Haiku/Haiga
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Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, Michael,
I don't know how I missed this one. I know that kind of horror. He loves me he loves me not.... it's dreadful. And you look for that elusive ...he loves me..that you go through all the daisies you can find until you are out of them. Well composed and beautiful haiga.
Hello, Michael,
I don't know how I missed this one. I know that kind of horror. He loves me he loves me not.... it's dreadful. And you look for that elusive ...he loves me..that you go through all the daisies you can find until you are out of them. Well composed and beautiful haiga.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
Comment from Ulla
Hi Mike, this is a great haiku albeit so very sad. I can see and understand the horror when you wake up one day and realise it's all gone. There will be no more love to share. All the best. Ulla:))
Hi Mike, this is a great haiku albeit so very sad. I can see and understand the horror when you wake up one day and realise it's all gone. There will be no more love to share. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 26-Jun-2017
Comment from HarryT
Nice. It is tough when you have to admit the loss. Great image to go with the haiku. However, this does not fit the usual haiku format of 5-7-5. I count a 5-4-4 syllable arrangement. Don't know if that is acceptable.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
Nice. It is tough when you have to admit the loss. Great image to go with the haiku. However, this does not fit the usual haiku format of 5-7-5. I count a 5-4-4 syllable arrangement. Don't know if that is acceptable.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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Yes, 5-4-4 is perfectly acceptable and generally preferable to the 5-7-5 which in general is for beginners just learning the form and ore of a guideline to get one started. There's quite a variety when it comes to haiku including one line, two line and the fewer syllables the better is a good rule of thumb. There's a haiku club here and classes available. Not everyone's cup of tea, I realize. But they can be interesting the more you learn. Glad you enjoyed mine. Thanks for the kind words. mike
Comment from Zinnia48
Mikey, this is an interesting submission for a horror poem. But then I thought running out of the possibilities for love can be truly frightening. Thanks for the clever haiga! Caroline
Mikey, this is an interesting submission for a horror poem. But then I thought running out of the possibilities for love can be truly frightening. Thanks for the clever haiga! Caroline
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017