Boiler Room
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Section 1 - Part 1: Boiler Room"Cody's worst nightmare from Hell becomes reality!
6 total reviews
Comment from Mabaker
Very well thought out and the start of an exciting starting chapter. I visualise a man approaching middle age with no love interest of his one and his hair thinning he believes to be one of the reasons. Good start.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
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Very well thought out and the start of an exciting starting chapter. I visualise a man approaching middle age with no love interest of his one and his hair thinning he believes to be one of the reasons. Good start.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my book. Appreciate you taking the time to read it and write a review.
Comment from Sankey
Good work mate. Lovely seeing Cody stories back again. Hope I have not missed any. You did direct me to the Boiler room series from memory. Thanks again. Trying to get a final chapter of my biography finished.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2017
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Good work mate. Lovely seeing Cody stories back again. Hope I have not missed any. You did direct me to the Boiler room series from memory. Thanks again. Trying to get a final chapter of my biography finished.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2017
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Know how much you enjoy Cody.
Much more to come so I invite you to ride along.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Awfully short chapter. Could be twice as long and still very readable. So, Justin is a janitor or building maintenance guy? He's shown doing his job and nothing more, so far. :)
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2017
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Awfully short chapter. Could be twice as long and still very readable. So, Justin is a janitor or building maintenance guy? He's shown doing his job and nothing more, so far. :)
Comment Written 08-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this piece.
Appreciate you taking the time to read it and to write a review.
Much more to come so I invite you to ride along.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Brett,
You might want to remove your opening statement from this piece directing people to your other work. This is a means of identifying you as the author of this piece which would disqualify you from your own competition...
Just a heads up. Nice piece though.
G
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2017
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Hi Brett,
You might want to remove your opening statement from this piece directing people to your other work. This is a means of identifying you as the author of this piece which would disqualify you from your own competition...
Just a heads up. Nice piece though.
G
Comment Written 08-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2017
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Gireff,
Thanks for the heads up.
Unfortunately, because Cody is so popular on this site, just writing a new book about him may get me disqualified from my own contest.
Much more to come so I invite you to ride along.
Comment from apky
I didn't find anything by way of spags or typos. But being a gal, I had my problems with the things described:
Tow hitches were the primary items produced by Astatula's largest employer. Many of the denizens of the small town gravitated toward laboring at the plant. Twenty-four hours a day, seven days a week, components were processed. Other items fabricated by Castillo Metalworks included tow balls, tow pins, tow hooks, the tow pintles that many of the employees used for their farming equipment, and tow hitches.
I had to keep on looking up meanings - which made the reading a bit of a "task". Just me, not you and your work.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2017
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I didn't find anything by way of spags or typos. But being a gal, I had my problems with the things described:
Tow hitches were the primary items produced by Astatula's largest employer. Many of the denizens of the small town gravitated toward laboring at the plant. Twenty-four hours a day, seven days a week, components were processed. Other items fabricated by Castillo Metalworks included tow balls, tow pins, tow hooks, the tow pintles that many of the employees used for their farming equipment, and tow hitches.
I had to keep on looking up meanings - which made the reading a bit of a "task". Just me, not you and your work.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter.
Your comments and support appreciate.
Much more to come so I invite you to ride along.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
A strong introductory chapter and insight into one of the central characters.
The opening seems quite normal and run of the mill.
Cody has had quite an eventful life so far so let,s see what this book brings for him.
Formatting and dialogue are appropriate.
:-) Shirley
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2017
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A strong introductory chapter and insight into one of the central characters.
The opening seems quite normal and run of the mill.
Cody has had quite an eventful life so far so let,s see what this book brings for him.
Formatting and dialogue are appropriate.
:-) Shirley
Comment Written 07-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter.
"quite normal and run of the mill". Good, that is the atmosphere I wanted to create with this portion of Chapter One.
Appreciate you taking the time to read it and to write a review.
Much more to come so I invite you to ride along.
