Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Very interesting story. If only all the tramps could get a comeuppance such as this!
You wove the tale with a great deal of detail and intrigue. Your prose flowed well, and I was reading for content, so I didn't catch any nits or SPAG. Good luck in the contest,
~patty~

 Comment Written 04-May-2017

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reply by the author on 04-May-2017

Thanks much for reading.

Comment from Rasmine

Excellent

Good sentence: "The same thing she wants from Harold, the math teacher at the elementary school and Billy Joe the bartender and every other walkin' penis she has her eyes on, that's what!"
"Oh, Mary Beth," Candy said in a syrupy voice. You are just who I wanted to see (Watch your quote marks, I found this a couple more times).
Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 02-May-2017

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reply by the author on 02-May-2017

Thanks much for the review as well as the great corrections.

Comment from oliver818

Excellent

Nice story! I like the twist, and I really hope I never meet anyone like that. I like the joke with 'stab', very clever. Thanks for sharing and have a great day!

 Comment Written 02-May-2017

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reply by the author on 02-May-2017

Thanks Oliver. Much appreciated.

Comment from Nikki-Nicole

Excellent

Well-written short story.
Nicely polished.
Great dialogue.
Outstanding artwork: The image shown supports the story.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Thanks for sharing.
Good luck with your future writing!
-Nicole-

 Comment Written 01-May-2017

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reply by the author on 02-May-2017

Thanks much for reading and the kind review.