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Stage Four Cancer

No return

5 total reviews 
Comment from moongirlwriter
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Cancer is definitely ugly and it takes everyone's life it touches and turns it inside out, ravishes it to the bone and leaves loved ones with only one option, faith in God and prayer. Cancer doesn't care about who's life it destroys, rich or poor, prince or peasant and no matter how much money we send to researchers. . . . .they seem to only make a little headway, at best. Alternative medicine has made advances as well, but most people rely on Western medicine so little is accomplished. We still must rely on faith in God and prayer. Thank goodness, prayer works. My heart hurts for your battle and will be praying for your miracle.

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 18-Aug-2017
    Thank you for your support
reply by moongirlwriter on 19-Aug-2017
    thank you for the broader explanation, I did so enjoy reading it.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2017
    Smiles.
reply by moongirlwriter on 20-Aug-2017
    :)
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
    Smiles
Comment from misstory9197
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You chose a poignant and very serious subject to write on - and one that is obviously very personal to you. I think your piece speaks to many of us that have cared for and/or lost loved ones to cancer, and the experiences of being in a waiting room with others that have their own illnesses to deal with.

I would like to hear more about your "leap of faith" - I think a good strength to your piece involves your description of having the "dark times" to make you more fully appreciate the good "amazing" things in life. That is such a key lesson for most of us - and I would like to know more about that journey.

I have a few other suggestions - you may consider making your second paragraph your first paragraph instead. It gets the reader's attention to show the importance of the relationship you are describing - which comes through very clearly later, but would be perhaps better earlier on.

The word "overcome" in the first paragraph is used several times. Maybe look for a similar synonym? There are several places where the sentences are run-on; one example is (there are at least two sentences here): "We met 52 years ago on his birthday our paths crossed that first day we were like oil and water and we were as different as night and day."

Consider using spell/grammar check which will also help with the places where there needs to be a space between commas and the following words.

Best wishes to you.

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 18-Aug-2017
    You can find our story on my past writings
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written poem. Sometimes hardship is a blessing in disguise. It makes us aware of how much we need the mercy of God in our lives and draw us closer to Him.

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 18-Aug-2017
    Thank you for your support
Comment from nbonner
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All miracles are possible through God, I truly believe that. He provides us with miracles everyday. Thank you for sharing and best wishes on the contest

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017
    Thank you for your support
Comment from Teri7
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This is a very well written contest entry about silver lining. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery with your words. I could feel your hurt and hope in your words. Just know that when we die our souls go to be with the Lord. You are in my prayers my friend. Best wishes in the contest. Teri

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017
    Thank you all for your kind support and prayers