Perennials of War
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Comment from bookishfabler
"Jeff mentioned that the bull tatt means 'one who makes ordered physical executions happen'. Does that mean Morozov wants me dead? If it does, why are you discussing finger sandwiches?" (It is always a good time to discuss finger sandwiches)
I hope they get some answers.
Hugs Heidi
reply by the author on 06-May-2017
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"Jeff mentioned that the bull tatt means 'one who makes ordered physical executions happen'. Does that mean Morozov wants me dead? If it does, why are you discussing finger sandwiches?" (It is always a good time to discuss finger sandwiches)
I hope they get some answers.
Hugs Heidi
Comment Written 05-May-2017
reply by the author on 06-May-2017
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
Comment from pbomar1115
There seems to be an investigation. A life about the happening of the class which involves the help. A painting has to be worth a lot of money is the interest. The writing and dialogue are great.
reply by the author on 06-May-2017
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There seems to be an investigation. A life about the happening of the class which involves the help. A painting has to be worth a lot of money is the interest. The writing and dialogue are great.
Comment Written 03-May-2017
reply by the author on 06-May-2017
Thank you for leaving this kind review.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Barbara, I feel so badly that I have been unable to follow this book; I did tell you I wouldn't be able to, but I simply had to drop into a chapter, and I am glad I did. Your story reminds me of just how important it is to anchor a scene so that the characters aren't simply 'talking heads'. You do it well, my friend. I can't comment on a whole lot else, but that is one trait that's so important. So is dialogue, and yours is always so authentic. Nicely done, girlfriend. :))
reply by the author on 03-May-2017
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Barbara, I feel so badly that I have been unable to follow this book; I did tell you I wouldn't be able to, but I simply had to drop into a chapter, and I am glad I did. Your story reminds me of just how important it is to anchor a scene so that the characters aren't simply 'talking heads'. You do it well, my friend. I can't comment on a whole lot else, but that is one trait that's so important. So is dialogue, and yours is always so authentic. Nicely done, girlfriend. :))
Comment Written 03-May-2017
reply by the author on 03-May-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're most welcome.
Comment from Heidi M
Shana is in a difficult situation. She probably just wants to leave and forget all about that painting. She's in danger and doesn't quite know how to deal with it, but she's pretty sure discussing food choices is not the best option.
reply by the author on 03-May-2017
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Shana is in a difficult situation. She probably just wants to leave and forget all about that painting. She's in danger and doesn't quite know how to deal with it, but she's pretty sure discussing food choices is not the best option.
Comment Written 03-May-2017
reply by the author on 03-May-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from KyColonel Randal
"Anderson divorce/custody attorney." > Anderson's
I will have to find the previous posts and catch up on this story. I would be interested in learning how you discovered you chose a real person for "Ivan." I take it from the Jewish name and the mention of genocide that this book touches on the Holocaust? I look forward to catching up on this interesting tale.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-May-2017
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"Anderson divorce/custody attorney." > Anderson's
I will have to find the previous posts and catch up on this story. I would be interested in learning how you discovered you chose a real person for "Ivan." I take it from the Jewish name and the mention of genocide that this book touches on the Holocaust? I look forward to catching up on this interesting tale.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 02-May-2017
reply by the author on 03-May-2017
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Yes this book does touch on the Holocaust. A reviewer happen to know of the real person. It completely by accident. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ben Colder
Sounds like somebody else I know about putting a foot in a mouth. LOL. Another good write and this one takes the spot light for now. Best to you. Well done.
reply by the author on 03-May-2017
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Sounds like somebody else I know about putting a foot in a mouth. LOL. Another good write and this one takes the spot light for now. Best to you. Well done.
Comment Written 02-May-2017
reply by the author on 03-May-2017
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
Comment from robyn corum
Barbara,
I know I've missed a lot of this story and I hate that. I've been off-site a lot recently.
This chapter seemed well-written, but I was a bit discouraged by the beginning scene because it feels so bland and unemotional. It's like a narrator just telling the story, but not imparting any FEELING into it. (sorry!) I would love to get more into the minds of those characters by seeing some emotions on their faces or in their actions, etc. There's a lot of TELLING and not a great deal of SHOWING there.
Also:
1.) "Don't you have some/place to go?" Anderson glanced at Philip.
Thanks! Good luck!
reply by the author on 03-May-2017
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Barbara,
I know I've missed a lot of this story and I hate that. I've been off-site a lot recently.
This chapter seemed well-written, but I was a bit discouraged by the beginning scene because it feels so bland and unemotional. It's like a narrator just telling the story, but not imparting any FEELING into it. (sorry!) I would love to get more into the minds of those characters by seeing some emotions on their faces or in their actions, etc. There's a lot of TELLING and not a great deal of SHOWING there.
Also:
1.) "Don't you have some/place to go?" Anderson glanced at Philip.
Thanks! Good luck!
Comment Written 02-May-2017
reply by the author on 03-May-2017
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Thank you for the kind review and I have fixed that error.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Quite naturally, Shana is worried, for dilemma and indefinite maturation of the meeting and further negotiation; I liked the act of investigation read.
reply by the author on 03-May-2017
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Quite naturally, Shana is worried, for dilemma and indefinite maturation of the meeting and further negotiation; I liked the act of investigation read.
Comment Written 02-May-2017
reply by the author on 03-May-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara. This is another great chapter, and I just wonder how it will pan out getting the heirloom back. I really like this chapter. It's a great chapter. Looking forward to reading on. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 03-May-2017
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Hi Barbara. This is another great chapter, and I just wonder how it will pan out getting the heirloom back. I really like this chapter. It's a great chapter. Looking forward to reading on. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 02-May-2017
reply by the author on 03-May-2017
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I am interested in find out if Shana will get the family heirloom back myself. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from dweigt
Another good post. I like how you structure your dialogue to minimize the use of tags. It's generally very effective, but there was one point where I think it was a little ambiguous:
"It's probably just a coincidence that those particular men were here. They were simply available for this mission, so they got it." -- I'm almost certain this is Shana speaking, but I did wonder for a moment.
I'd also like to know more of Shana's reaction when Anderson lifts her chin. That is a gentle but familiar gesture. Did she welcome it? Did she brush his hand away? It seems a chance to show us more of the relationship developing between them.
Looking forward to the next section.
Keep writing!
reply by the author on 03-May-2017
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Another good post. I like how you structure your dialogue to minimize the use of tags. It's generally very effective, but there was one point where I think it was a little ambiguous:
"It's probably just a coincidence that those particular men were here. They were simply available for this mission, so they got it." -- I'm almost certain this is Shana speaking, but I did wonder for a moment.
I'd also like to know more of Shana's reaction when Anderson lifts her chin. That is a gentle but familiar gesture. Did she welcome it? Did she brush his hand away? It seems a chance to show us more of the relationship developing between them.
Looking forward to the next section.
Keep writing!
Comment Written 02-May-2017
reply by the author on 03-May-2017
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I added to both those area. Shana is so wrapped up in her own issues that she's not to concerned about feelings for Anderson which will be shown soon. Thank you for the kind review.
