This Time - That Time 2
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Up at the Manor House"Veronica is sent back again
43 total reviews
Comment from Joy Graham
You paint such an incredible story, and you keep it all in order. I think I'd get things messed up. How strange it seems to be in a house where you know the owners in the future. I think I'd like to time travel lol!
Joy xx
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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You paint such an incredible story, and you keep it all in order. I think I'd get things messed up. How strange it seems to be in a house where you know the owners in the future. I think I'd like to time travel lol!
Joy xx
Comment Written 05-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Sometimes I think up things I'd like to do if I could go back in time. First, I'd nip into the bank and put a few pounds into an account and when I come back to my own time, I should have a lot of money to withdraw! lol. Thank you, Joy, for another lovely review. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from wordsfromsue
Hmm, you always leave us guessing! Now I have to wait to see what's in the 3rd attic, and what Joe saw.
The story is moving along nicely, paced so as to keep my interest up.
Great job Sandra.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2017
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Hmm, you always leave us guessing! Now I have to wait to see what's in the 3rd attic, and what Joe saw.
The story is moving along nicely, paced so as to keep my interest up.
Great job Sandra.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2017
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I'm so pleased, Sue. Knowing you to be an avid reader and a critique as well, really makes a difference. Big hugs my friend. xxxx
Comment from WriterKathy
Very interesting story. Because this is the only part of it that I have read, I was a little confused at first. But I can tell that you are a gifted writer, and I would love to read more!
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2017
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Very interesting story. Because this is the only part of it that I have read, I was a little confused at first. But I can tell that you are a gifted writer, and I would love to read more!
Comment Written 23-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2017
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Thank you so much, Kathy, for reading this part. Yes, I can imagine you are confused!! LOL, it's a very complex story with the reader going back and forth in time. This is only part five, and there is a long way to go yet. I'm glad this part has you intrigued enough to want you to read more. Thank you! :) Sandra xx
Comment from c_lucas
I think you have a winner in your paranormal series. As usual, this is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. Keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2017
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I think you have a winner in your paranormal series. As usual, this is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. Keep up the good work.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2017
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That is such a lovely compliment coming from you, Charles!! Thank you so very much. The 6 stars are the icing on the cake, you have really given me such wonderful encouragement with your review. Thank you!! Big hugs, Sandra xx
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You're more than welcome, Sandra. Chrlie
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Another good chapter that gives Ver.
and the reader a lot to think about, Sandra.
-The dialogue is excellent.
-Daveth is a little confused and wants to
know why Ver. is asking him so many
questions, but the more information she has,
the better.
-Would she have the use of her computer
even though she is in this time or is this
for when she might go back for a while?
-The angry man at the door takes us back
to thoughts of Sir John from previous stories;
good use of transition.
-Then Ver. reminisces about her experiences
at the same mansion, and you give us
twists at the end with the woman in the chair
and the third attic--what will be in there?!
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2017
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-Another good chapter that gives Ver.
and the reader a lot to think about, Sandra.
-The dialogue is excellent.
-Daveth is a little confused and wants to
know why Ver. is asking him so many
questions, but the more information she has,
the better.
-Would she have the use of her computer
even though she is in this time or is this
for when she might go back for a while?
-The angry man at the door takes us back
to thoughts of Sir John from previous stories;
good use of transition.
-Then Ver. reminisces about her experiences
at the same mansion, and you give us
twists at the end with the woman in the chair
and the third attic--what will be in there?!
