2017 JAPANESE POETRY
Viewing comments for Chapter 40 "Haiku (weeds sway)"A collection of Japanese poetry
19 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
Your "plain haiku" is very visual. I hope your computer is cooperating by now. This poem is especially for me, since my son is a huge rail buff. I liked the "bon voyage" shift at the end. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Your "plain haiku" is very visual. I hope your computer is cooperating by now. This poem is especially for me, since my son is a huge rail buff. I liked the "bon voyage" shift at the end. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 25-May-2017
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from emptypage
I like this one. The imagery is good and I can picture it perfectly. "Boy voyage" and its potential layered meaning was good.
Nice.
Sorry to hear about your laptop.
reply by the author on 23-May-2017
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I like this one. The imagery is good and I can picture it perfectly. "Boy voyage" and its potential layered meaning was good.
Nice.
Sorry to hear about your laptop.
Comment Written 23-May-2017
reply by the author on 23-May-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written haiku. The weeds sway in the wind like saying good bye for now. We get o used to our PC and laptops whrn they crash we are totally lost without them.
reply by the author on 21-May-2017
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A very well-written haiku. The weeds sway in the wind like saying good bye for now. We get o used to our PC and laptops whrn they crash we are totally lost without them.
Comment Written 20-May-2017
reply by the author on 21-May-2017
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Thank you :)
Comment from c_lucas
The train tracks have their own history. I like the colorful way you have composed your short poem. The ending is perfect. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
reply by the author on 19-May-2017
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The train tracks have their own history. I like the colorful way you have composed your short poem. The ending is perfect. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
Comment Written 19-May-2017
reply by the author on 19-May-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from MizKat
Hi Gypsy,
I think it's great that you write such short poems. I always write long ones
and now I'm having a tough time to put them up. I don't know what's
wrong as I never had problems with them before.
Kat
reply by the author on 19-May-2017
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Hi Gypsy,
I think it's great that you write such short poems. I always write long ones
and now I'm having a tough time to put them up. I don't know what's
wrong as I never had problems with them before.
Kat
Comment Written 19-May-2017
reply by the author on 19-May-2017
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Thank you
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You're very welcome.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Oh, I really liked this, Teach.
Now I know why you're the teacher and I am merely your humble student.
Of course, I've actually known why for quite some time now, heh-heh.
Minimalist haiku to be sure, but excellent nonetheless.
My only regret is that I have no more sixes available.
Oh well, it's often the thought that counts.
Wonderfully well done!
reply by the author on 19-May-2017
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Oh, I really liked this, Teach.
Now I know why you're the teacher and I am merely your humble student.
Of course, I've actually known why for quite some time now, heh-heh.
Minimalist haiku to be sure, but excellent nonetheless.
My only regret is that I have no more sixes available.
Oh well, it's often the thought that counts.
Wonderfully well done!
Comment Written 19-May-2017
reply by the author on 19-May-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words sweetie pie.
Gypsy sensei
Comment from Rasmine
I hope you get that situated. Hate that when that happens to me.
Your haiku reminds me of the train tracks in Hartford. I never went to them much but I still remember my grandmother stopping and all the overgrowth on the tracks.
Have a great weekend.
reply by the author on 19-May-2017
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I hope you get that situated. Hate that when that happens to me.
Your haiku reminds me of the train tracks in Hartford. I never went to them much but I still remember my grandmother stopping and all the overgrowth on the tracks.
Have a great weekend.
Comment Written 19-May-2017
reply by the author on 19-May-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words sweetie pie.
Gypsy
Comment from dragonpoet
Yes a trip takes us away from all of live's problems of which weeds are one. We say bon voyage to weed when we pick the and the same to our problems, for a time, when we go on vacation. This is to remind us that maybe we can cross those tracks and solve those problems when we return.
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 19-May-2017
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Yes a trip takes us away from all of live's problems of which weeds are one. We say bon voyage to weed when we pick the and the same to our problems, for a time, when we go on vacation. This is to remind us that maybe we can cross those tracks and solve those problems when we return.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 19-May-2017
reply by the author on 19-May-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words.
Gypsy
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No problem, Gypsy.
Joan
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi Gypsy Yes a good haiku, The first two lines painted the picture and I thought your Satori was clever and appropriate (Didn't need an image as the words created this) Cheers Christine
reply by the author on 19-May-2017
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Hi Gypsy Yes a good haiku, The first two lines painted the picture and I thought your Satori was clever and appropriate (Didn't need an image as the words created this) Cheers Christine
Comment Written 18-May-2017
reply by the author on 19-May-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words sweetie pie.
Cheers,
Gypsy
Comment from Gloria ....
I like this haiku a lot, Gypsy. A terrific haiku, with vivid concrete imagery and a wistful and fascinating satori. The fact that it is weeds rather than grass lends an entirely different tone to the whimsy of your write.
Super job.
Gloria
reply by the author on 19-May-2017
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I like this haiku a lot, Gypsy. A terrific haiku, with vivid concrete imagery and a wistful and fascinating satori. The fact that it is weeds rather than grass lends an entirely different tone to the whimsy of your write.
Super job.
Gloria
Comment Written 18-May-2017
reply by the author on 19-May-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words sweetie pie.Super thank you for the six stars.
Gypsy