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Mein Vegebund part3 Black Label

A story from my hitching days

8 total reviews 
Comment from Ricky1024
Good
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I found this well written but not my "Cuppa of Tea."
Now for my "Seven Point" review...
Theme and Imagery-***
Flow and Grammar-*****
Adjective Content-****
Objective Content-***
Descriptive Measures-*****
Pronouncable Ability-***
Complete Synopsis-****
Four Stars for this.
Thanks,
Dr. Ricky 1024.

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 18-Sep-2017
    Thanks for your comments.
    We are on different ends of the spectrum.
    Gene
Comment from Mustang Patty
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Hi Gene;
this is a very powerful story. You meshed the lessons you learned from the Franciscans with the elements of the piece and led me into a path of self examination. There are a lot of life lessons represented here.

A nit: ' In the end(+,) I just felt guilty for leading her on."'

Thank you for sharing this, and I look forward to more,

~patty~

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2017

Comment from B.B. Rose
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Well, you finally upped the ante to read your memoir. You Should have done that from the beginning. Anyhow, I saw you had another installment so I skipped ahead to read it. I'll probably go there for my take on your work, and am just writing here because I need the play money to boost my own middling stuff. I'm almost out of six stars so I'll give you five here and six there.

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017
    So the beginning lacked tension?
reply by B.B. Rose on 21-Aug-2017
    My bad. I meant money to review it. It was pretty long and thoughtful for 2 cents.
Comment from apky
Exceptional
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When I read this:

Our cluttered lives, our preoccupations with "belonging", can interfere in our relationships with God and our brothers and sisters. We are called to a life of simplicity, to eliminate those aspects of ourselves and our lives which prevent our full expression of God's love.

I stopped to ponder the words. "Belonging" seems to be a permanent longing that is never fulfilled. Belong to parents, to friends, to peers to the "in" clique in school, to the super rich and the "poweful"...

Hell, even Trump has people who want to belong to his "turf.

You get my last 6er of the week, Gene. I hardly ever read anything here that makes me ponder the vagaries of life.

Have a great weekend.

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 19-Aug-2017
    thanks
    Some sixes are better than others. Yours is humbling.
    Gene
Comment from Cass Carlton
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One Spag. The term for a priest who has been removed from the priesthood is "defrocked" The discussion about the Franciscan order's philosophy is most informative and profound. The idea of two men drawn from different spheres of life travelling together and discussing such an unusual subject is intriguing. The conversation is interesting , holding plenty of information about the characters and their motivations. It has a sense of intimacy, almost as if the reader overhears them talking. Well written cheers Cass

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 18-Aug-2017
    Thanks for "defrocked" I couldn't remember the term, and tried to skip over it--nice catch.
    I appreciate your comments on the conversation. I've been experimenting with blending dialogue and narrative.
    I'm glad that it worked for you.
    Thanks for your help.
    Gene
Comment from Brett Matthew West
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Seems "Bob" has quite a lot to learn in life.

The phrase "Don't confuse God and god, Bob" says a lot don't you think?

Especially about where most people put their false sense of security in then wonder why life happens to them the way it does.

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 18-Aug-2017
    I don't know man, he also had a lot of knowledge. Like most of us, he was just finding his way. ( I assume that you haven't read the first two parts of this post.) But I'm with you on the falls security. It also absolves people of responsibilities.
    Thanks for reading and commenting.
    Gene
Comment from royowen
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What a great question, "what does one have to do to prove their love?" Give their life? Get beaten up by a bikie? I must have had these conversations on these subjects, life, love, and the universe. I never really had an opportunity to talk with a priest, but the conversation wouldn't have been terribly different, I've known a lot since! Well done, good perception of human relations, and expressed in writing Well, done, blessings, Roy
Typo : I never expected her to fall in (I) love.

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 18-Aug-2017
    thanks
    for the comments, catching the typo, and the encouragement.
    I always value your input.
    Gene
reply by royowen on 18-Aug-2017
    Most welcome
Comment from robyn corum
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Gene,

Obviously, this was a very extensive and thorough self-examination you were doing during these wandering days. I can't imagine what it was like not knowing for sure where you were going to wake up!! Very scary but really cool!

Some notes:
1.) joined the gathering as (a) couple of Neanderthals from a biker gang showed

2.) I never expected her to fall (in) love.

Thanks, my friend!



 Comment Written 18-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 18-Aug-2017
    Thanks for the tips.
    I caught another repitious part, correcting what you pointed out.
    I was too naive' to think about where I'd wake up. At the time, I was just collecting data. The examining is going on now.
    Thanks for reading this stuff and taking time to comment.
    This meeting people without meeting them is kinda' wierd.
    You're welcome, friend.
    Gene