Small Beginnings
A Tyburn2 total reviews
Comment from rama devi
Perfect Tyburn style. Adorable presentation and charming tale told succinctly with fine rhyming. Normally, I do advise rhyming ING words but it works splendidly here because it creates a gliding movement like a dance. the rhymes are perfect and the last one has an AHA effect. good delivery with a crescendo build up Also, all the S and sot C sounds sound super read aloud.
Good luck in the contest. A contender, methinks.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2017
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Perfect Tyburn style. Adorable presentation and charming tale told succinctly with fine rhyming. Normally, I do advise rhyming ING words but it works splendidly here because it creates a gliding movement like a dance. the rhymes are perfect and the last one has an AHA effect. good delivery with a crescendo build up Also, all the S and sot C sounds sound super read aloud.
Good luck in the contest. A contender, methinks.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 18-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2017
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Thank you for your insightful comments!
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:-))
Comment from Mustang Patty
thank you for sharing this well formed tyburn with us. This is such a daunting poetic form. I've tried to write one a few times, but I wrestled with the use of the first four adjectives in the last two sentences. However, you did a great job.
~patty~
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2017
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thank you for sharing this well formed tyburn with us. This is such a daunting poetic form. I've tried to write one a few times, but I wrestled with the use of the first four adjectives in the last two sentences. However, you did a great job.
~patty~
Comment Written 17-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2017
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Thank you! It is a challenge, but a fun one