Comment Written 22-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2017
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My dear friend, thank you! This is another great review! Veronica will go back and forth, but I'm not sure if the computer will help her much, but there are other ways she can do her research. :) There is so much going on that it's going to take Veronica a lot of work to sort it all out. Thank you so much for the 6 stars, Pam, I really appreciate everything. Big hugs, my dear friend. :) Sandra xx
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You are very welcome and deserving of the stars and review, Sandra. I guess Ver. will have to research the old fashioned way with whatever they had in 1846. Poor Ver. always has a lot of work. Maybe that 3rd attic will be a big clue for getting in touch with Mildred and James:)
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Ah, the surprise in the attic is nothing to do with getting back to her own time! :) The next part will be the end of the first chapter. Then the Powers that Be, will be back to tell us more. Did I tell you I'm off on holiday for two weeks from this weekend? We are going to Italy with my son and his family. He's going today, and we will be going on Monday. My birthday present from him. It's my big 70th next month, awful!! But, I don't feel it, and both my sons said I don't act it. LOL, I don't know what they mean!! More hugs, my friend. xxx
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It was fun guessing, anyway! I guess the big surprise is your special trip coming up. How wonderful. Have a great time, and make sure no unsavory characters get into that computer🙂
Comment from rspoet
I like your revision to chapter four; my sentiments exactly. LOL
You sure have a supply of unusual names.
You must walk around old cemeteries writing them down.
The questioning of Daveth is spot on.
Of course, he wouldn't know the year his father was born,
but he would know how old he is. Good detective work!
Excellent description of the man at the door;
Sounds like someone out of a Dickens story.
An excellent flash back to the previous book;
Hopefully, new readers will be able to follow it.
And now, the mystery of the boy and the ghostly pale woman
and, of course, the last room and its surprise.
You certainly packed a lot into this chapter.
Well done!
Love the photo of the manor house.
RS
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2017
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I like your revision to chapter four; my sentiments exactly. LOL
You sure have a supply of unusual names.
You must walk around old cemeteries writing them down.
The questioning of Daveth is spot on.
Of course, he wouldn't know the year his father was born,
but he would know how old he is. Good detective work!
Excellent description of the man at the door;
Sounds like someone out of a Dickens story.
An excellent flash back to the previous book;
Hopefully, new readers will be able to follow it.
And now, the mystery of the boy and the ghostly pale woman
and, of course, the last room and its surprise.
You certainly packed a lot into this chapter.
Well done!
Love the photo of the manor house.
RS
Comment Written 22-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2017
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LOL, I'm glad you liked it! The names came from looking up common names in Cornwall in the 1800s and there are some lovely unusual ones. Thank goodness for the internet! I didn't realise Google didn't really start until 4th September 1998, so the info on the internet wasn't that good in 1991 the year Veronica lives in. Thank you, Robert, for the lovely 6 stars, and for the wonderful review. You are so very kind, always, and such a good friend. Big hugs. Sandra xxx
Comment from dweigt
Wonderful! If there is anything wrong, I certainly didn't see it.
A few random thoughts as I was reading:
when a loud knock on the front door nearly made me jump out of my skin. -- I had to smile here. In her current state, does she have skin? Don't change it, it is just my odd sense of humor.
When I followed the man down the path -- Did they close the door after the man? Did she slip out before that? Or can she pass through doors and walls? Just wondering.
Pulling myself together, I passed through the closed door -- Ah, answered that question! Never mind! ;-)
Oooh! What is in the attic?
Keep writing!
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2017
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Wonderful! If there is anything wrong, I certainly didn't see it.
A few random thoughts as I was reading:
when a loud knock on the front door nearly made me jump out of my skin. -- I had to smile here. In her current state, does she have skin? Don't change it, it is just my odd sense of humor.
When I followed the man down the path -- Did they close the door after the man? Did she slip out before that? Or can she pass through doors and walls? Just wondering.
Pulling myself together, I passed through the closed door -- Ah, answered that question! Never mind! ;-)
Oooh! What is in the attic?
Keep writing!
