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Perennials of War

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Is Anderson a gallant knight? Can he recover Shan

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Comment from rheabug
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This story line is looking good. I enjoy each posting and I am sure everyone likes it just as well. I see no need for any corrections. The picture you chose goes really good with the story. Have a great weekend. Hug....

 Comment Written 11-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 12-Aug-2017
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from country ranch writer
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Sounds like we are to begging on the exciting adventure to discover treasure being a pirate. Wow lots of fun and cookies for treats who could ask for anything more

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 12-Aug-2017
    Thank you for the kind review.
reply by country ranch writer on 13-Aug-2017
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Comment from smbau
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Like the list of character roles, helps to reconnect with the story again. The picture reflects and compliments the story. Thank you again for authors notes, am looking forward to the next part of this story. You have awesome dialogue writing skills.

 Comment Written 09-Aug-2017


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    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Analie Shepherd
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Very well done! It is hard to make dialogue natural and to make it flow ... you have done both. It is very good writing. Looking forward to reading more.

I would not worry about "politically incorrect" issues. You will never market to everybody and there are plenty of folks out there who don't give a darn about being politically correct ... which is refreshing!

Blessings, Analie

 Comment Written 08-Aug-2017


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    Thank you for the kind review and advice/
Comment from Sasha
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This is another fun chapter. I understand the need to document the continuing relationship between Shana and Emily. I don't see how this can be viewed as politically incorrect. Please explain this to me. I find that a bit absurd.

 Comment Written 08-Aug-2017


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Comment from rtobaygo
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Good morning, Barbara

Excellent flow. I loved the innocent dialogue an interactions between Emily and Jane (brought back memories of doing this with my daughters). Enjoyed.

Take care and stay safe,

Ray

 Comment Written 08-Aug-2017


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    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from nbonner
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What I read was good and made me smile especially the part of the "make believe" play of pirates. Reminds me of me and my kids when we used to play "make believe". I can't wait to read more. Thanks for sharing

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2017


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Comment from Phyllis Stewart
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What fun for a child to play this adventure game. I used to do similar things with my child when she was little. Always a lot of laughs. :)

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2017


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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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Too politically incorrect!!! It a piece of fiction, for goodness sake! Some people have no idea, do they? I enjoyed this part, I think Shana and Emily are getting along very well, and I can guess why you are leading us in that direction. You have put in some dainty clues along the way, Barbara, very cleverly and in an enjoyable way. Very well done, my friend. I've actually learned quite a lot from you. :) Sandra xxx

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2017


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Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
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Hello my friend I enjoyed this chapter Emily and Shana building a bond of friendship it reads very well and love the way they played there pirate game well done regards Jill

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
    Thank you for the kind review.