Look deeper, see me.
A child's inner struggle with Autism.31 total reviews
Comment from oliver818
Great story, it's so well told. I really felt like I was in the kids head with him. Autism is a very difficult disease to live with for everyone involved. Thanks for bringing this up here.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2017
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Great story, it's so well told. I really felt like I was in the kids head with him. Autism is a very difficult disease to live with for everyone involved. Thanks for bringing this up here.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2017
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Thank you for your review. PM
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi;
Congratulations on your win with this story. You did a wonderful job of portraying this disease from the child's point of view. I can only imagine how hard it is to work with an autistic child. The mothers of these special children need our prayers and praise.
~patty~
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2017
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Hi;
Congratulations on your win with this story. You did a wonderful job of portraying this disease from the child's point of view. I can only imagine how hard it is to work with an autistic child. The mothers of these special children need our prayers and praise.
~patty~
Comment Written 18-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2017
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Thank you so much. Yes it must be very hard work and would be heartbreaking. PM
Comment from lyenochka
Beautifully and compassionately done! I'm sure it is so very exhausting not only physically but emotionally to daily deal with the needs of an autistic child. How much more difficult with two! I like how your prose brings out the suffering of the child's spirit which cannot express his understanding, his suffering and his desires.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2017
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Beautifully and compassionately done! I'm sure it is so very exhausting not only physically but emotionally to daily deal with the needs of an autistic child. How much more difficult with two! I like how your prose brings out the suffering of the child's spirit which cannot express his understanding, his suffering and his desires.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2017
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Thank you for your feedback yes I think it must be exhausting with even one, let alone two children with Autism. PM
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Autism is not an easy ailment to cope with, not for the victim or those around them.
Well crafted story depicts the emotions of the little boy and his observations of how others perceive him, especially his mommy.
Should make an interesting entry into this contest.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2017
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Autism is not an easy ailment to cope with, not for the victim or those around them.
Well crafted story depicts the emotions of the little boy and his observations of how others perceive him, especially his mommy.
Should make an interesting entry into this contest.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2017
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Thank you for your feedback. It came equal first in the contest. PM
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Thank you for your feedback. It came equal first in the contest. PM
Comment from JDRBAR
This is a topic dear to my heart and should be to many more hearts. I would have given it six stars but it sounded too much like an adult speaking and not a child.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2017
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This is a topic dear to my heart and should be to many more hearts. I would have given it six stars but it sounded too much like an adult speaking and not a child.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2017
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Thank you for your feedback. PM
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Thank you for your feedback. PM
Comment from rjuselius
this is such a sorrowful piece of prose, it leaves a great impact on the reader dear possummagic! i love how you display the boy's emotional status, you dig deeper than many i know.
thank you fro sharing!
congratualtions on the well deserved win!
blessings and a big squeeze!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2017
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this is such a sorrowful piece of prose, it leaves a great impact on the reader dear possummagic! i love how you display the boy's emotional status, you dig deeper than many i know.
thank you fro sharing!
congratualtions on the well deserved win!
blessings and a big squeeze!
rebekka x
Comment Written 17-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2017
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Thank you for the review, and the "6". The boys are 13&15 and it's the younger child who has the most severe form of Autism. They live in the U.K. And they are my cousins boys. It's a long way but we manage to visit them every few years. It's very sad and the family is divided. I have a lot to be thankful for. Bless x
Comment from Janilou
I work with individuals with this issue and others. It is very difficult to understand them at times, and vice versa I am certain. So your short piece really hit home with me.
Notes:
I know that my shouting hurts your head(,) Mommy.
Add comma
Look into my eyes, Mommy, I know it is difficult because my eyes look everywhere but at you. But what do you see? A word, a diagnosis, or a little boy trapped inside, alone and afraid?
Suggest ending the sentence after Mommy.
Look into my eyes, Mommy. I know it is difficult because my eyes look everywhere but at you. But what do you see? A word, a diagnosis, or a little boy trapped inside, alone and afraid?
Very well done. Good luck in the writing prompt contest.
Jan
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2017
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I work with individuals with this issue and others. It is very difficult to understand them at times, and vice versa I am certain. So your short piece really hit home with me.
