Perennials of War
Viewing comments for Chapter 40 "Chapter Zwolf part vier"Is Anderson a gallant knight? Can he recover Shan
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Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Barbara.
I know what you mean about not having enough hours in a day and I apologise to you as well for not reviewing enough.
"I am." He took a drink of milk. "Did you milk the cow too?"
"Silly, milk comes from the store." (Hahahaha! Beautifully placed.)
Darn it... I'm out of sixes again.
What fantastic dialogue you always produce. Always very entertaining and hunger causing. I want some cookies now lol.
Great job, mate.
Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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G'day Barbara.
I know what you mean about not having enough hours in a day and I apologise to you as well for not reviewing enough.
"I am." He took a drink of milk. "Did you milk the cow too?"
"Silly, milk comes from the store." (Hahahaha! Beautifully placed.)
Darn it... I'm out of sixes again.
What fantastic dialogue you always produce. Always very entertaining and hunger causing. I want some cookies now lol.
Great job, mate.
Cheers Fez
Comment Written 16-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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I wanted cookies too. That's probably how it got written in here. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from BOO ghost
BOO's favorite paragraph: "Think a better question is what are you doing?" Anderson moved closer and read the banner. "Welcome to Pirate's Cove. Enter at your own Risk." Well done,mate. BOO-fabulous!
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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BOO's favorite paragraph: "Think a better question is what are you doing?" Anderson moved closer and read the banner. "Welcome to Pirate's Cove. Enter at your own Risk." Well done,mate. BOO-fabulous!
Comment Written 16-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from EverInParadise
This is really good and I hope I can read back chapters so I can follow the story. The only negative I have is the child "pouted". You said it twice. Since you are such a very good writer I'm sure you can come up with a better way to demonstrate Emily's emotion. Thank for a good story.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017
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This is really good and I hope I can read back chapters so I can follow the story. The only negative I have is the child "pouted". You said it twice. Since you are such a very good writer I'm sure you can come up with a better way to demonstrate Emily's emotion. Thank for a good story.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017
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I will recheck that area. Thank you for bringing it up.
Comment from Ben Colder
Enjoyed this. I can see the child enjoying the moment with the Dad. Chocolate Chip cookies. Wow. Excellent with milk. Moo, Emily. Good one Barb.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017
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Enjoyed this. I can see the child enjoying the moment with the Dad. Chocolate Chip cookies. Wow. Excellent with milk. Moo, Emily. Good one Barb.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017
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Thank you for the kind review. I have a question for you. An editor thinks I need to change the name of Savannah Love to Secrets of my Confederate Solder. What do you think?
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I would not but it is your work. I have not published because of the ssame thing. Ask them why and have them to prove why. If you given in then they wrote it and not you. Just a thought.
Comment from Wendy Winter
It is really cute. I can just see Emily and her excitement and receiving all this adult attention, and chocolate chip cookies to boot. Its nice to read something innocent and pleasant. You have my interest and I look forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017
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It is really cute. I can just see Emily and her excitement and receiving all this adult attention, and chocolate chip cookies to boot. Its nice to read something innocent and pleasant. You have my interest and I look forward to reading more.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from bookishfabler
Wow, I missed a lot. I will have to go back and catch up. I had lost a lot when I stopped coming on for a while. things have been very crazy right now with work and even personally. I'm working on catching up. This was fun chapter. I see they are getting closer.
hugs Heidi
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017
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Wow, I missed a lot. I will have to go back and catch up. I had lost a lot when I stopped coming on for a while. things have been very crazy right now with work and even personally. I'm working on catching up. This was fun chapter. I see they are getting closer.
hugs Heidi
Comment Written 15-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017
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I hope your life calms down. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I still think you could have run this one together with the previous one making for a more substantial read. Just an opinion. Here you can see the affection between Emily & Anderson and the relation ship with the estranged wife.
nice stuff
G
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017
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Hi there,
I still think you could have run this one together with the previous one making for a more substantial read. Just an opinion. Here you can see the affection between Emily & Anderson and the relation ship with the estranged wife.
nice stuff
G
Comment Written 15-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017
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You're correct they do slip together perfectly, but short reviews won in vote. I only had two people. You and one other. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sis Cat
Favorite line because my family is from Texas: "We need to get this child back to Texas." Anderson helped himself to another cookie. "She needs to spend some time on the ranch and learn where milk comes from."
Kidding aside, I found Emily's treasure hunting game echoes the adults treasure hunting for that stolen painting. This use of treasure hunting as a metaphor is alluded to in these words: "Emily, can you finish your treasure hunt without your first mate? I need Shana's help making a phone call."
After relationship building and using metaphor in your last several chapters, your novel returns focus on the painting.
Thank you for sharing your compelling mystery well told.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017
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Favorite line because my family is from Texas: "We need to get this child back to Texas." Anderson helped himself to another cookie. "She needs to spend some time on the ranch and learn where milk comes from."
Kidding aside, I found Emily's treasure hunting game echoes the adults treasure hunting for that stolen painting. This use of treasure hunting as a metaphor is alluded to in these words: "Emily, can you finish your treasure hunt without your first mate? I need Shana's help making a phone call."
After relationship building and using metaphor in your last several chapters, your novel returns focus on the painting.
Thank you for sharing your compelling mystery well told.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017
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I am back to working on the painting and Anderson's custody battle. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from rheabug
So happy to read this post. This story line is nice to read. The characters seem real and likable. I can't wait for the next post. I would love to have some chocolate chip cookies with this group of people. LOL! Hugs.....
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2017
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So happy to read this post. This story line is nice to read. The characters seem real and likable. I can't wait for the next post. I would love to have some chocolate chip cookies with this group of people. LOL! Hugs.....
Comment Written 14-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Hello my friend this is well written you know you use the phrase slow poke over here we say slow coach I wondered if that would sound better this is well written love to see all the fun in the chapter before moving to the seriousness of the phone call I enjoyed well done regards Jill
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2017
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Hello my friend this is well written you know you use the phrase slow poke over here we say slow coach I wondered if that would sound better this is well written love to see all the fun in the chapter before moving to the seriousness of the phone call I enjoyed well done regards Jill
Comment Written 14-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2017
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Thank you for the kind review. I will check that area.
