tanka (robin's nest)
tanka contest20 total reviews
Comment from pome lover
very nice, but are you calling the baby bird (chick) a child, or do you mean a human child? If you mean baby bird, I think I'd say chick. just a suggestion.
the pictures goes well with your poem.
good luck in the contest.
pome lover
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2017
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very nice, but are you calling the baby bird (chick) a child, or do you mean a human child? If you mean baby bird, I think I'd say chick. just a suggestion.
the pictures goes well with your poem.
good luck in the contest.
pome lover
Comment Written 19-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2017
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There is a double meaning in this tanka. They aren't as simple as they appear to be. Thank you for the lovely review.
Comment from l.raven
HI Val, this can be with birds and humans...both send their young on their way...it's heartbreaking I think for both...sigh...very well thought of...and very nicely written sweet girl...love your poem...and your picture so sad...love you girl...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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HI Val, this can be with birds and humans...both send their young on their way...it's heartbreaking I think for both...sigh...very well thought of...and very nicely written sweet girl...love your poem...and your picture so sad...love you girl...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 15-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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Love you too, Linda thank you for the wonderful review.
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you are so welcome...xxoo love
Comment from Irish Rain
Oh, what a touching little tanka!! I love it. And the picture you chose just couldn't be better!! This is a wonderful entry!! Blessings...
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2017
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Oh, what a touching little tanka!! I love it. And the picture you chose just couldn't be better!! This is a wonderful entry!! Blessings...
Comment Written 11-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2017
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Thank you, for the lovely review
Comment from tfawcus
A clever little poem built around the concept of the 'empty-nester'. At least robins have the good sense to kick the little perishers out as soon as they are ready to fly!
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2017
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A clever little poem built around the concept of the 'empty-nester'. At least robins have the good sense to kick the little perishers out as soon as they are ready to fly!
Comment Written 11-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2017
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True, thank you for the fun review. It made me smile
Comment from Curly Girly
This clever little verse makes the reader pause to think for a moment.
Is this about a bird? Or is it really about a mother who is suffering from 'empty nest syndrome.' Maybe, it is about both.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2017
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This clever little verse makes the reader pause to think for a moment.
Is this about a bird? Or is it really about a mother who is suffering from 'empty nest syndrome.' Maybe, it is about both.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2017
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It is both. LOL Thank you for the lovely review.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written Tanka poem about the Robins nest you have penned. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2017
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This is a very well written Tanka poem about the Robins nest you have penned. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 10-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2017
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Thank you
Comment from marybell1
You chose a perfect picture for your poem. Did you read the rules for the format for a tanka? You may wish to review your poem before the due date.
All the best.
Marybell1.
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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2017
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You chose a perfect picture for your poem. Did you read the rules for the format for a tanka? You may wish to review your poem before the due date.
All the best.
Marybell1.
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Comment Written 10-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2017
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marybell1, I have been writing tanka forever, and maybe YOU should look at the rules. They do not have to be 5/7/5/7/7/ tanka does not have to be restricted to a syllable count. None the less, LOL at your review.
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Val.
A very nicely presented contest entry, my friend. The picture looks so lonely and sums up the Tanka perfectly.
I wish you all the best of luck in the contest. You have to be in with a big show, I'd say.
Great job.
Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2017
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G'day Val.
A very nicely presented contest entry, my friend. The picture looks so lonely and sums up the Tanka perfectly.
I wish you all the best of luck in the contest. You have to be in with a big show, I'd say.
Great job.
Cheers Fez
Comment Written 10-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2017
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Thank you
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks about an isolated nest of robins as there is no voice of baby birds, the robin couples must have left the nest in want of babies there; I liked.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2017
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This speaks about an isolated nest of robins as there is no voice of baby birds, the robin couples must have left the nest in want of babies there; I liked.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2017
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Thank you
Comment from DonandVicki
This was a big "ah ha" moment for me. the empty nest syndrome. I like the way that you so deftly put this into so few words. The photograph complements your work.
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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2017
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This was a big "ah ha" moment for me. the empty nest syndrome. I like the way that you so deftly put this into so few words. The photograph complements your work.
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Comment Written 10-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2017
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I am so thrilled you "got" it many have not. Thank you so much.
