The Cautious Woman
Questions for a prospective husband.29 total reviews
Comment from P. G. Simpkins
Hello there
I really liked the poetic influences weaved in through this short piece, it made it appear fresh and rather romantic. I liked the rather sarcastic and humorous tones that you portrayed also.
I do think I need to break away from poetry at times and experiment with longer pieces, maybe flash fiction.
Well done : )
reply by the author on 02-May-2017
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Hello there
I really liked the poetic influences weaved in through this short piece, it made it appear fresh and rather romantic. I liked the rather sarcastic and humorous tones that you portrayed also.
I do think I need to break away from poetry at times and experiment with longer pieces, maybe flash fiction.
Well done : )
Comment Written 02-May-2017
reply by the author on 02-May-2017
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Thanks for reading and commenting. You might enjoy the flash fiction. I enter them every once in a while just fro the challenge and fun of it.
Comment from LIJ Red
Glad to see the note about the quotes. I was wondering what that gal had been snorting or smoking.
seamstress your wanting seamstress you are (you're) wanting--but if this is direct quote from old book, never mind....
excellent post.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2017
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Glad to see the note about the quotes. I was wondering what that gal had been snorting or smoking.
seamstress your wanting seamstress you are (you're) wanting--but if this is direct quote from old book, never mind....
excellent post.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2017
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Thank you for reading and commenting. Those are direct quotes from the poem and I noticed some of the grammar was wrong in them, but it said direct quotes so I wrote them as they were written.
Comment from BeasPeas
Too bad more of us didn't ask these questions when we got married. It surely would have saved years of trouble and unhappiness if the guy could have answer them correctly and meant them. Congratulations on your win for this terrific entry. Marilyn
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
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Too bad more of us didn't ask these questions when we got married. It surely would have saved years of trouble and unhappiness if the guy could have answer them correctly and meant them. Congratulations on your win for this terrific entry. Marilyn
Comment Written 28-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
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Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. It was a fun story to write.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
I think that must be the most unromantic
proposal of marriage I've heard about...
altho someone told me once they were
proposed to by a man who was tired
of paying such high taxes!!!
A well-written piece, my friend - good entry for the contest ---
good luck to you.
Margaret
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
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I think that must be the most unromantic
proposal of marriage I've heard about...
altho someone told me once they were
proposed to by a man who was tired
of paying such high taxes!!!
A well-written piece, my friend - good entry for the contest ---
good luck to you.
Margaret
Comment Written 27-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
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Thank you, Margaret. I had fun writing this story. I have been trying to find more time to write, but it is difficult right now.
Comment from Vijay Kumar V
So true and something very sensitive too. Every lines a great quote but to choose one , this is my favourite, "If you cannot do this, a laundress and cook you can hire with little to pay; but a woman's heart and a woman's life are not to be won that way." A great entry to the contest. Good luck and have a nice day. Namaskaram
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
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So true and something very sensitive too. Every lines a great quote but to choose one , this is my favourite, "If you cannot do this, a laundress and cook you can hire with little to pay; but a woman's heart and a woman's life are not to be won that way." A great entry to the contest. Good luck and have a nice day. Namaskaram
Comment Written 27-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
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Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. It was a lot of fun to write this story. I need to find time to write but it is difficult right now.
Comment from Cmelton
I liked the response from the man. I thought it was funny, because I think a man would have responded exactly that way if a woman started talking like that. I know I would. I don't know the poem, but it seems to fit well into the situation, and the man's responses fit very well with in the scenario. A great little humor piece. I am glad I read it.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
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I liked the response from the man. I thought it was funny, because I think a man would have responded exactly that way if a woman started talking like that. I know I would. I don't know the poem, but it seems to fit well into the situation, and the man's responses fit very well with in the scenario. A great little humor piece. I am glad I read it.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
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Thanks. Yeah, my husband would think I lost it if I started talking like that. LOL
Comment from wondertwin
Great job with the dialog challenge. You crafted it in such a way that the characters came off the page. Very well done. Hope you win! Blessings, AmyJo
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
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Great job with the dialog challenge. You crafted it in such a way that the characters came off the page. Very well done. Hope you win! Blessings, AmyJo
Comment Written 27-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
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Thanks for taking the time to read and comment. It was a fun story to write. I might try another of those dialogue-only stories one day.
Comment from MelB
You did a great job on the dialog. I don't get the feeling this guy was truly understanding the questions she was asking him. Although, he did give her a few good points about himself.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
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You did a great job on the dialog. I don't get the feeling this guy was truly understanding the questions she was asking him. Although, he did give her a few good points about himself.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
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Thank you for reading and commenting. I didn't intend that he should understand her. It was a fun story to write.
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You're welcome. I know that is what you intended.
Comment from fafa
A good chapter of its book that I will have to read some chapters more to define my aptitude for thinking, I liked this one and I see that is marked like recognized work, congratulations
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
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A good chapter of its book that I will have to read some chapters more to define my aptitude for thinking, I liked this one and I see that is marked like recognized work, congratulations
Comment Written 26-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
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Thank you for reading and commenting. It was kind of fun to write this story. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
I think this was one of the best entries for this contest that I have read so far. Congratulations~! The only 'flaw' I noticed is that in two instances you have made new paragraphs for the same person speaking and have started off the paragraph with new quotation marks -- the previous paragraph should have them left off - so we can know for certain it's the same person still talking. Make sense?
Good luck!
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
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Dear Mystery Writer,
I think this was one of the best entries for this contest that I have read so far. Congratulations~! The only 'flaw' I noticed is that in two instances you have made new paragraphs for the same person speaking and have started off the paragraph with new quotation marks -- the previous paragraph should have them left off - so we can know for certain it's the same person still talking. Make sense?
Good luck!
Comment Written 26-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
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Thanks. Yep, I goofed up on the quotation marks, and yes it does make sense.