Notes:
I know that my shouting hurts your head(,) Mommy.
Add comma
Look into my eyes, Mommy, I know it is difficult because my eyes look everywhere but at you. But what do you see? A word, a diagnosis, or a little boy trapped inside, alone and afraid?
Suggest ending the sentence after Mommy.
Look into my eyes, Mommy. I know it is difficult because my eyes look everywhere but at you. But what do you see? A word, a diagnosis, or a little boy trapped inside, alone and afraid?
Very well done. Good luck in the writing prompt contest.
Jan
Comment Written 15-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2017
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Thank you so much for your review, I came equal first. PM
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Congratulations!! :-)
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Thank you. PM
Comment from Marvin Calloway
Ohh, what a well told, educational and enlightening story.
It would be wonderful, in so many ways to be around for that joyous occasion when the individual emerges from their unique world.
I feel your story possesses incite as well.
I'm not sure what, 'You send me to "program" Mommy, . . .' means.
Marv
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2017
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Ohh, what a well told, educational and enlightening story.
It would be wonderful, in so many ways to be around for that joyous occasion when the individual emerges from their unique world.
I feel your story possesses incite as well.
I'm not sure what, 'You send me to "program" Mommy, . . .' means.
Marv
Comment Written 15-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2017
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Thank you for your wonderful feedback and for the 6. I am delighted.
Programs are set up for parents at various centres to give parents and children respite. Parents refer to them as " program" or "the centre" .
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Thanks for the explanation. Good luck with everything.
Marv
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You're welcome. PM
Comment from butterfly4265
This is an excellent composition, and really hits home, with the child's perspective of the daily struggles and loneliness of autism. A couple of my friends have children with autism and we only get a tiny glimpse of what their lives are really like. Where they would both agree with you is that their lives are both exhausting, and just rewarding enough to make their struggles worthwhile. Very well done, and much enjoyed!
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2017
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This is an excellent composition, and really hits home, with the child's perspective of the daily struggles and loneliness of autism. A couple of my friends have children with autism and we only get a tiny glimpse of what their lives are really like. Where they would both agree with you is that their lives are both exhausting, and just rewarding enough to make their struggles worthwhile. Very well done, and much enjoyed!
Comment Written 15-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2017
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Thank you for your feedback it's greatly appreciated. PM
Comment from Bucketlist
Wonderful idea! I'm hoping to get a web page built. It will be for all views of mental health issues. I would include FS writing too on the subject. I am determined to do this, but it will take me time.
Great perspective, well written prose of yours. Well done
Hugs Trisha
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2017
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Wonderful idea! I'm hoping to get a web page built. It will be for all views of mental health issues. I would include FS writing too on the subject. I am determined to do this, but it will take me time.
Great perspective, well written prose of yours. Well done
Hugs Trisha
Comment Written 15-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2017
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Are you being sarcastic or do you really mean what you say? I'm not really sure how to take some comments. Autism is not a mental illness. It is not a neurological disorder per se either. Rather Autism is a developmental delay affecting the ability to be able to communicate with other people on any level, depending where on the " spectrum" they lie. It can commence in healthy children at age 2-3 or can be evident earlier. It can improve to a large degree or it can be a lifelong affliction. There is so much more to Autism than that simple explanation but no, it's definitely not a mental illness.
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No, I'm not trying to be sarcastic. I'm sorry if my wording upset you. You are correct it is neurological, and I was too hasty in my explanation I primarily am looking to give a view from their (mental health) point of view. Some higher functioning autistic people could write how it feels emotionally to have the syndrome - that's the mental health perspective. I mean.
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Ok, sorry I thought you were being sarcastic. I posted something about mental health a few weeks ago and people thought I was suicidal or something! I was just telling a story and I have good intuition with people with disabilities in general having worked in disability field for 25 years after finishing nursing. Autism is not a neurological disorder either. It's a developmental delay which causes a breach in the ability to communicate in varying degrees. You are correct though that many high functioning people with Autism or Aspergers have mental health issues as they deal with the impact this has on their lives. Good luck with your web site. PM
