Comment from Mabaker

Excellent

This was well written you could very well win this contest, you included a few endings to choose from. I hope you do well you put in a great effort. Good luck. Marbaker

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2017

Thanks so much.

Comment from Rasmine

Excellent

Hello, :)

My favorite one is the third ending. I love a happy ending :). My second choice is the second choice. The first is kind of sad.

I wish you luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017

Thanks much.

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi there,

Well this one fits the bill in regard to contest requirements. A little melodramatic, but that's never hurt anyone. lol

In a slow ballet, she stepped off the edge of the rocks, tumbling, almost gracefully to the churning water below.- this may be over-egging the description a little.

I don't think ending number 3 really makes sense in the context of the story...

 Comment Written 20-May-2017

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reply by the author on 22-May-2017

I thought it was rather corny myself, truth be known but never tried the 3 endings before so thought I'd give it a go. I'll have to take a look at that 3rd one again.

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

I love Ending #2. Within the lines of your story, it seems that she is a strong woman and I can see her being graced with a new life to replace those that she lost. She will have someone to go through the rest of her life.

The story is well formed and I hope you do well in the contest,
~patty~

 Comment Written 19-May-2017

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reply by the author on 19-May-2017

Thanks much. Ending #2 seems to be a more popular one.

Comment from Cmelton

Excellent

My favorite ending is the third one. I think she should never give up. I also like the fact they are together again. It brings the story around full circle. I like the three ideas you have, but like i said, I think the third one is definitely the best.

 Comment Written 19-May-2017

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reply by the author on 19-May-2017

Thanks so much for reading and giving your opinion.

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

I like this a lot... alternate endings! I choose number 3, since I like happy endings and write them myself.

He felt badly, but soon after <-- Not badly, just bad. BADLY is an adverb and tells how you feel with your body/fingers/etc. BAD is an adjective, which you want here. He felt BAD is correct. BAD is a feeling. BADLY describes feeling with numb fingers so you don't feel correctly. Common mistake, but please remember it.

One way to check which is correct is to turn the sentence around so that BAD/BADLY is in front of FEELING:

He had a badly feeling... wrong.
He had a bad feeling...right.

 Comment Written 18-May-2017

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reply by the author on 19-May-2017

Thanks so much-I contemplated that for some time and should have gone with my first instinct which was bad....or looked it up. Haha.

Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

This is the third of these stories I've read. I must say, They are not my favorite style. I already know which ending I would choose. I want to know what your choice is.

 Comment Written 18-May-2017

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reply by the author on 18-May-2017

I don't usually go for the happy ones. Too corny for me. So the 1st was what I really thought of. I am not at all sure where this came from as is not my type but just wanted to give it a try as I have never done this before.

Comment from kahpot

Excellent

An excellent read, I like the thought of only one love as that is me, and your character got her chance to be with hers and I think ending number two is beautiful****kahpot

 Comment Written 18-May-2017

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reply by the author on 18-May-2017

Thanks much. I am not usually one for happy endings so I had to think on this one-haha.