Huginn and Muninn
A Shakespearean Sonnet for the contest34 total reviews
Comment from ragamuffin
Excellent. I love the style of the "old time" poetry and you've written so well, as well as given us a valuable point or two we should seriously ponder before our time is up and do-overs, forgiveness aren't possible.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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Excellent. I love the style of the "old time" poetry and you've written so well, as well as given us a valuable point or two we should seriously ponder before our time is up and do-overs, forgiveness aren't possible.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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Many thanks, ragamuffin, for this very kind review and the award of six stars. Much appreciated! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for your notes about Norse mythology and the picture you selected to reinforce your poem. I admired your telling the story in alternating rhymes in this rhythmic sonnet Best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2017
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Thank you for your notes about Norse mythology and the picture you selected to reinforce your poem. I admired your telling the story in alternating rhymes in this rhythmic sonnet Best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 19-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2017
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Thanks, Joan, for your review and good luck wishes. Much appreciated! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from krys123
Cheers, Tony;
-enhanced with riches brought on by greed as riches being the memory once obtained from destroying others builds a poor foundation for the future.
-"...brought my conscience to the fore", I'm trying to understand the word "fore" in this particular line, and maybe you could help me, Tony. Fore being first in place or time must mean that your consciousness came to the forefront and you recognize what you are doing a what you have done.
-A very tight and well written Shakespearean sonnet with all the necessary ingredients to make the sonic great. But what especially I find most important is the enjambment flow smoothly throughout the writing. You didn't have any stipulations that cause the reading to jump or miscue.
-I found the picture very interesting and I would love the read the manuscript and I found it also to be very relative and supported to the conceptual theme of your poem. Even the crow on his shoulders was there.
-May you have the best of luck in the contest, Tony, and take care and have a good one.
Alex
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2017
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Cheers, Tony;
-enhanced with riches brought on by greed as riches being the memory once obtained from destroying others builds a poor foundation for the future.
-"...brought my conscience to the fore", I'm trying to understand the word "fore" in this particular line, and maybe you could help me, Tony. Fore being first in place or time must mean that your consciousness came to the forefront and you recognize what you are doing a what you have done.
-A very tight and well written Shakespearean sonnet with all the necessary ingredients to make the sonic great. But what especially I find most important is the enjambment flow smoothly throughout the writing. You didn't have any stipulations that cause the reading to jump or miscue.
-I found the picture very interesting and I would love the read the manuscript and I found it also to be very relative and supported to the conceptual theme of your poem. Even the crow on his shoulders was there.
-May you have the best of luck in the contest, Tony, and take care and have a good one.
Alex
Comment Written 17-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2017
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Thanks for this review, Alex. Appreciated, as always. Yes, you have the meaning I intended with 'fore'. The idea was that the arrival of wisdom should have brought forward a guilty conscience about the past - but didn't, because of age-induced memory loss. All the best to you and yours, Tony
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Thanks for the input on your poem, Tony, and you are very welcome, and take care and have a good one.
Alex
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Tony, this is a very good sonnet in true Shakespearean form. Like much of your poetry I knew nothing about the subject, in this case Hugin and Muninn, and your notes were necessary - those and some reading I followed up with. Good use of metaphor throughout, perfect rhyme in the necessary abab, etc. Perfect iambic pentameter and a clever final couplet, which you made your volta. A great entry for the contest. Good luck. Warm regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2017
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Hi Tony, this is a very good sonnet in true Shakespearean form. Like much of your poetry I knew nothing about the subject, in this case Hugin and Muninn, and your notes were necessary - those and some reading I followed up with. Good use of metaphor throughout, perfect rhyme in the necessary abab, etc. Perfect iambic pentameter and a clever final couplet, which you made your volta. A great entry for the contest. Good luck. Warm regards Dorothy
Comment Written 17-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2017
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Many thanks for your detailed comments about the structure of my sonnet, Dorothy. I'm delighted that you found it interesting and that you liked it well enough to award six stars. Very much appreciated! Best wishes, Tony.
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
You really do know how to write these wonderful Sonnets Tony.
Very interesting and educational with effortless rhythm throughout, I particularly enjoyed the last two lines which completes your fantastic writing brilliantly.
Mitchell
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2017
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You really do know how to write these wonderful Sonnets Tony.
Very interesting and educational with effortless rhythm throughout, I particularly enjoyed the last two lines which completes your fantastic writing brilliantly.
Mitchell
Comment Written 17-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2017
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Very many thanks, Mitchell. Kind words indeed! All the best to you, Tony.
Comment from Mimi Linny
Beautifully written, thought-provoking sonnet! In parallel from life, I loved the transition from Memory to Wisdom and then, so sadly, yet ironically, when Wisdom had settled in, Memory was lost. Loved it! Great piece of work!
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2017
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Beautifully written, thought-provoking sonnet! In parallel from life, I loved the transition from Memory to Wisdom and then, so sadly, yet ironically, when Wisdom had settled in, Memory was lost. Loved it! Great piece of work!
Comment Written 16-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2017
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Thank you so much for this very kind review, Mimi, and for the six stars. Much appreciated. Tony
Comment from Curly Girly
Hi, Tony
In this olde sonnet style poem, we read a true and telling tale about living life selfishly without much thought for others.
We reap what we sow and sometimes we do not know why:
but I was old, my memory had flown,
and I could not recall what I had sown.
Too bad and too sad.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2017
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Hi, Tony
In this olde sonnet style poem, we read a true and telling tale about living life selfishly without much thought for others.
We reap what we sow and sometimes we do not know why:
but I was old, my memory had flown,
and I could not recall what I had sown.
Too bad and too sad.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2017
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Thanks for this perceptive review, Nicole. Perhaps loss of memory comes to old people to protect them from the haunting of past misdeeds. I wouldn't know, of course! LOL All the best, Tony
Comment from His Grayness
Absolutely precious gift of arcane wisdom delivered majestically in all ways. A pure delight from beginning to end! HIS GRAYNESS. Vance
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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Absolutely precious gift of arcane wisdom delivered majestically in all ways. A pure delight from beginning to end! HIS GRAYNESS. Vance
Comment Written 16-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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Very many thanks for this stellar review, Vance. I always appreciate your affirmation of my work. Best wishes, Tony
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Tony...you always amaze me with the depth of your mind, experience, life, and imagination! My thanks are always yours. Blessings dear friend! Vance
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes my friend you have done well in the creation of this shakepearean sonnet it reads well with good rhyming reading smoothly good luck in the contest regards Jill
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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Yes my friend you have done well in the creation of this shakepearean sonnet it reads well with good rhyming reading smoothly good luck in the contest regards Jill
Comment Written 16-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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Thanks, Jill. Kind words as always and very much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from estory
An interesting theme for a sonnet, you have a tenser meter here, a darker tone, and darker images. There is a mysterious air about the whole thing, and in the end, you have grown old and memory escapes you of happier times. estory
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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An interesting theme for a sonnet, you have a tenser meter here, a darker tone, and darker images. There is a mysterious air about the whole thing, and in the end, you have grown old and memory escapes you of happier times. estory
Comment Written 16-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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Thanks, estory. I enjoyed reading your comments and assessment. All the best, Tony
