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Haiku Club Challenges, Book II

Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "haiku (the ghost of Mamie Thurmond)"
an anthology of haiku written by fanstory poets

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Comment from Joan E.
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Thank you for sharing your description of Mamie's ghost in this short form and reinforcing it with the ethereal artwork. I appreciated your notes about the flapper, since I was not familiar with her. Sighs- Joan

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2017

Comment from Pearl Edwards
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Great story in your author's notes, some of these true stories are much more than the fiction ones we all come up with. Love the artwork and this eerie haiku. Well done Dean,
cheers,
valda

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
    Thank you very much for reading the third and final installment of our collaborative renga, Valda.
    I appreciate your comments and I'm glad you enjoyed the effort each author put into this.
    Take care, and have a lovely weekend,
    ~Dean
Comment from frogbook
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A very interesting story, and doesn't sound like the right man was charged. Also a lesson in the perils of out of wedlock play! Poem was a great short description of what transpired and the satori told the end well.

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 30-Aug-2017
    Thanks for reading and catching JoAnn. You're also right in your assumption that the right man wasn't charged with the crime.
    He was white, wealthy and held positions of prestige in the area.
    He couldn't have possibly ... could he?
    You're damn right he was guilty.
    Hugs,
    ~Dean
Comment from Asem.inspirations
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Thank you Dean for this interesting information. What an overkill, pure hate in that murder. It's a shame though that it seems that they have the wrong person for this murder. Good poem

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2017

Comment from Father Flaps
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Hi Deano
This is another terrific story in haiku form. I really enjoyed it. Hey, she flirted with death when she flirted with the banker. Perhaps it was the banker's wife who killed Mamie. Perhaps it was her poor deputy husband. Then again, it might have been any one of her sexual partners. I wonder... did they find the black handyman/chauffeur guilty? And if so, did he go to prison, or did her get the death penalty? Readers want to know the rest of the story. Most interesting!
I like "lush loam". Isn't it peculiar how ghosts roam? What a way to spend eternity.
Did you ever see the movie, "The Ghost and Mr. Chicken", starring Don Knotts? It's one of my favorites. Here's a link:
https://youtu.be/KaPlzStIbs0
cheers
Kimbob

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2017

Comment from robina1978
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Lovely artwork that complements your tiny poem perfectly. Thanks for the foot note, so I know what it is about. Death penalty was still going. A well written Haiku within the syllable limits. Nobody really knows who murdered this woman.

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2017

Comment from Lulube
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Your notes on Mamie, brings a lot of light to your haiku. I wonder who really murdered her. whats up with her deputy hubby? they say, the significant other is a usual suspect when their partner is murdered and as the detective shows say, it was a personal murder with much vengeance.

good story

lulube I can see how her ghost is still wandering the streets, looking for her murderer.

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2017

Comment from barbara.wilkey
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I vote the handyman was innocent. Now wither it was the banker or her husband, that I'm not sure. I need more evidence. I enjoyed reading your poem and your author's notes.

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2017

Comment from Grasshopper2
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Mr. Dean-o-san,
As you know, almost all murders, with the possible exception of serial killers, are committed by someone close to the victim because of money, sex, or both. Yours is a good succinct haiku and your notes are damning. I enjoyed reading this.

Michael

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2017

Comment from MizKat
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Hi Dean,

This little poem that you have written was interesting to read.
I always look forward to reading your work as you write them well.
So keep on writing your poetry and I'll continue to read them.

Kat

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2017