Comment Written 22-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2017
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LOL! No, she doesn't have a skin to jump out of, thank goodness that is only a metaphor in any state we're in!! Yes, Veronica can pass through doors, and can pick up and touch things, once she remembers how to do it. Lady Ann, in the previous book, taught her how to do it, having learned herself over the years as a ghost. Such fun! The attic? I haven't the faintest idea, Veronica hasn't told me yet!! LOL. Thank you so much for your really lovely, fun review, my friend, and for the shiny 6 stars! You are wonderful! :) Sandra xxx
Comment from Charmisa Parker
Love the story! I hate cliffhangers lol. Just by reading this makes me want to become a story writer. Keep up the good work. I'm eager to read the next part.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2017
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Love the story! I hate cliffhangers lol. Just by reading this makes me want to become a story writer. Keep up the good work. I'm eager to read the next part.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2017
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Thank you so much, Charmisa, for your lovely review. I'm delighted you enjoyed it, and I'm so happy you hate cliffhangers!!! LOL. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from crich
I know I am at a disadvantage as I believe, this is the first of your writing I read. It is intriguing and time travel stories are all the rage!
I have one question and one suggestion: Why can the young boy see her and no one else? I found it distracting every time the narrator compared the future to the time she was in: "The room was similar to the future Sir John's, but didn't have any of the modern technology that the twentieth-century would bring, like a phone--that was a few years down the line." That is unnecessary as it is assumed technology is different - and you already mentioned technology previously. "...I hesitated for a moment as more memories came flooding back. Get a grip, Veronica, it's 1846, and Lady Ann hasn't even been born yet! " I am assuming you have written about that room in previous chapters, again making this observation a distraction.
What I love about time travel stories - is that when you are in a specific time - you are there - show us what is there -then, we know what it's like now. I hope you take these suggestions with the love they are offered!
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2017
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I know I am at a disadvantage as I believe, this is the first of your writing I read. It is intriguing and time travel stories are all the rage!
I have one question and one suggestion: Why can the young boy see her and no one else? I found it distracting every time the narrator compared the future to the time she was in: "The room was similar to the future Sir John's, but didn't have any of the modern technology that the twentieth-century would bring, like a phone--that was a few years down the line." That is unnecessary as it is assumed technology is different - and you already mentioned technology previously. "...I hesitated for a moment as more memories came flooding back. Get a grip, Veronica, it's 1846, and Lady Ann hasn't even been born yet! " I am assuming you have written about that room in previous chapters, again making this observation a distraction.
What I love about time travel stories - is that when you are in a specific time - you are there - show us what is there -then, we know what it's like now. I hope you take these suggestions with the love they are offered!
Comment Written 21-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2017
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Hi Crich, I always happy to take suggestions from reviewers. I'm afraid you have found it confusing as this is the second book in this particular saga, so, although it will be a stand-alone story, many of the characters have been established in the first book. There will be flashbacks as we all have them in life when going into a place that holds strong memories.
I have taken on board what you said, though, and removed a couple of things that I agree were unnecessary, as well as some other parts that I realise can be confusing in this particular part.
As for why the young boy can see Veronica and no one else can--it's very strange, as Veronica has previously said, she doesn't know yet how it's possible. No one should be able to see her. But Daveth appeared to Veronica's 5 year old daughter first, in 1991, and wanted help. The Powers That Be, (see beginning of part one) are responisble, and we have yet to find out why. I do hope you will stick with it, as I appreciate the feedback, it's always helpful. Thank you so much for reading this part. :) Sandra xxx
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Thank you so much for the explanation. What a complex story line you are tackling!! I will indeed, stick with it and see where you take me next!
Comment from Kate Tompkins
I'm really enjoying the latest installment of Veronica's adventures. Definitely curious as to who's sending Veronica back and why, and why it's always centered around the same family and location.
I thought your writing was good before, but it seems even better now, though I can't put my finger on why. Something about the style seems suited to the longer form of a novel.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2017
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I'm really enjoying the latest installment of Veronica's adventures. Definitely curious as to who's sending Veronica back and why, and why it's always centered around the same family and location.
I thought your writing was good before, but it seems even better now, though I can't put my finger on why. Something about the style seems suited to the longer form of a novel.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2017
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Oh, I'm so pleased, Kate, that's the nicest thing you could have said. Thank you so much. Big hugs, :) Sandra xxx
