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off the chart genuis

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Comment from Eternal Muse
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This is such a lovely, sweet poem, dear Michael, and congratulations in placing third.

You are a romantic guy, and it shows. I thoroughly enjoyed your elegantly flowing lines, a marvelous presentation and what this poem stands for.

A pleasure to read and review.

 Comment Written 06-May-2017

Comment from lalajovanoski
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I really found this piece to be uniquely written and full of depth and meaning. Best wishes in the contest and thank you so much for sharing this wonderful piece.

 Comment Written 06-May-2017


reply by the author on 08-May-2017
    it was...by Mau....-smile-
    yes it is...again it was written by Mau....so...youre very welcome. love Michael
Comment from bertranclan
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Lovely, intriguing poem! My Grandmother's name was Beulah, so that line was special to me. I loved "intoxicating quill"--very good imagery. Thanks for posting!

 Comment Written 05-May-2017


reply by the author on 05-May-2017
    Beulah...what great name.. evoking a knowing of a paradise yet unseen. but for the glow from them who know the power of
    God's honor. thank you. love Michael
Comment from JJInfinity805
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"Whispering secret things made special". "She speaks in love poems". "Whispering secret things made satisfied". My favorite three lines of the poem. Those were powerful to me. The poem as a whole is fantastic, but those three lines stood out the most.

 Comment Written 05-May-2017

Comment from Connie C
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Congratulations on placing in the POM contest, a well-deserved honor.
I am happy to see someone honor MissMerri as you do here with such lovely lines. My favorite stanza here is the first one, but it is all so very clever and such a very fitting description of such a lovely lady and her beautiful poetry.
Connie

 Comment Written 05-May-2017


reply by the author on 05-May-2017
    Hi Connie...-smile-
    yes I'm happy Tom chose it for consideration.
    if anyone deserves honored notice, and there are many, she stands out exceptional. I hear rumor shes getting ready to publish...cant wait. love Michael
Comment from lyenochka
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What a beautiful tribute to Adonna (MissMerri). I love that you cover her poems of faith using "the language that David owned. " Pleasant meter accented with near rhymes and pleasant assonance.

 Comment Written 05-May-2017


reply by the author on 05-May-2017
    Hello...-smile-
    well she said she owes me an ice cream cone so I'm screaming...you betcha! ...thank you so much. love Michael
Comment from Elijah Davis
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Very smooth and easy read. The whole tone, depth, and description of the work to me could only be defined as peaceful tranquility. Good job and keep it up!

 Comment Written 05-May-2017

Comment from PAIKNE85
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I want to give this a 4 star because it follows the #1 thing I was taught about poetry: poetry has no rules. But I just couldnt get passed the grammatical errors and abstract vocabulary. Points for creativity and this is just my humble opinion so no hard feelings.

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 Comment Written 04-May-2017


reply by the author on 05-May-2017
    -smile-...hey Paiky...I read your mother nature poem by the way who in the world could this be...and I got a say any man who penned "a tree is a child of 2, loving peoples story"...certainly knows what hes talking about. noted...your humble opinion...-wink-
reply by PAIKNE85 on 05-May-2017
    I don't understand your reply...it seems bitter sweet. Not to be rude, but could you be more blunt/direct with what you mean to say? It's all I am able to comprehend without a visual or any sound. Sorry
reply by the author on 05-May-2017
    sure...I'm here to help...
    what we have here is failure to communicate...or more accurately translate emotional experience into common ground we all walk on...you see some men just cant get their mind ah wrapped around it...and ah its truly a pity. but hey I'm a big fan a Annie...follow me...-smile-
reply by PAIKNE85 on 05-May-2017
    Is there something wrong with you maybe? You seem very random and maybe even unstable...sorry, but I have no idea who or what you are talking about. Thanks anyway, have a good one.
reply by the author on 05-May-2017
    okay Doctor Painky...see ya next time...-handwave-
reply by PAIKNE85 on 05-May-2017
    Ill pray for you man.
Comment from sandramitchell
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I saw your name in the PoM and had to come and read it. I haven't been on here much lately. Miss Merri must be thrilled to bit with this beautiful poem, Michael, only you can write about a person with that special ingredient you have that makes your words angelic. This tribute is superb, my dear friend, and she is most deserving of it too. There is a subtle rhyme in this one, and many of your lines are just so beautiful they brought a tear to my eyes. You have my vote, and I hope you win. Much love, my dear Michael. Sandy xxx

 Comment Written 04-May-2017


reply by the author on 05-May-2017
    Hey Sandy...been awhile I missed you ...-smile-
    thank you for wrapping me up in your love. and no tears please...big hugs and love...Michael
Comment from Joan E.
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I'm still trying to catch up... I enjoyed your animation to help set the mood and your dedication to a friend. Thank you for allowing us to stroll "in the gardens" and hear the divine music. I was intoxicated by the "quill" that could "listen twice"! Smiles- Joan

 Comment Written 04-May-2017


reply by the author on 04-May-2017
    well I run every day Joan...
    I'm just in better shape thats all...let's pick it up...we got hill coming up here..I'm a hop up it on one leg watch this...love Michael
reply by Joan E. on 04-May-2017
    Oh, oh--you're putting me to shame--I walk twice a week and can't imagine hopping up hill! LOL- Joan