Comment from Ric Myworld

Excellent

I'm afraid that every vivid image you've bored into my brain may play back in my dreams tonight, and tomorrow night, and... Thanks for sharing your fine story. :-)

 Comment Written 30-May-2017

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reply by the author on 31-May-2017

Thanks so much. Only happy to scare-haha. Sweet dreams.

Comment from kathleenspalding

Excellent

Oh, yuck!!! Good one! She really got what was coming to her! Very well written. Just a couple nits -

Stepmother, really...maybe split this into 2 paragraphs as it's pretty long?
Billy hoped his (lower case dad)
...he (had) (wandered instead of wondered)

capitalize Ma

...dear son. (delete ")Had to...

that's it. Great story!

 Comment Written 29-May-2017

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reply by the author on 30-May-2017

Thanks much for the review and great corrections.

reply by kathleenspalding on 30-May-2017

You're welcome. :-)

reply by the author on 30-May-2017

Thanks much for the review and great corrections.

reply by kathleenspalding on 30-May-2017

You're welcome

Comment from JDRBAR

Good

I liked the overall of the plot, but I'd also have liked a slight explanation of why this woman was killing men, and who the men were who helped her. I found it fairly well written otherwise.

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 Comment Written 29-May-2017

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reply by the author on 30-May-2017

Thanks.

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This story, The Quarry, is pretty good considering the idea of a quarry was thrust upon you. The hints that dad was missing worked pretty well. I guess there was another victim, perhaps , in the trunk of the car which spun off. Nice ending.

 Comment Written 21-May-2017

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reply by the author on 22-May-2017

Thanks, Bill-appreciate the read.

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Poor kid! He will now have to live with the knowledge he killed another human being. Even if she was a mean and sadistic woman, she was human.

The story was well told and the opening line was used as a good starting point. Good luck in the contest,
~patty~

 Comment Written 19-May-2017

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reply by the author on 19-May-2017

Thanks much. These prompts are always interesting.

Comment from country ranch writer

Excellent

What comes around goes around and evil ended hers. She got what she deserved in the end.Hope they caught the other two guys that we in on the killings with her. Goes to show you greed never gets you no where's.

 Comment Written 18-May-2017

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reply by the author on 19-May-2017

Thanks much and I hope they get the other too also!!

reply by country ranch writer on 19-May-2017

Hugs

Comment from oliver818

Excellent

I like what you did with the prompt, a nice creepy story. Poor mum, but poor kid too. Thanks for sharing this, good luck with the competition and have a really great day

 Comment Written 18-May-2017

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reply by the author on 19-May-2017

Thanks so much for reading.

Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson

Excellent

This is a fantastic fiction starter. It absolutely kept me on the edge of my seat wondering what was happening next. Bravo! Great ending. ~Kerry

 Comment Written 18-May-2017

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reply by the author on 18-May-2017

Thanks so much for this encouraging review.

reply by Kerry Foley Robinson on 18-May-2017

You are very welcome:)

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written short fiction starter. A step mother made the father disappear, and when the boy sees and realizes what happened to his father she wants to kill the boy, but he managed to let her land in the water and got herself drowned.

 Comment Written 18-May-2017

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reply by the author on 18-May-2017

Thanks so much for reading.

Comment from Craigitar

Excellent

Well written and imaginative story. You did well spinning off of the contest starter sentence. The story kept my interest and had a satisfyingly gruesome conclusion. Good job and luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 18-May-2017

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reply by the author on 18-May-2017

Thanks so much for your thoughtful review.