Wild Trinity
5/7/5 contest15 total reviews
Comment from jaded831
Great poem, easy to read, great theme, beautiful picture. I where a trinity cross, so naturally I associated it with the trinity, I don't know if that's what you meant. Great form and definitely a contender. Good luck.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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Great poem, easy to read, great theme, beautiful picture. I where a trinity cross, so naturally I associated it with the trinity, I don't know if that's what you meant. Great form and definitely a contender. Good luck.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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I was after the Holy Trinity - Father, Son, and Holy Ghost. But then again i am lapsed Catholic. Thank you for the insightful review.
Comment from kathleenspalding
I love trilliums. :-) I'm used to seeing maroon ones. Very nice five seven five poem in the classic haiku form flows well and creates a strong mental picture. Excellent use of artwork and colors. Great job!
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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I love trilliums. :-) I'm used to seeing maroon ones. Very nice five seven five poem in the classic haiku form flows well and creates a strong mental picture. Excellent use of artwork and colors. Great job!
Comment Written 14-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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Thank you, I love wild Trillium also and have seen the maroon ones. I appreciate your comments.
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You're welcome
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, Wild Trinity, has the proper setup and represents well those who would find Christian symbolism in all aspects of nature. White, trinity, and a promise of a new beginning are seen in its petals. Nice.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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This 5-7-5, Wild Trinity, has the proper setup and represents well those who would find Christian symbolism in all aspects of nature. White, trinity, and a promise of a new beginning are seen in its petals. Nice.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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thank you
Comment from lyenochka
Those are so lovely! I always enjoyed seeing them in the wild when hiking but could never get them to grow in my garden. Yes, the three-petaled flower could be symbolic of the Trinity.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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Those are so lovely! I always enjoyed seeing them in the wild when hiking but could never get them to grow in my garden. Yes, the three-petaled flower could be symbolic of the Trinity.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the lovely review.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, my friend,
Good flower choice... it's unique and beautiful. The satori relates to catholic religion and the three petals of the flower... very clever. The presentation is simple but nice...I like it.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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Hello, my friend,
Good flower choice... it's unique and beautiful. The satori relates to catholic religion and the three petals of the flower... very clever. The presentation is simple but nice...I like it.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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I am glad you like it, but the satori line applies to many religions not just Catholic. None the less, I appreciate the review.
Comment from sharonlshelley
a lovely 575 poem about a flower, i have never heard of that before but it is very pretty
good luck for the competition and thanks for sharing your work
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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a lovely 575 poem about a flower, i have never heard of that before but it is very pretty
good luck for the competition and thanks for sharing your work
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the lovely review
Comment from Dean Kuch
This is a very well thought out, well composed 5-7-5 for the Flower Contest, Anonymous Poet.
Unlike haiku, 5-7-5 poetry is not required to include a kigo, and may use capitalization for any words necessary.
The Holy Trinity; i.e., The Father, Son, and Holy Ghost, signifies purity as displayed in the whiteness of the three petals of the flower itself.
Nice work.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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This is a very well thought out, well composed 5-7-5 for the Flower Contest, Anonymous Poet.
Unlike haiku, 5-7-5 poetry is not required to include a kigo, and may use capitalization for any words necessary.
The Holy Trinity; i.e., The Father, Son, and Holy Ghost, signifies purity as displayed in the whiteness of the three petals of the flower itself.
Nice work.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the very encouraging review, Dean. It always means a great deal coming from you.
Comment from rama devi
Charming! Sweet! Inspired. Love the imagery, tone and tenor, phonetics (especially consonance of L in the first line and of T in all three lines and alliteration of W as well. Bravo.
Clever satori in simile style. I like your verb choice of BURSTS...so vivacious!
Lovely presentation too.
Fine 5-7-5 style. Good luck in the contest.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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Charming! Sweet! Inspired. Love the imagery, tone and tenor, phonetics (especially consonance of L in the first line and of T in all three lines and alliteration of W as well. Bravo.
Clever satori in simile style. I like your verb choice of BURSTS...so vivacious!
Lovely presentation too.
Fine 5-7-5 style. Good luck in the contest.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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I always love your reviews, rama devi. They are so well thought out and concise, and I'm pleased you liked it. Hugs
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Aw, thanks! So glad this helped and thanks for your lovely reply. Love and hugs!
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Poet,
It's funny, but trillium are rarely mentioned in poems, at least as far as I have seen. They are a lovely flower, and actually they create the name of my own local Haiku Group! Therefore, I do like the subject matter of your poem. Taking it a step further with your comparison to the Trinity makes me like it even more! *smile* Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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Dear Mystery Poet,
It's funny, but trillium are rarely mentioned in poems, at least as far as I have seen. They are a lovely flower, and actually they create the name of my own local Haiku Group! Therefore, I do like the subject matter of your poem. Taking it a step further with your comparison to the Trinity makes me like it even more! *smile* Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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Thank you, for this wonderful review, Robin. And since I respect your opinion, it means a great deal to me you liked enough to "smile" Hugs
Comment from marybell1
I enjoyed reading your 5-7-5 flower poem "Holy Trinity". You followed all the rules for this genre and you also chose a beautiful photo.
All the best.
Marybell1.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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I enjoyed reading your 5-7-5 flower poem "Holy Trinity". You followed all the rules for this genre and you also chose a beautiful photo.
All the best.
Marybell1.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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Thank you
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You are most welcome.
marybell1.
