Nature's Beauty
Wildflowers provide beauty.21 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
This is lovely, aryr. I did get the meaning of the use of "within," although splitting the word between the first and second line is a bit awkward. I suggest a way to fix this as the reader focuses on that word instead of absorbing the poem as a whole. Many times when a reader gives a suggestion to me, I give my writing a good look because he/she is evaluating it with clearer eyes than mine. However, that aside, the image and your poem work well together for a harmonious nature poem. Marilyn
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017
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This is lovely, aryr. I did get the meaning of the use of "within," although splitting the word between the first and second line is a bit awkward. I suggest a way to fix this as the reader focuses on that word instead of absorbing the poem as a whole. Many times when a reader gives a suggestion to me, I give my writing a good look because he/she is evaluating it with clearer eyes than mine. However, that aside, the image and your poem work well together for a harmonious nature poem. Marilyn
Comment Written 18-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017
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Awwww thank you Marilyn, I really appreciate your comments. I like you seriously take each review to heart and in 99.9% I make the changes. Unfortunately a couple pointed out the awkwardness but didn't have a suggestion to correct it without losing the count, so I flew with it. It was fun so I just went with it. Not the best but it was somewhat workable. But thank you so much.
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Hi aryr. The very day I reviewed your poem, two reviewers gave me helpful suggestions for my own work and voila! those suggestions worked better, so I changed my piece to reflect them. Sometimes others see in our work what we miss.
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That is so true, so very true.
Comment from Janet Foor
Color cascades with-
In the beauty of nature.
Wild flowers delight.
Sweet - I loved the picture and presentation.
Sweet flower delight. Very nice.
blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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Color cascades with-
In the beauty of nature.
Wild flowers delight.
Sweet - I loved the picture and presentation.
Sweet flower delight. Very nice.
blessings
Janet
Comment Written 14-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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Thank you so very much.
Comment from Asem.inspirations
Hell fellow Poet: Wow what a magnificent photo. it is just like you said, "Color cascades with."
The beauty of this picture, I am trying to imagine myself in the midst of all that splendor and rich, deep color, creation is so marvelous and the gentle deer there in the midst makes it all the more breath taking. Good and great piece...
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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Hell fellow Poet: Wow what a magnificent photo. it is just like you said, "Color cascades with."
The beauty of this picture, I am trying to imagine myself in the midst of all that splendor and rich, deep color, creation is so marvelous and the gentle deer there in the midst makes it all the more breath taking. Good and great piece...
Comment Written 14-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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Thank you so very much.
Comment from kathleenspalding
Very nice, peaceful five seven five poem. Clever, the way you split within to make the syllables work. Beautiful choice of artwork. Excellent use of color, nice visual effect. Good job!
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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Very nice, peaceful five seven five poem. Clever, the way you split within to make the syllables work. Beautiful choice of artwork. Excellent use of color, nice visual effect. Good job!
Comment Written 14-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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Thank you so very much.
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You're welcome
Comment from marybell1
I enjoyed reading your 5-7-5 poem "Nature's Beauty" You kept to the rules with your lines and syllables but as I do not have a copy of the contest rules I thought the contest meant one flower. You may wish to review this.
All the best
Marybell1.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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I enjoyed reading your 5-7-5 poem "Nature's Beauty" You kept to the rules with your lines and syllables but as I do not have a copy of the contest rules I thought the contest meant one flower. You may wish to review this.
All the best
Marybell1.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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Thank you, I am not sure but will check.
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You are most welcome.
Marybell1.
Comment from KL Williams
I think this is an absolutely beautiful picture and color scheme. I also feel your words have nice imagery. The only thing I might suggest is not breaking up the word "within". Maybe change the first line to "The color cascades"? Just a suggestion, other than that I thought it was lovely. Thank you for sharing, and good luck in the contest! :)
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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I think this is an absolutely beautiful picture and color scheme. I also feel your words have nice imagery. The only thing I might suggest is not breaking up the word "within". Maybe change the first line to "The color cascades"? Just a suggestion, other than that I thought it was lovely. Thank you for sharing, and good luck in the contest! :)
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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Thank you so very much and especially for the good luck wishes.
Comment from lyenochka
Such a beautiful picture full of "cascading colors!" The deer never pose that well for me when I try to photograph them. I like the use of the word "delight" because it has two meanings: as a noun described by "wild flowers" or as a verb as the wild flowers are actively delighting!
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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Such a beautiful picture full of "cascading colors!" The deer never pose that well for me when I try to photograph them. I like the use of the word "delight" because it has two meanings: as a noun described by "wild flowers" or as a verb as the wild flowers are actively delighting!
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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Thank you so very much.
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Poet,
What a fun image you've created - even without the picture, I could see this one. *smile* Nice. I wish you the best of luck in the contest voting. But you should do well! Thanks!
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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Dear Mystery Poet,
What a fun image you've created - even without the picture, I could see this one. *smile* Nice. I wish you the best of luck in the contest voting. But you should do well! Thanks!
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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Thank you so very much, especially for the good luck wishes.
Comment from lalajovanoski
Hello my dear friend, I very much enjoyed reading this beautifully written short poem. I like the content. The structure and flow is very soft and smooth flowing. Go to literation. Thank you very much for sharing this. With love, Lala
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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Hello my dear friend, I very much enjoyed reading this beautifully written short poem. I like the content. The structure and flow is very soft and smooth flowing. Go to literation. Thank you very much for sharing this. With love, Lala
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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Thank you so very much.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, my friend,
Co/lor cas/cades with- (you ended with a conjunction that doesn't connect with the next line)
In the beau/ty of na/ture.
Wild flo/wers de/light. ...........................good syllable count
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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Hello, my friend,
Co/lor cas/cades with- (you ended with a conjunction that doesn't connect with the next line)
In the beau/ty of na/ture.
Wild flo/wers de/light. ...........................good syllable count
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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Thank you so very much, I used the hyphen after 'with' in order to join it with 'in' on the next line = 'with-in' Sorry it didn't make sense.
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Okay, I never seen that done in 5/7/5 poem. I advice against it.
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Opps I did not know that, as you can see I am not by any means a poet :(, sorry.
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It's cool, no worries. :)
