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 Comment Written 07-May-2017

Comment from JDRBAR
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I have no idea of what this play is about, but once I started reading, I couldn't stop. Now I have to find the previous acts. Very well done. Good luck with this.

 Comment Written 05-May-2017

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Good read again buddy. Thanks for the laugh. Now some spags...American again hehe....I DID want to cho(o)se Dora.

???I cho(o??)se ... Dorrrrrasasas

Can't remember if you came by for the Mid Chapters of my book. Someone asked for the song about my time at Grace brothers. I now have a link to my website in ch 22...I tried to add the MP3 of the song but it was too big. Wedding Chapter coming up with SDA Men's Choir Youtube singing Psalm 27. Now I have the Funny money to get it up.

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2017

Comment from Thomas Bowling
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The girl in your picture was my girlfriend in grade school. I was in fourth grade and she was my teacher. You've presented a very good script. I like your style.

You use very little direction. I like that. I try to limit direction in my scripts.

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2017

Comment from ~Dovey
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Mikey,

Once again you've proven that you have a vivid imagination! Now I have to wonder which of the scenarios was correct about Dora. I'll put my money on Michael doing a kind act for the wallflower. I have a hard time imagining him as the Neanderthal from the cave lol This is a riveting story unfolding in your screenplay. Although, I still have no clue why your 6th grade teacher is playing God, but, then again, I don't think Michael does either lol

Awaiting the next installment...

Kim

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2017

Comment from Pearl Edwards
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It's interesting in this part 3 to get the same scene from different aspects even though both versions has Michael being first up. Through your scene setting and dialogue it is easy to imagine this scene, great write.
cheers
valda

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2017

Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
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This is just the sort of thing that would get an Academy award, and of course it is a film, Mikey. I think it's pretty brilliant and goes beyond the depth of the bottom of everything, kind of gougingly refreshing, Giddy

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2017

Comment from frierajac
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Although it is true that an observer can't always tell how a story
is going to turn out, even when its finished. And that's OK, I would like to know if this is about a ghost-soul or about
a dream, the old adage, life is a dream, and if it is a dream,
is it supposed to evoke an abstract idea> A repentant state of absolute pessimism, perhaps

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2017

Comment from Gloria ....
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Ha, another trip through Wonderland in only a fabulous round about way that you can do. So the shoe was on the other foot and that went well too.

Very interesting philosophy, Mav. I am looking forward to where you go next. Too bad about old lady Bickersfield though. Maybe she'll come into a future part of the past.

Excellent scripting.

Ange

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2017

Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
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A very interesting script, mikey. Very well written and I love the different views of the same event. I missed the first parts --In fact my reviewing seems to have come to a screeching halt lately. Quality writing here, my friend. One spag:

He is know moved (now)~Debbie


 Comment Written 18-Apr-2017