Yesterday
Words of a very sad man.5 total reviews
Comment from Writeling
This is mostly so rhythmical, but I wonder whether it would better fit its pattern by taking out 'all' - so that it reads: 'Maybe that was long ago'
I really like the image which 'speaks' for the poem.
With best wishes, Writeling
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2017
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This is mostly so rhythmical, but I wonder whether it would better fit its pattern by taking out 'all' - so that it reads: 'Maybe that was long ago'
I really like the image which 'speaks' for the poem.
With best wishes, Writeling
Comment Written 08-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2017
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You are so right. Shame on me. Thanks so much. Jen.
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You are so right. Shame on me. Thanks so much. Jen.
Comment from frogbook
Wow, I just thought I would come over for a visit and this one is fabulous. I love it. So emotional and hit the nail on the head about a person's feelings.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2017
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Wow, I just thought I would come over for a visit and this one is fabulous. I love it. So emotional and hit the nail on the head about a person's feelings.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2017
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Thank you so much for your comments and super 6.
Comment from zanya
An effective and powerful message conveyed here in this poem that starts and ends with the same word - a sense of misadventure and helplessness evoked
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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An effective and powerful message conveyed here in this poem that starts and ends with the same word - a sense of misadventure and helplessness evoked
Comment Written 03-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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Thanks for your comments
Comment from susan18
Sad story--
Sounds like it could be written by a homeless man.
Gats right to the point. Everything we hold dear could be gone in an instant. The words are not overdone and "weepy", just the right tone to convey the message.
Very well done!
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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Sad story--
Sounds like it could be written by a homeless man.
Gats right to the point. Everything we hold dear could be gone in an instant. The words are not overdone and "weepy", just the right tone to convey the message.
Very well done!
Comment Written 03-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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Keep for your comments.
Comment from dboverton
(Sadly laughing) This was awful, but a beautiful awful if that makes sense? Definitely deeply beyond concrete logical thinking. As in, is not beyond our comprehension how we are able to hold onto memories as if they are right now? Then they literally surround us in our environment as if it is reality. But sometimes reality can be false. THANK YOU for this!
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2017
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(Sadly laughing) This was awful, but a beautiful awful if that makes sense? Definitely deeply beyond concrete logical thinking. As in, is not beyond our comprehension how we are able to hold onto memories as if they are right now? Then they literally surround us in our environment as if it is reality. But sometimes reality can be false. THANK YOU for this!
Comment Written 03-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2017
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Thanks for your weird comments.
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Thanks for your weird comments.
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Thanks for your weird comments.
