Teenage Angst
An earthly reworking of the song Part of Your World15 total reviews
Comment from kathleenspalding
I've only heard the song a couple times (I have boys, LOL) but yes, I can hear it. Very cute song re-write has a great life lesson incorporated. Great job!
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2017
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I've only heard the song a couple times (I have boys, LOL) but yes, I can hear it. Very cute song re-write has a great life lesson incorporated. Great job!
Comment Written 13-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2017
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Thanks for the kind words and all the stars. Glad you saw the similarities to the song. My 26 year old daughter saw it immediately. Some who read it don't mention it even though it is mentioned in the description and notes.
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Lots of people might not be familiar with it, since it's a girl's movie. ;-)
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Meant to stick a "You're welcome" with that. Sorry, getting late (yawn), LOL.
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That's OK, it happens.
Joan
Comment from mermaids
There is a musical feel and flow to your words. "A price for being me" is a great line that adds strength to your song, it shows the impact of being oneself. Excellent use of words.
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There is a musical feel and flow to your words. "A price for being me" is a great line that adds strength to your song, it shows the impact of being oneself. Excellent use of words.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2017
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Thanks for reading and reviewing. I appreciate both very much.
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Comment from GracieAnn
Dragonpoet,
The trip through HS for most is very difficult and as Steven King said, "High School was Hell". That in reality helped him to become what he is today. Trials mold us, but in an immature mind, that is not clear. You have done a good job relaying the angst. Even the unstructured and different amount of lines in each stanza are representative of a teen's cluttered mind. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2017
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Dragonpoet,
The trip through HS for most is very difficult and as Steven King said, "High School was Hell". That in reality helped him to become what he is today. Trials mold us, but in an immature mind, that is not clear. You have done a good job relaying the angst. Even the unstructured and different amount of lines in each stanza are representative of a teen's cluttered mind. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 13-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2017
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Thanks for the thorough review and encouraging comments.
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Comment from Elizabeth Daniels
A very inspiring poem. So many kids are picked on just for being themselves and not bowing down to the 'cool' kids. By the way, I too live in Minnesota.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2017
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A very inspiring poem. So many kids are picked on just for being themselves and not bowing down to the 'cool' kids. By the way, I too live in Minnesota.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2017
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Thanks for the review. Glad you liked it and glad to meet another person living in Minnesota.
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Comment from LIJ Red
Disney? The 4F who wrote about the rat? Kidding, although I never saw any mermaids, large or small. You do point out a problem among the young, following the wrong crowd because it has hype. An excellent poem at any rate.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
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Disney? The 4F who wrote about the rat? Kidding, although I never saw any mermaids, large or small. You do point out a problem among the young, following the wrong crowd because it has hype. An excellent poem at any rate.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
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Thanks for the witty words of encouragement for my poem. Glad you liked it.
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Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Teenage years can be difficult, finding your way and dealing with bullies, deciding who you are and what you want from life amidst the hormonal changes, your poem asks the question and also gives the answer: be yourself, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
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Teenage years can be difficult, finding your way and dealing with bullies, deciding who you are and what you want from life amidst the hormonal changes, your poem asks the question and also gives the answer: be yourself, love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
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Thanks for your review, high rating, and insightful comments.
Joan
Comment from robyn corum
Joan,
I saw the similarity almost immediately. *smile* Looks like we both got the song rewrite fever at the same time. hahaha! I really like the message in yours. It's a super important message, for young and old alike. Keep preaching, sister!
Only one small nit, if you'll permit:
1.) And be part (of) their world
Thanks!
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2017
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Joan,
I saw the similarity almost immediately. *smile* Looks like we both got the song rewrite fever at the same time. hahaha! I really like the message in yours. It's a super important message, for young and old alike. Keep preaching, sister!
Only one small nit, if you'll permit:
1.) And be part (of) their world
Thanks!
Comment Written 06-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2017
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Thanks, Robin, for your kind comments and your spelling correction. I'd like to see the song
you rewrote.
Joan
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hahahahahaha!!!!!! oh, girl... You already reviewed it. You just didn't realize it was a song rewrite. hahahaha!
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Comment from Lucian Carter
This is a nice homage to the Disney film. It's more serious, but the message isn't all that different. Be yourself. Go your own way. Don't let anyone (or any fish) stand in your way. Inspirational stuff.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2017
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This is a nice homage to the Disney film. It's more serious, but the message isn't all that different. Be yourself. Go your own way. Don't let anyone (or any fish) stand in your way. Inspirational stuff.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2017
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Thanks for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the kind remarks.
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Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem. We can only be truly happy when we are ourselves in all ways. When we try to impress others or to be like them, we end up very unhappy and feel worthless.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2017
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A very well-written poem. We can only be truly happy when we are ourselves in all ways. When we try to impress others or to be like them, we end up very unhappy and feel worthless.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2017
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Thanks for the words of encouragement and the insightful remarks.
Joan
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
When I was in high school I joined Big Brother/Sisters. I got a little sister. We later kind of adopted her brother for a short period as well. She's in high school now and told me about a month ago that she was being bullied. My heart broke. You never want to see or hear a loved one say that but she's been given a lot of support and the school has stepped in, I think it's still happening but they are aware of the situation and she'll get through it. Bullying is a hard thing to go through. The bullies don't know what they are doing to the kids they make fun of. They don't know the pain they cause. It's hard
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2017
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When I was in high school I joined Big Brother/Sisters. I got a little sister. We later kind of adopted her brother for a short period as well. She's in high school now and told me about a month ago that she was being bullied. My heart broke. You never want to see or hear a loved one say that but she's been given a lot of support and the school has stepped in, I think it's still happening but they are aware of the situation and she'll get through it. Bullying is a hard thing to go through. The bullies don't know what they are doing to the kids they make fun of. They don't know the pain they cause. It's hard
Comment Written 05-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2017
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Thank you for reading and getting the point of the poem. I am glad you are helping her. I was bullied in high school too so i can empathize. I agree that bullies don't realize the extent of the damage they are doing to the psyche of the person they bully.
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