Hotel Plaza
6 year old Jodie's story.14 total reviews
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Well now Jenin, this is damn fine writing and a wonderful entry into this contest. Of course we know the sadness that lurks behind the story too, but in the end, life dishes out some horrible circumstances sometimes doesn't it. Good luck. I suspect this is a winning entry. xoxo deborah
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2017
Well now Jenin, this is damn fine writing and a wonderful entry into this contest. Of course we know the sadness that lurks behind the story too, but in the end, life dishes out some horrible circumstances sometimes doesn't it. Good luck. I suspect this is a winning entry. xoxo deborah
Comment Written 17-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2017
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Thank you so much. It came second.
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Thank you so much. It came second.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
This is a very good piece. You nailed the tone and perspective right off the bat. the story which unfolds is tragic and engaging.
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
Hi there,
This is a very good piece. You nailed the tone and perspective right off the bat. the story which unfolds is tragic and engaging.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 16-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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Thanks for reading and for your comments.
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
This almost made me cry. So sad, so tragic. I found the picture made it even sadder. This is brilliant emotive writing, well done, I really hope you do well in the competition, you deserve to. kindest regards Meia xx
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
This almost made me cry. So sad, so tragic. I found the picture made it even sadder. This is brilliant emotive writing, well done, I really hope you do well in the competition, you deserve to. kindest regards Meia xx
Comment Written 16-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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Thank you so much for your great review. I came second.
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well done!xx
Comment from robyn corum
Oh, wow. I certainly wasn't expecting THIS. I came over to give you a reciprocal review, so I know who you are. And now I also know to be watching out for you and your remarkable talents. How have I missed you before? This was great - and tragic. Good luck! (Though you probably won't need it.)
[When the contest is over, contact me. I know a website where you can submit this for a quarterly contest.]
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
Oh, wow. I certainly wasn't expecting THIS. I came over to give you a reciprocal review, so I know who you are. And now I also know to be watching out for you and your remarkable talents. How have I missed you before? This was great - and tragic. Good luck! (Though you probably won't need it.)
[When the contest is over, contact me. I know a website where you can submit this for a quarterly contest.]
Comment Written 13-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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I am a newbie to this site. I really appreciate your wonderful comments. I will certainly contact you,Robyn. Thanks
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I am a newbie to this site. I really appreciate your wonderful comments. I will certainly contact you,Robyn. Thanks
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Hi Robyn,
Please could you send details of the contest that you mentioned.
Cheers Jen..
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here you go~! Good luck!
http://www.wow-womenonwriting.com/contest.php
Comment from alf collier
Wow, this is so very sad, and yet children live this life...or close to it!! Loved the ending...disconnected thoughts of a six year-old!!! Great write, and I certainly enjoyed the read!!
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
Wow, this is so very sad, and yet children live this life...or close to it!! Loved the ending...disconnected thoughts of a six year-old!!! Great write, and I certainly enjoyed the read!!
Comment Written 13-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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Thank you so much
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Thank you so much
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written flash fiction. The innocence of children is priceless. All they care about is the money for movies and popcorn. She had no idea what really goes on.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2017
A very well-written flash fiction. The innocence of children is priceless. All they care about is the money for movies and popcorn. She had no idea what really goes on.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2017
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Thank you, my friend for your comments.
Comment from EverInParadise
Very well done. The child in the drawing you selected wears a confused innocence which I felt. It rendered me quite sad, once I read the story line. You did this so well, and carried the childlike voice to perfection. I wish you good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2017
Very well done. The child in the drawing you selected wears a confused innocence which I felt. It rendered me quite sad, once I read the story line. You did this so well, and carried the childlike voice to perfection. I wish you good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2017
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Thanks for your comments
Comment from Drew Delaney
In so few words you have a really sad and heartbreaking story. It's sad to imagine how many kids actually live like that. I think this is gonna e a winner! Best wishes.
Drew
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2017
In so few words you have a really sad and heartbreaking story. It's sad to imagine how many kids actually live like that. I think this is gonna e a winner! Best wishes.
Drew
Comment Written 10-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2017
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Thanks for your c moments.
Comment from Thesis
Good entry. Sad content. It's a shame that children have to be brought up like this. I know it's a reality for some, but it is a damn shame that these children don't get to have a normal childhood.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2017
Good entry. Sad content. It's a shame that children have to be brought up like this. I know it's a reality for some, but it is a damn shame that these children don't get to have a normal childhood.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2017
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Tnank
Comment from Curly Girly
You've managed to create a good writing prompt here about a terrible misdeed. Sadly, the words could be real. So many young children are born to mothers who live like this and who don't really want their children. What chance do these poor wee mites have in life?
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2017
You've managed to create a good writing prompt here about a terrible misdeed. Sadly, the words could be real. So many young children are born to mothers who live like this and who don't really want their children. What chance do these poor wee mites have in life?
Comment Written 10-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2017
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Thank you