Little Poems
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Comment from Joan E.
Another complicated form and a clever photograph--I'm glad you caught your wife's pose. I enjoyed your rhymes and rhythm, and I don't object to the "lost loves" but I wouldn't characterize Karen as "old"! Smiles- Joan
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2017
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Another complicated form and a clever photograph--I'm glad you caught your wife's pose. I enjoyed your rhymes and rhythm, and I don't object to the "lost loves" but I wouldn't characterize Karen as "old"! Smiles- Joan
Comment Written 29-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2017
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Thank you Joan. She laughed, so I am good, I think.
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That's a relief! LOL- Joan
Comment from Pantygynt
Well, you couldn't really have stopped at the end of line fourteen, it just wouldn't have worked rhythmically. I have just finished a first draft of my crown of heroic sonnets. I wasn't going to bother this year and then an idea entered my head so I gave it a go. Deadlin is 7th July so when I have finished tweaking its tail.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2017
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Well, you couldn't really have stopped at the end of line fourteen, it just wouldn't have worked rhythmically. I have just finished a first draft of my crown of heroic sonnets. I wasn't going to bother this year and then an idea entered my head so I gave it a go. Deadlin is 7th July so when I have finished tweaking its tail.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2017
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Thank you Pantygynt. I look forward to reading it.
Comment from Irish Rain
Well, I just love all of it!!! We could use some of that wetness here! I especially loved the ending, dreaming of lost loves....very pretty!! Blessings...
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
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Well, I just love all of it!!! We could use some of that wetness here! I especially loved the ending, dreaming of lost loves....very pretty!! Blessings...
Comment Written 28-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
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Thank you Irish Rain. I am please you liked it, especially the ending.
Comment from His Grayness
This is truly unique and lovely in all ways! The photography really pulls the reader into the work immediately and the liltingly delightful poetry delivery is magnificent. Wish I had the sixth star this really deserves! HIS GRAYNESS;
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
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This is truly unique and lovely in all ways! The photography really pulls the reader into the work immediately and the liltingly delightful poetry delivery is magnificent. Wish I had the sixth star this really deserves! HIS GRAYNESS;
Comment Written 28-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
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Thank you Vance . I am pleased that you liked it. That's enough.
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You are welcomed indeed! My pleasure! Vance
Comment from patcelaw
You have done well with this format and it was a pleasure to read. Your notes are helpful to the reader and appreciated greatly by this reader. Blessings Patricia
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
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You have done well with this format and it was a pleasure to read. Your notes are helpful to the reader and appreciated greatly by this reader. Blessings Patricia
Comment Written 28-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
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Thank you Patricia.
Comment from humpwhistle
I'm pretty much a sore thumb when it comes to poetry.
Same with music. Same with mathematics. To me, these are related fields, and somehow elusive to me. Words, I understand. But when you mix them up with meter (math), I'm out of my element.
Anyway, limericks I understand! I'm familiar with that musical lilt.
I can even emulate it on occasion.
You rhymes are strong. Your rhythm works.
Butterflies/size is unexpected, but delightful.
Your sonnet ending throws me off a bit, but I have no inclination nor desire to object.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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I'm pretty much a sore thumb when it comes to poetry.
Same with music. Same with mathematics. To me, these are related fields, and somehow elusive to me. Words, I understand. But when you mix them up with meter (math), I'm out of my element.
Anyway, limericks I understand! I'm familiar with that musical lilt.
I can even emulate it on occasion.
You rhymes are strong. Your rhythm works.
Butterflies/size is unexpected, but delightful.
Your sonnet ending throws me off a bit, but I have no inclination nor desire to object.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 27-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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Thank you Lee, I appreciate your perspective.
Comment from Mustang Patty
thank you so much for sharing this lovely poem about the outcome of a rainy spring. It is wonderful to reflect on the way the seasons run into one another and how they effect the next.
Well done,
~patty~
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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thank you so much for sharing this lovely poem about the outcome of a rainy spring. It is wonderful to reflect on the way the seasons run into one another and how they effect the next.
Well done,
~patty~
Comment Written 27-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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Thank you Mustangpatty. It is truely lovely.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Limerick sonnet. Rain us good for nature and the plants grow well and blooms are just beautiful and in abundance. When the rain stops we can go outside and enjoy the beauty. Good photo to complement your sonnet.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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A very well-written Limerick sonnet. Rain us good for nature and the plants grow well and blooms are just beautiful and in abundance. When the rain stops we can go outside and enjoy the beauty. Good photo to complement your sonnet.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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Thank you Sandra. Certainly as true there as it is here.
Comment from Nottoway
Marvelous.
I marvel at and respect the skill with which you use to craft your work, The blending of the poetry styles is wonderful and as I stated before, your explanations do wonders to enlighten your fellow Fanstory writers.
This poem held my attention fully from beginning and I really enjoyed. My take on it in relation to the rest of poem is that it gives a possible reminiscence of what was or may have been: the rains that brought the flowers, creatures and scientists.
And for the old lady: Yes, I could imagine a beau having brought her flowers long ago and their walks along the path after a rain.
What an excellent and thought provoking ending.
Leroy
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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Marvelous.
I marvel at and respect the skill with which you use to craft your work, The blending of the poetry styles is wonderful and as I stated before, your explanations do wonders to enlighten your fellow Fanstory writers.
This poem held my attention fully from beginning and I really enjoyed. My take on it in relation to the rest of poem is that it gives a possible reminiscence of what was or may have been: the rains that brought the flowers, creatures and scientists.
And for the old lady: Yes, I could imagine a beau having brought her flowers long ago and their walks along the path after a rain.
What an excellent and thought provoking ending.
Leroy
Comment Written 27-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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Thgank you very much Nottoway, for your perceptive and detailed review
Comment from sunnilicious
The first stanza was very lovely. I'd add a comma after months on the first line. I'm not sure what to this of the ending. It's bittersweet, however, that seem to be a common personality for some. Nice work. Great notes.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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The first stanza was very lovely. I'd add a comma after months on the first line. I'm not sure what to this of the ending. It's bittersweet, however, that seem to be a common personality for some. Nice work. Great notes.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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Thank you very much Alicia. I'll look at your suggestion too.
