Walking in the Woods
A Haibun4 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Good job with your haibun about the woods and revitalisation. Sometimes all it takes is a quick walk in nature. Good form and meaningful. I enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
Good job with your haibun about the woods and revitalisation. Sometimes all it takes is a quick walk in nature. Good form and meaningful. I enjoyed it.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Thanks for the critique zanya
Comment from Realist101
Ah, Zanya, this speaks to me so well...how I love the woods. The smell of loam and a lonely oriole singing its heart out. I like your photo too...perfect match with your words. :) Maybe someday you can work at home? Best wishes in the contest too. Susan
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
Ah, Zanya, this speaks to me so well...how I love the woods. The smell of loam and a lonely oriole singing its heart out. I like your photo too...perfect match with your words. :) Maybe someday you can work at home? Best wishes in the contest too. Susan
Comment Written 17-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Thanks for reading and the review zanya
Comment from humpwhistle
Ah, sylvan postponements, more likely.
I have a bit of a tense problem here.
In the opening, you mention you're already on your work commute
when you decide to divert into the woods.
Only later do you mention lacing up your boots.
Were you carrying your boots?
Also, I wonder if such a short piece can support two 'brisks'?
Just one man's observations.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
Ah, sylvan postponements, more likely.
I have a bit of a tense problem here.
In the opening, you mention you're already on your work commute
when you decide to divert into the woods.
Only later do you mention lacing up your boots.
Were you carrying your boots?
Also, I wonder if such a short piece can support two 'brisks'?
Just one man's observations.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 17-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Thanks for reading -and critique zanya
Comment from Nikki-Nicole
This is a good read.
'On my early morning work commute, I divert, to take a brisk walk in the woods.
Forest walks reboot our sensory perceptions sylvan solutions.'
I like how the beginning ties in with the end.
Great artwork: The image is a good match for this writing.
Best of luck to you in the contest.'
Thanks for sharing this.
Good luck with your future writing!
-Nicole-
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
This is a good read.
'On my early morning work commute, I divert, to take a brisk walk in the woods.
Forest walks reboot our sensory perceptions sylvan solutions.'
I like how the beginning ties in with the end.
Great artwork: The image is a good match for this writing.
Best of luck to you in the contest.'
Thanks for sharing this.
Good luck with your future writing!
-Nicole-
Comment Written 17-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Thanks for the critique zanya