Old Garden
naani contest entry18 total reviews
Comment from marybell1
I enjoyed reading your nanny poem "Old Garden". You followed all the rules for this genre and you chose a lovely picture. Unfortunately there are far too many old neglected gardens around.
Best of luck.
Marybell1.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2017
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I enjoyed reading your nanny poem "Old Garden". You followed all the rules for this genre and you chose a lovely picture. Unfortunately there are far too many old neglected gardens around.
Best of luck.
Marybell1.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2017
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Agree, to many old gardens are not tended anymore. Thank you for the lovely review.
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You are most welcome.
Marybell1.
Comment from lalajovanoski
Hello there friend I really enjoyed reading this poem I find it to be a very nice entry for the contest it has a great measure and flow throughout thank you very much for sharing this and God bless you
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2017
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Hello there friend I really enjoyed reading this poem I find it to be a very nice entry for the contest it has a great measure and flow throughout thank you very much for sharing this and God bless you
Comment Written 13-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the lovely review.
Comment from BeasPeas
Awww! This is beautiful but sad at the same time. Your Naani is illustrated romantically and nostalgically and poem has excellent content. Marilyn
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2017
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Awww! This is beautiful but sad at the same time. Your Naani is illustrated romantically and nostalgically and poem has excellent content. Marilyn
Comment Written 12-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2017
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Thank you do much for this lovely review.
Comment from Nikki-Nicole
I find that 'Old Garden' is a good poem.
It consists of four lines with a syllable count: 6-4-5-7
Total syllables: 22
Lovely artwork. The image shown supports the poem. The background goes well with the art and color of font chosen.
This poem meets the requirements of the contest and makes a good entry.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Thanks for sharing your Naani.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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I find that 'Old Garden' is a good poem.
It consists of four lines with a syllable count: 6-4-5-7
Total syllables: 22
Lovely artwork. The image shown supports the poem. The background goes well with the art and color of font chosen.
This poem meets the requirements of the contest and makes a good entry.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Thanks for sharing your Naani.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-
Comment Written 12-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from angel123
Very nice poem with beautiful imagery. It flows well with a nice message and I enjoyed reading it. Good luck in the contest.
angel123
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Very nice poem with beautiful imagery. It flows well with a nice message and I enjoyed reading it. Good luck in the contest.
angel123
Comment Written 12-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the lovely review.
Comment from kathleenspalding
I love your naani, but to me it shows up with more than four lines, but it's here, so no need to change - obviously passed the compliance committee. This poem packs a huge emotional impact with just an implication. Excellent use of artwork and word. I got the rhythmic division on my third read. Very nice!
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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I love your naani, but to me it shows up with more than four lines, but it's here, so no need to change - obviously passed the compliance committee. This poem packs a huge emotional impact with just an implication. Excellent use of artwork and word. I got the rhythmic division on my third read. Very nice!
Comment Written 12-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Thank you for this enchanting review. I wrote it in four lines, but I see what you mean. I think cell phones it reads differently. Wonderful review - the are so rare
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You're welcome. Yes, different device, makes sense (I'm on a Kindle) Good luck in the contest!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Naani. Roses are normally loads of work and care to get the best out of it. When they are not getting any attention they will still grow and bloom at the right time.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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A very well-written Naani. Roses are normally loads of work and care to get the best out of it. When they are not getting any attention they will still grow and bloom at the right time.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Yes, I agree roses are "high maintenance" I grow them myself. Thank you for the lovely review
Comment from Thal1959
A very nicely composed Naani of a subject that is universally understood. The conclusion reads almost like the Satori of a Haiku. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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A very nicely composed Naani of a subject that is universally understood. The conclusion reads almost like the Satori of a Haiku. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the lovely review, and I do write a lot of haiku so it could transfer over.
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You're welcome - it got my vote.
Comment from Aiona
With twenty-two syllables in four lines, this poem fits the Naani structure. I like its topic, even though it seems to tell a sad story about a once-happy story. The picture chosen (a rose) goes well with the poem as well.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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With twenty-two syllables in four lines, this poem fits the Naani structure. I like its topic, even though it seems to tell a sad story about a once-happy story. The picture chosen (a rose) goes well with the poem as well.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Aiona, if you are going to give a 2 star review, which means improvement, you offer the poet some advice. I find this a very puzzling review, since you seem to like the naani.
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Did I hit two stars? It must have been like 3:00 AM when I did that. I meant to hit either 5 or 6. I may have been out of 6's for the day. In any case, I rectified it!
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Yeah, if I leave a two-star review you bet I would have offered criticisms!
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Thank you for the change
Comment from Ogden
This got my vote. The poem has more substance than the competing entries. It tells a complete story in only four short lines, and draws the reader in to embellish it. Excellent work.
Don (aka Ogden)
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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This got my vote. The poem has more substance than the competing entries. It tells a complete story in only four short lines, and draws the reader in to embellish it. Excellent work.
Don (aka Ogden)
Comment Written 12-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Thank you for your vote! This a lovely review, and you completely "got" my intention with your words. Thank you once again
