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Haiku Club Challenges, Book II

Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "haiku (buzzing insects)"
an anthology of haiku written by fanstory poets

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Comment from BeasPeas
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Hi Teresa. This is a well written haiku, I think. In a few words you've managed to convey the danger of getting too close. The danger of getting to close is good to remember. The warning can apply to anything. Marilyn

 Comment Written 03-Sep-2017


reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
    Thanks Marilyn:)
Comment from RGstar
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Imagery strong here, even without an image. The scene figures gently in the mind without aid. Few words but well projected.
My best wishes.
Have a great day.
RGstar

 Comment Written 03-Sep-2017


reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
    Thank you RG:)
Comment from honeytree
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So much has been
said in a few words written here
the insects should be very careful though.
I guess their won't be many insects around.


Honey tree

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2017


reply by the author on 02-Sep-2017
    Thank you Annie:)
Comment from Ulla
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Hi Teresa, I enjoyed this haiku about insects. You have painted a vivid picture of a spider web and what is going on. What you say is exactly what insects do. I loved it. A great addition to the book. All the best. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2017


reply by the author on 02-Sep-2017
    Thanks Ulla:)
Comment from country ranch writer
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Many bugs find themselves caught up in catching insects that they forget themselves and become intertwined in a spiders web,just waiting for intruders to arrive.

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017
    Thank you so much:)
reply by country ranch writer on 31-Aug-2017
    Smiles
Comment from Lulube
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Great imagery, you can envision these bees, joyfully, (or are they?) buzzing around, not paying attention to their surroundings, until too late. They are captured, not much fun any more. Good little story.

lulube

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017
    Thank you lulube:)
reply by Lulube on 31-Aug-2017
    welcome

    lulube
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
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Oh yes my friend I liked this a very good fun haiku with a splendid satori line this haiku made me smile well created and original regards Jill

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017
    Thanks for the awesome six stars!!
Comment from Walu Feral
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Hahahaha! G'day Teresa.

I love it, mate and wish I had a six left to give you, but I'm sorry I don't.

Every night here, about 6 PM we get these flippin' giant biting flying ants come around whatever light is on. They seem to love me more than others lol. Delia says it's because I've got "sweet white meat for them to chew on" lol.

Great job.

Cheers Fez

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017
    Mosquitos love me. Always biting me even when no one else notices them around. Thanks for the great review:)
Comment from Sasha
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I've been off site a few days giving my eyes a rest. I enjoyed this haiku very much. As with a true haiku, no picture is needed. You painted a perfect picture with your well chosen words. Very nice work with this one.

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017
    Thank you Sasha:)
Comment from DR DIP
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hehe this haiku is a fun one as I have seen this happen many times with insects It sort of reminds me of the spider scene in Lord of the rings.
I am not a big fan of Haiku but I like this one. thanks for sharing

dip

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017
    Thank you dip:)