Comment from DonandVicki

Excellent

Oh, to see the world through the eyes of a child again. Your well crafted Rondelle captures this mood very well. Very nicely composed. Don and Vicki.

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017

Thanks, Don and Vicki. Lovely comments and much appreciated! Tony

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

If this isn't the perfect piece to accompany this picture then I don't know what is. The camera has cought the essential of the refrain line, or perhaps i should say the refrain line has caught the essential of the picture. Either way they make a great pair.

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017

Thanks, Jim. Lovely comments and much appreciated! Can't go far wrong with a photo like that for inspiration! Tony

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This rondelet. Deep In Thought, quickly tells us, in the perfect form of this poetic structure, that you are one to study your opinions, postulations, and submissions prior to voicing them. Good idea.

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017

Thanks, Bill. A most complimentary review and much appreciated! Tony

Comment from smileycloud

Excellent

Hi me again
thought I would just pop back in to say that I have just now read the other reviews on your poem and I must have been wrong when I thought the syllable count was back the front as there have been some very good writers who have said in their reviews that it is in good Rondelet form so please just ignore my comments
ta
have a smiley day




it is a very beautiful poem
the content is strong and means a great deal to the wisdom of the human mind and heart
thinking before speaking waiting till all is thought through is wisdom

Please do not take me as a definite;- but;- I think your refrain lines are 8 syllables but should they be 4 syllables while the other lines are 8? I am only a learner in all these forms of poetry so just ignore me if I have it back the front

have a smiley day

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017

Thanks for your review, Smiley Cloud. I very much appreciated your comments about the form of the poem. I went back and had another look, only to discover that you were quite right! I had the whole thing back-to-front! You gave me enough time before the contest deadline to recast it according to the correct metrical scheme, as below:
Much thought is due
before I gain the words to speak.
Much thought is due
in times like this while words accrue.
Each day I learn of life?s mystique;
fresh marvels that unfold each week.
Much thought is due.

I owe you a thumbs up for this one, but unfortunately have spent my ration for this month. Many thanks, anyway. It is always a pleasure to get a thorough review! Very few people noticed the basic error in my original!

All the best, Tony

reply by smileycloud on 28-Sep-2017

You are very welcome my FS friend
I was not even sure I had it right
Your revised version is great and says all the same good message
have a smiley day
good luck in the contest
Lorraine

Comment from amada

Excellent

I like this enchanting work phrases a Rondelle. For sure, I would like to try it. It says much in a simple happy way. First and last lines repeat. Closure.

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017

Thanks, Amada. A most complimentary review and much appreciated! Tony

Comment from Halfree

Exceptional

Took me a couple of reads to get into the poem's construction but once in.....WOW. I think the sixer says all I need to say. Good poem, good read and glad I took the time to reread. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017

Thanks, Halfree. A most complimentary review and I much appreciated your six star award! Tony

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Such a cute poem and a beautiful picture. Yes, indeed, it seems as though the child who doesn't talk much yet, is waiting. Waiting until they have enough to talk about and expand on. Such a sweet time in life.

Thank you for sharing,

~patty~

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017

Thanks, Patty. A most complimentary review and much appreciated! Tony

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

Great rhymes and flow and a fine rondolet form. My dad used to always admonish us to THINK BEFORE YOU SPEAK. This made me think of him with gratitude for the insight, even if he delivered it with shouts and frowns. It's pure wisdom, nonetheless! This poem delivers it as self-reflection, thus removing any sense of preachiness. Bravo!


The these inventive rhymes deserve a standing ovation:

while words accrue.
Though life's mystique
unfolds each week,



Love it!

Good luck.

Should prove a contender.

Warmly, rd

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017

Thanks, RD. A most complimentary review and much appreciated! Tony

reply by rama devi on 27-Sep-2017

:-))

Comment from Possummagic

Excellent

I loved you Rondelet Poem and wish you well in the contest. The author speaks of. The development of a child's speech and thought which is fascinating. I liked your imagery.PM

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017

Thanks, Possummagic. A most complimentary review and much appreciated! Tony

Comment from DR DIP

Excellent

I like this little write tony. I love the accompanying pensive photo of the little girl in deep thought. I like your accompanying words and the style the words were written in. Nothing here to change

dip



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 Comment Written 25-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017

Thanks, Dip. A most complimentary review and much appreciated! Tony