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Comment from sandramitchell
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Hello, my dear friend. I wish I had a six left for you, this is a brilliant poem. But it relates to how I'm feeling at the moment. The picture of Private Ryan ageing is happening to me!! I swear I was a young 25 the last time I looked, and now it seems the years flew by whilst I was asleep! I have to tell you, I'm not in the least worried about it anymore. I miss so many of my loved ones, I'll be happy when I can join them. How are you, Michael, we haven't chatted for a long time, I've missed that too. Lovely poem. Love you still! xxx Sandy. xx

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2017


reply by the author on 24-Jun-2017
    Hi Sandy...-smile-...
    so do I, had another unsatisfied customer....health inspectors going to wet himself....weirdo.
    the service industry isnt what it used to be my friend...lot a down sizing going on, How have you been...? -smile-......
    Ive gone mad by six six thirty most days...started drinking to mum that mirrored man....whoever he is. but anyway....I remember when I was a kid and spent the night at my granda ma's ...in the middle of the night a herd of buffalo wandered into her room...where I was...and started making so much noise it scared the ba gee bee right out my we we....and I started to scream like my sister only wished she could...siren sounds I mean. and my grandmother bolted back up straight serious as the sprung safety trigger on an itchy fingers winchester. begging whats wrong !....... without her make up and hair all mussed up...and after almost being trampled to death by her snoring....I just passed out. slept like a baby...-smile-
    hope youre okay. love Michael
Comment from Bloviator
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After reading the poem a couple of times I was able to visualize what you were describing. You have a misspelled word, maybe two, but otherwise I liked it.

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2017


reply by the author on 23-Jun-2017
    nope...no way...
    I have no mispelled words...only cared for metaphores.
    I adopted that which you reject....and love them to life.
    there's a difference between you and I Bloviator. Michael
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written poem. The day f independence was cold and twenty years later time chances but we still remember that day o many years ago as if it was just yesterday

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2017

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
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This speaks the eternal state of life cycle and Law of Nature as well systems of God's Creation; changes are inevitable; we get our physique changed every moment, we remain the same; well said; I liked.

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2017

Comment from l.raven
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HI Michael, I heard the song...and then I watched the picture....of a young man...aging into an older man...and you use the cold weather and the hot weather...like young and old...

I do love the fourth of July though...special day...
going to bed...tomorrow...sleep tight...love you...Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2017


reply by the author on 24-Jun-2017
    well hello there....-smile-
    ah ive tweaked it some by now...so....yea I hate the fourth anymore just a lot a loud noise and longing. aha....-smile-...well Ive been talking to myself a lot lately and were convinced the nose and ear are the ever growing human appendage ...its troubling. anyhow its my pleasure. love Michael
reply by l.raven on 24-Jun-2017
    not troubling...yours are cute...the more to love...it's my pleasure as well...love you always...Linda xxoo
Comment from Joan E.
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Welcome back again, Michael. When I first saw the pictures, they reminded me of a young man and then his older self--comparable to the July and December of life. I don't know if that's what you had in mind, but I admired your signature circularity in this poem as well. Smiles- Joan

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2017


reply by the author on 23-Jun-2017
    Hey J...-smile-
    yes thats exactly right.
    its the pondering's of a half mad poet on the priceless worth of ageing and the progression common to all. well the admiration is recipricol Joan...I'm in love you. Michael
reply by Joan E. on 23-Jun-2017
    I am pleased I was on the right wavelength. Sweet dreams- Joan
Comment from Zinnia48
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Good evening, Michael. I'm not sure that I understand what you are saying, but I absolutely love the way you are saying it! Each time I read it , I understand more. This is good--the way it has captured me and keeps pulling me in. Thanks! Caroline

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2017


reply by the author on 23-Jun-2017
    hm...well let me help...-smile-
    I've been ah up tight...and as every recovering addict... I thought to release through poetic expression...and so I found the Boss in a solemn moment slightly aged up close since the last time I'd seen him...and I just to walk with him....we ended up looking at pictures where Bruce spotted Private Ryan getting old....so I...I tagged along dammit. I should have known better last time we did this he took me in woods where we smoked weed with Willie Nelson...I got lost for weeks so...yea...no more. love Michael
Comment from lalajovanoski
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Hello friend I really enjoyed reading this poem that is beautifully written and the structure and the alliteration is nicely done the flow is very smooth thank you very much for sharing this

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2017


reply by the author on 23-Jun-2017
    Hello...-smile-
    well thanks...I'm happy you enjoyed. apparently your under twenty...good for you show off....-smile-...love Michael
Comment from Ricky1024
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Hey, long time no see?
This was a little not like you?
But the ice crystals lent to validity.
Still nice theme and imagery with the actor.
Thanks,
Ricky...



 Comment Written 22-Jun-2017