less than 50% ever marry. It seems that people make every excuse they can to avoid marriage.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Very many thanks for your review of "Out of Wedlock" a couple of weeks ago, Thomas. I'm afraid I've not been on site much recently, but I appreciated your interesting comments. All the best, Tony
Comment from TAB_that's me
Excellent writing Tony! Filled with imagery, alliteration, rhyme. I love the line that repeats.
Worthy of a six!
Teresa
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Excellent writing Tony! Filled with imagery, alliteration, rhyme. I love the line that repeats.
Worthy of a six!
Teresa
Comment Written 03-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Very many thanks for your review of "Out of Wedlock" a couple of weeks ago, Teresa. I'm afraid I've not been on site much recently, but I appreciated your kind words and the six stars. Glad you enjoyed it! All the best, Tony
Comment from His Grayness
Apologies for lacking the highly deserved sixth star for this marvelous and captivating work! The dialog is magic in perfect presentation of white font on black background with powerful artwork of arm reaching for life! I loved this work in all dimensions and thank this brilliant author for another masterful delivery of beautiful poetry. HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Apologies for lacking the highly deserved sixth star for this marvelous and captivating work! The dialog is magic in perfect presentation of white font on black background with powerful artwork of arm reaching for life! I loved this work in all dimensions and thank this brilliant author for another masterful delivery of beautiful poetry. HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
Comment Written 03-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Very many thanks for your review of "Out of Wedlock" a couple of weeks ago, Vance. I'm afraid I've not been on site much recently, but I appreciated your kind words. Glad you enjoyed it! All the best, Tony
Comment from Sanku
A poem with strong emotional content.A single mother to be hoping for support from her man.
The man has obviously walked away or is not willing to take the responsibility
The form is adhered to admirably inspite of a small shift.
all the best for the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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A poem with strong emotional content.A single mother to be hoping for support from her man.
The man has obviously walked away or is not willing to take the responsibility
The form is adhered to admirably inspite of a small shift.
all the best for the contest.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Very many thanks for your review of "Out of Wedlock" a couple of weeks ago, Sanku. I'm afraid I've not been on site much recently, but I appreciated your comments and kind words. Glad you enjoyed it! All the best, Tony
